Zen'ragu Frepp

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Name: Zen'ragu Frepp
Nickname Zen

Species: Twi'lek

Age: 31

Eyes: Orange

Skin: Dark yellow

Distinguishing marks: A large scar going over his left eye, but the eyes fine.
His left lekku (Tentacle) is actully a mechanical one.

History:
Zen has been in this war for a long time and the war has taken its toll.
He would have never believed this when he was found as an orphant in Coruscant and taken to the temple.
His parents died in an explosion, its supposed to be an accident but he doesnt buy it.

He has always been tricky and focused, the masters know him pretty well but the younglins dont.

During a mission the remaining squadmates know as 'Pain Day' he lost his other lekku and almost his eye, during that mission two others died and one almost did. Only one person suffered no permament damage.

Biografy:
Being a war veteran comes with traits, he his fairly tall and strong.
Because of his lost lekku he isnt able to fight properly so he stays behind the tactical table. Because he has been in the front lines he knows how to strategise properly.
Also the main reason hes not figthing anymore is because he suffered some major damage on his ribs nerve system, meaning that he gets huge amounts of pain when he moves the wrong way.

Sen'Ragu likes to keep low profile so thats why really no one knows about him.
He is a skilled Jedi Knight so he was invited to this group that the Jedis were forming.
This group works as a squad, theres an tactisian, warrior and a pilot.
But the squad has extended from when it was created.

This squad is called 'The Black Birds'. Just like crows who hunt for food they hunt for trouble. Their main job is to protect not necessary go into the front lines.
They usually just do protection jobs for senators and other important people.
He was selected to this squad because he had an extronary tactics on the battle field.


Lightsaber style:
Tràkata

Gear:
Jedi robes and his Damind powered golden ligthsaber.
 
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Maybe work on your spelling, but other than that it looks good. Also add some more Bio and stuff
 
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Funny, your talking of spelling, Rescue. :D

Tarranium. :CSly Dear, dear Tarranium. An interesting character. There are a few things that I think could be done to this profile in order to improve it, if you don't mind my pointing them out. Firstly, I think "trakata" is a Dark-Jedi lightsaber form, though I may well be wrong, so don't quote me on it. Secondly, the biography and the strengths/weaknesses sections should probably be separated for easier reading. Lastly, the Biography/history could be fleshed out a bit more.

Some things that might help to make your character's history more complete would be to explain how he got his war wounds or something along those lines. How did he come to the Jedi Order? you said found as an orphan and taken to the temple, but that leaves me wondering a bit. What is this special squad you mention and is it part of the Order? Why was he selected to be a part of it, etc.?

Overall, not bad. Just throwing out some suggestions for your consideration. Enjoy the RP!
 

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I did this little late and was supposed to edit is now anyway.
 

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Firstly, I think "trakata" is a Dark-Jedi lightsaber form, though I may well be wrong, so don't quote me on it.

It isn't. In this timeline the Jedi Swordsmaster invented Trakata, and it is used by both sides.
 

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Hmm, I looked it up on Wookieepedia and you are quite right. My mistake.
 
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