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  • Name: Iokath
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  • Coordinates: 8-C (Located Wild Space of the Unknown Reigons)
  • Hyperlane: N/A
  • Climate: Cloudy/Foggy/Weather Manipulation System (Coursant has one of those weather manipulation systems as well)
  • Terrain: City/Giant Factory//Droid-Made
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  • Rotation: Iokath's rotation is in an angle that causes its night and day to be split up in equal halves of 24 hours (12 for each), this can be changed if the Planet's engines ever work
  • Inhabitants: Extinct, Droids
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  • Resources: Droid parts, things that make weapons work, Vehicle Production, Weapon Production, Droids, and Droid Production
  • Government: The Strongest and most Powerful Droid is viewed as a God and is the Leader of the planet and the Droids of said planet (Iokath), if the "God" is killed, then their murder is viewed as the new "God" and Leader, Organics aren't allowed to obtain this rank if they somehow survive the planets hatred towards organic beings and kill their leader, instead they'll have a bounty put on their head and the entire planet of Iokath after them, in this case, a gladiatorial tournament will be held to see who is the new "God", any Organic that dares to go in their system is met with heavy aggressiveness and hatred towards the organic being (if said Organic though shows to be pro-droid then they'll be met with less hatred and aggressiveness, Organics will be shown even less of those two if they are cyborgs) however any Droid is welcomed with open arms to join them in their "Droid Utopia"
  • Culture: A hatred for Organic beings and Organic life
  • Technology: A Planetary Shield, multiple fully functioning droid, weapons and vehicle factories
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  • Satellites: Has debris floating around the planet like a ring (as shown in the planet's image above)
  • History: Exctinction Wars: A war fought by the used to be alive, but is now extinct Organic beings that used to inhabit Iokath and the Droids that did and still inhabit Iokath, due to being in the Unknown Reigons and in Wild Space, the Organic life forms could not contact any outside government for assistant on quelling the Droids on the Droid made planet the Organic beings had forced the Droids to build, and due to the Droids knowing everything about the planet, since they made it, they controlled a huge majority of the weapons and vehicle manufacturing establishments on the planet same for the droid factories, eventually due to running out of supplies and soldiers, the Organic beings of Iokath surrendered to the Droids, said Droids decided to treat the Organics beings as how they treated the Droids once, Slaves, but instead of being bar tenders and what not, the Droids forced the Organic beings to kill each other off into extinction in gladitorial duels for the Droids enjoyment and pleasure, after the war had ended, the Droids viewed the strongest of their ranks as a "God", this said "God" then ruled the planet, but eventually fell to a Droid stronger then them, the Droid that kills the "God" droid is then viewed as the new "God" and leader of the planet
  • Intent: My future plans for this planet is for it to become a home base for a massive Galaxy wide Droid Rebellion, as it makes sense since this planet was mostly occupied by droids and had a Droid that was treated like a god that hated Organics, and when that Droid Rebellion is eventually kicked off the planet and out of the system, all major sides of the war might want to control it due to its amount of droid, weapons and vehicle factories that are operating still and are very efficient in what they build, if not the droids might just rally back to it eventually
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@Malon guessing from the other planet that's in this section, you are the person tomapprove thse...right?
 

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Zakuul is currently not confirmed canon, actually. SWTOR is the only ongoing project in the Legends lore since it heavily references a lot of Legends material. Zakuul has been mentioned in canon material, but only by name; we don't know how much of Zakuul in SWTOR will carry over.
 

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Zakuul is currently not confirmed canon, actually. SWTOR is the only ongoing project in the Legends lore since it heavily references a lot of Legends material. Zakuul has been mentioned in canon material, but only by name; we don't know how much of Zakuul in SWTOR will carry over.
I meant on the site the Zakuul planet profile has the canon prefix, also I have seen the atlas, there was mistakes in the updated polish one, the author stated the book is canon, but all mentions of Zakuul are not, though seeming as the planet is already in the RP can't do much about that. (If proof is needed on this statement I have said I got it)
 

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Gah, SWTOR lore.

In all seriousness, the only problem I can really see is that you've referenced the events (the ring formation was the biggest offender), which aren't Canon. If I'm not mistaken, the planet itself could be used, sans mention of the stuff that happened in the game. If you'll take a look at the Zakuul profile, it tries to integrate the world with Canon stuff. Only way this will work is if you do the same.

If it turns out I'm wrong and you can't use this, a better alternative would be the tragically unsung Droid planet of M4-78.
 

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Okay, so I have a few issues with this, so forgive the enormity of the post that's about to follow:

The "Canon" prefix on this site is meant to indicate any material that comes from an official Star Wars source. That may be Legends or Disney's canon, but you get my point: official. That's why Zakuul has that label here on the site. I am looking into ways to make this a bit more clear for users posting in this board, but, at the end of the day, that's what that prefix means.

Now, onto Iokath:
Can you make an on-site version of Iokath?
Absolutely, yes.

Can it just be the Legends version re-written?
No.
Legends Iokath is a droid-built planet and a superweapon. Site rules only allow the use of superweapons in very specific instances and — to be completely honest and blunt — this isn't one of them. Even if it's dormant and not working, we don't want that to be something that's just laying around; because, once it's there, then there is all kinds of drama and headaches surrounding who goes there to fix it up, are they allowed to use it, etc., etc. That's just something I'd prefer not to touch.

Also, you blend the lore of SWTOR into the planet's backstory. In the canon that this site adheres to (Disney's canon), none of that stuff happened. There was no Eternal Alliance; that version of the Sith Empire and Galactic Republic never existed. Therefore, those battles and events never took place either. Hence, new lore needs to be written for that planet until such a time that Disney (if it even ever decides to do this) tells us what its version of those events are.

In short? This profile needs to be rewritten if it is to survive. I am okay with it being a mostly-droid built and inhabited world. I am even okay with the organic-hating-nature of said droids, or the climate-controlling systems. None of that bothers me. But the superweapon has to go, and the SWTOR-centric lore has to be replaced with something original. If you can do those things, I will do another review of the profile and see about getting it accepted into site lore.

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Okay, so I have a few issues with this, so forgive the enormity of the post that's about to follow:

The "Canon" prefix on this site is meant to indicate any material that comes from an official Star Wars source. That may be Legends or Disney's canon, but you get my point: official. That's why Zakuul has that label here on the site. I am looking into ways to make this a bit more clear for users posting in this board, but, at the end of the day, that's what that prefix means.

Now, onto Iokath:
Can you make an on-site version of Iokath?
Absolutely, yes.

Can it just be the Legends version re-written?
No.
Legends Iokath is a droid-built planet and a superweapon. Site rules only allow the use of superweapons in very specific instances and — to be completely honest and blunt — this isn't one of them. Even if it's dormant and not working, we don't want that to be something that's just laying around; because, once it's there, then there is all kinds of drama and headaches surrounding who goes there to fix it up, are they allowed to use it, etc., etc. That's just something I'd prefer not to touch.

Also, you blend the lore of SWTOR into the planet's backstory. In the canon that this site adheres to (Disney's canon), none of that stuff happened. There was no Eternal Alliance; that version of the Sith Empire and Galactic Republic never existed. Therefore, those battles and events never took place either. Hence, new lore needs to be written for that planet until such a time that Disney (if it even ever decides to do this) tells us what its version of those events are.

In short? This profile needs to be rewritten if it is to survive. I am okay with it being a mostly-droid built and inhabited world. I am even okay with the organic-hating-nature of said droids, or the climate-controlling systems. None of that bothers me. But the superweapon has to go, and the SWTOR-centric lore has to be replaced with something original. If you can do those things, I will do another review of the profile and see about getting it accepted into site lore.

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Alright, I kinda used SWTOR stuff because the planet doesn't have that much lore for it even in legends, but I see what you're saying, get rid of SWTOR events, though would it be fine to make some events similar to past events, like the battle of Iokath still kinda happened but there is no Enternal Alliance or Enternal Empire or that rendition of the republic and empire ties to it? and no super weapon and the battle happened for a different reason?

Also, just a suggestion to fix the confusion with the canon prefix is maybe to make a legends prefix, have it act like the canon one but it indicates the (as an example, I'll just use "planet") planet originally comes from legends but any event that happened from legends that took place on the planet didn't happen at all (unless Disney re-introduces that planet and the event(s) that happened on it into canon)

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Making events similar to the Legends tale is okay. But making events exactly the same as the Legends tale, only removing the names of the factions involved and replacing them with others is not; because you're essentially rebranding the same story. You'll need to come up with something unique for Iokath which doesn't rely upon SWTOR mythology.
 

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@Malon I believe I have fixed the issues you had with this planet profile, such as getting rid of the SWTOR Lore and centricness around SWTOR, and getting rid of all ties to the super weapon of Iokath, so I hope you will review this planet profile once again with your issues hopefully fixed.
 

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I'm just the peanut gallery chiming in that as someone who just made a droid character, this place sounds great. 10/10 would vacation on Droid Hell.
 

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This reminds me of that Futurama episode. haha.

This one!
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@Malon Hey Malon, I believe I have fixed your issues with this planet profile, I've kinda been waiting four days or so for you to take another look at it, but if you can't or don't have the time to I understand, I can wait if needed.
 

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Bullet points don't necessarily need full stops, but you aren't consistent?
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