Satsujin

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NAME: Satsujin
FACTION: Sith
RANK: Waiting to be accepted
SPECIES: Shistavanen
AGE: 40
GENDER: male
HEIGHT: 1.8 meters
WEIGHT: Around 70 kg
EYES: Red
HAIR: Black (fur)
SKIN: Black
CREDITS: 1025
DISTINGUISHING MARKS: Long scar across right side of face. Crooked jaw, torn ears, one blind, heavily maimed left eye.
FORCE SENSITIVE: Yes

STRENGTH: 10/10
DEXTERITY: 8/10
CONSTITUTION: 10/10
INTELLIGENCE: 4/10
WISDOM: 4/10
CHARISMA: 2/10

FORCE POWERS: Force push, force pull, force choke, force jump

SKILLS:
Very strong and durable, sturdy and agile with heightened senses such as seeing, smelling, and hearing. As a racial trait, a natural healing ability.

LIGHTSABER/SWORD FORMS:
Single bladed.

STRENGTHS AND WEAKNESSES:
Afraid of fire and not very smart, stupid, some would say, but has uncanny speed, wit, and strength.

GEAR:
Red Lightsaber, small throwing knife, resperator, large saxe knife

SHIP:
Radiant, small vessel painted red and black, not very strong, shields are easy to break down, but small, sturdy, fast, and hard to hit.
PETS:
No pets.

PERSONALITY:
Satsujin is dark mannered, always has been, that was why he was exiled from his home planet, that was why he joined the Dark Jedi. He would never admit to being evil or even come right out and say that the Dark Jedi themselves are evil, in his eyes, he is doing the gallexy a favor, but he is sly and devious, and though not the most charming, can almost always overpower his opponent unless he is extremly outnumbered. For some reason, as for all the people of his race, he has a fear of fire.


BIOGRAPHY:
Satsujin was a runt, small, weak, and in his mind, desolate, always lonely, no one wanted him around, they abused him, bullied him. It had always been like this, the canine simply saw no other path in life, so he accepted it for what it was, this, of course, was a mistake, it brought him down, tugging him into the pits of darkness, away from the radiant embrace of the light. But he simply saw no other way.
One day a group of black armoured clad warrior emerged near their home, one was injured and requested assistance, it appeared that he had been cut with a lightsaber, Satsujin was curious about these invaders, so he trotted off to tell his abusive parents who scoffed and called him a liar, furious that Jisatsu's parents refused to help them, the warriors burned his home and killed off his family.
With no where else to go, Jisatsu accepted an offer the warriors had made to join the Dark Jedi, they had filled his little mind with promises of power and prosperity, so he had followed them. Though he has never killed anyone yet, he accepted their training eagerly and soon graduated. It was then he learned the meaning of his name, murder, from that point forth his destiny was obvious, and he would live up to his name.


KILLS:
None yet!

DUELING RING MATCHES:
Nope.
GRAND TOURNAMENT MATCHES:
Nope.

ROLE-PLAYS:
None I have made myself.
 
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This is a solid first profile, although you'll need to go through training to achieve the Crusader (Knight equivalent) rank. I'd suggest saving this character as we will be jumping forward to a new timeline in a matter of weeks. You can read more details in the Announcements board.
 

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Thanks! I will be sure to save him. Where can I go through training?
 
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Interesting idea for a character. One of the things that I like about your character is the fact that you limited his intelligence, wisdom, and charisma. Sometimes it's tempting to make them super likable as well as powerful, so I'm glad that you were able to find some limitations for your profile. Just a couple of neat little things that I'd like to point out.

1. No characters are allowed to begin with lightsabers or force powers; everything must be obtained in actual RPs. You might want to substitute his lightsaber with a truncheon or vibrosword of some kind.

2. History. While it isn't necessarily something bad, I don't get a real sense of what he is like based upon his previous actions. I get the feeling that he is kind of conscious of his turning to the dark side, and I also get the feeling that he is superstitious due to his name meaning "murder." Those would be good things to develop as you continue to write your history. You also say that he was small and weak to begin with, and usually people of the size and strength of your character have some early genetic potential, so I might say something like...oh...the Bogans were impressed with his genetic potential and decided that he would make a fine asset to their force.

The new timeline is going to come out soon, so I wouldn't throw him into many major RPs if you want to use him in the new one. That being said, you probably don't want to try to level him up or give him new items since he'll have to start with nothing again in the new timeline. It's only another week or so until everything is revamped, however, so you won't have too long to wait. If you like, I could do a minor RP with you in the training section until things are reset.

Edit: Did you make your avatar picture from scratch? It looks very good.
 
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I will thanks, I will change it to a vibrosword while im at it.
 

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Interesting idea for a character. One of the things that I like about your character is the fact that you limited his intelligence, wisdom, and charisma. Sometimes it's tempting to make them super likable as well as powerful, so I'm glad that you were able to find some limitations for your profile. Just a couple of neat little things that I'd like to point out.

1. No characters are allowed to begin with lightsabers or force powers; everything must be obtained in actual RPs. You might want to substitute his lightsaber with a truncheon or vibrosword of some kind.

2. History. While it isn't necessarily something bad, I don't get a real sense of what he is like. You also say that he was small and weak to begin with, and usually people of the size and strength of your character have some early genetic potential, so I might say something like...oh...the Bogans were impressed with his genetic potential and decided that he would make a fine asset to their force.

The new timeline is going to come out soon, so I wouldn't throw him into many major RPs if you want to use him in the new one. Save your work in a Word document of some kind so that you can repost him in the new timeline.

This is a good overview, although he is allowed to start with a lightsaber in the Bogan and the most basic Force powers.
 

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He was a runt, yes, but all Shistavanen's are awfully large, though he is a runt to his own kind, he usually towers over the other races, well usually.
 

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Really, Trellheim? I've read otherwise, to be honest. I'll have to look it up.

Edit: @Satsujin: Oh, I see. Thank you for clarifying.
 

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Really, Trellheim? I've read otherwise, to be honest. I'll have to look it up.

You could very well be right, although I've always started with a lightsaber and basic Force powers and never had it mentioned it was incorrect or against the rules.
 

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Really, Trellheim? I've read otherwise, to be honest. I'll have to look it up.

Edit: @Satsujin: Oh, I see. Thank you for clarifying.

No problem, if you would like a link to the wookipedia describing the race, I would be more then happy to post it for you so you can better understand our size and looks.
 

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I'm sure I'll be able to locate it fine on my own; thanks for the offer, though. If you need an RP buddy until the new timeline comes out, let me know and we can mess around with something or other. If you're new to RPing altogether, we could try going through a fight sequence of some sort so that you're ready for when you go into serious threads. :CScool
 

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I'm sure I'll be able to locate it fine on my own; thanks for the offer, though. If you need an RP buddy until the new timeline comes out, let me know and we can mess around with something or other. If you're new to RPing altogether, we could try going through a fight sequence of some sort so that you're ready for when you go into serious threads. :CScool

Well no one seems to be replying to my thread in the outlanders club "Here there be murder" Im a senior in roleplaying, but not when it comes to Star wars, this is actually my first time roleplaying a huminoid so I welcome your help! :)
 

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Ooh! In all honesty, I had no idea that was your thread. I'll take a look at it and see what I can do.
 

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Thanks, maybie gimmie some heads up while your at it, again, I suck at roleplaying huminoids. I really appreciate it!
 

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All right, I'm in. Looking forward to RPing with thee! I'll make an OOC thread in the appropriate section if you have any questions.
 

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Three basic Force powers used to (and I believe still is) the max an untrained Force user can know.
 
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