Bastilo Marshall

Bastilo Marshall

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Bastilo Marshall
"There's the Dark and theres the light... and I'm the guy who kick's the Dark's-"

Name: Bastilo Marshall
Species: Human
Gender: Male
Age: 27
Faction: Jedi
Rank: Jedi Knight
Height: 1.94
Weight: 48 kilograms
Hair Color: Black
Eye Color: Brown
Skin Color: Black
Home world: Naboo
Home: N/A

Biography
Chapter 1- Blood History
As a child he was born on Naboo with a family of fighters who trained until they reached their tip Bastilo wasn't like that. They loved battle each member of there family the "Marshalls" had a dream to be a high ranking in an army so they trained and they passed there skills to each generation so the next and the next could fulfill the dreams. There best warrior was Bastilo's father Josak Marshall for when he was born he was born a force sensitive. When he found out he immediately flew to Tython with his father went to the Jedi temple for training. He demonstrated his bond to the force and soon after, he was accepted and became an initiate.

Later on in life he quit being a Jedi for his training was to hard and stressful and he was never seen again. He then go married and had a kid and they named him Bastilo. When Bastilo was 2 every time a cried something would at least slightly move or fall over. When Josak found out he kept his Lightsaber in a secret box beneath the floor so he could pass on the families skill down to him.


Chapter 2- Childhood Sadness
Instead being weak at his age he was fast and light on his feet and when it came to intelligence he could prove to be more intelligent then others. Being a sword fighter Bastilo was very unique in his abilities as little admired him and most pitied him until one day while out in the forest collecting fruits he found two weakened Initiates being attacked by a "Nexu" and he was able to fend ad scare off the the monster. On his way home he came to his house with the door busted down. He walked inside in search for his parents and as he came into the living room he found his father on the on the floor with his mother laid beside him both dead with a Lightsaber in his fathers hand.

Distraught with what happened he ran into the woods and came a cross a monster called a "Nexu" and with anger and sadness Bastilo let out a shockwave send the creature flying and destroyed some tree's. 2 Jedi were sent from Tython for they received distress calls from Naboo. They went t investigate what happened and when they got there they found Bastilo sobbing in the middle of the new clear field. After some investigating and questioning on what happened they took this matter to some of the masters in the temple and they decided to train him.


Chapter 3- Concealing the Truth
When they asked Bastilo he had to think about it and after thinking about the Lightsaber his father had he knew that it was for him one day and that his father wanted and he accepted the offer but he never found out what killed his father. The Jedi then did some more investigating in the house and they found skinny burn marks around the house comparable to a Lightsaber. Out side the house they found a field of grass on the cliff near the house with blown away roots, twigs, and more grass as if someone landed there. Soon after they found a note that was meant for Bastilo with a cut off hand next to it (the hand wasn't his fathers). The note read "YoUr NeXT SoON" and the Jedi decided it was a Sith and didn't tell Bastilo In his training every time he experienced piles of emotional stress he would have and out burst which he was later able to control by cutting out all emotions at curtain times.

He spent most of his time in archives interested in history and the secrets of the force and the rest of his time learning how to fight and spending time with others. Ever since he went on a mission to find a missing Padawan he was forced to save either a female Twi'lek or a male Padawan. He chose the Twi'lek and after he couldn't think straight because he thought he made the wrong choice. After a while he slowly got better . He pondered his choice and kept to himself for a while until he realized how serious the job of a Jedi was. He learned more spend little to no time with others and more time in the archives and training. He practiced with blasters, double bladed Lightsabers, staffs, more hand-to-hand combat, and other weapons just in case of other situations. He also learned how to work speeders just in case he got stranded anywhere. He did more meditating and studying to get stronger in the force to improve his wisdom.


Chapter 4- Restless Training
After the fall of the republic Bastilo felt much despair but held strong and disappeared of the face of the galaxy and went into hiding. While in hiding he trained himself to be sharper faster and stronger trying eliminate most of his weaknesses except his emotions. As he trained he came up with new moves and new ways to use the force and his learning capability shifted and increased making his intelligence of the force increase as well. He mastered many moves over the 5 years and he returned to the Jedi Order being stronger than he was before.

Abilities


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"The Sith are scum after what they did to.. them..."
Lightsaber Combat

Bastilo being born into a family of sword fighters he able to use form I, II, III, IV, and V when he was a child and when he was a Jedi in training. After the Republic was lost Bastilo disappeared off the face of the galaxy in training to use his Lightsaber combat to its full potential and beyond learning form VI. Bastilo uses a mix Makashi and Niman, mostly Makashi to get his opponent used to his fighting style but once his opponent starts to adapt he switches to Niman and back to Makashi multiple time to throw them off.

When his emotion mode comes up he attacks more violently and is more swift with his attacks allowing to use all the form's while he's unconscious.

The Force

Being more of a helper and healer as well as a Shield for weakened people he mostly studies passive and healing abilities to aid himself along with his allies and friends. He mostly uses Force heal in fights with his allies. He so advanced with the Force he can make a barrier around him and him than can deflect a small amount of rapid blaster fire and he can heal critical wounds as well. After his 3 years of training when he disappeared he enhanced his senses and his force absorb ability making it able for him to palm away blast blots. In his training he developed two of his own moves being Force Breath and Force Strike. Force breath allows him to fill and compress more air into his lungs an blast it out of his mouth used for distraction purposes. Force Strike allows him to compress the force into one part of his body allowing to move faster and hit harder allowing him to strike harder very few times with a lightsaber in battle as well as making his parry's harder and more swift. His senses became sharper and his eyes can tell many things after his training in the icy mountains on Orto Plutonia.


When he's overwhelmed with emotions his Force and Light saber combat abilities increase making him an emotionless yet full of emotion empty yet full vessel. In this form he can heal fatal wounds and just barely people on the very tip of death. In this state he can also palm away missiles as long as he's making a force shield around him.

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Traits
"The Force is strong with me... oh I didn't know you were here."​
Appearance
Average height male with short black curly hair and Light brown eyes in brown robes with some symbols on them. African American along with 2 presences within him as if there 2 people inside of each other.

Personality
Bastilo is a very enthusiastic kind-hearted person and is very social. He prefers to fight with someone instead of alone. Very emotional it takes a great deal of will power to not be consumed by emotion especially from when he was a child. When ever it comes to his childhood he reveals very little and reserves his focus on present and unknown future.

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Gear & Assets

Primary Weapons

Cross guard Saber

Armor

Jedi Flexible Coolant Robes
*Awaiting approval.*

Misc.

Grappling Hook|| Med kit || Comslink

Transportation

N/A
*In development

Assets
Roleplays
Robes and guns
Nests and Pests
Journey to Iokath Part 1 (in progress)
Theme: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TB3dqBMv5Jc​
Voice clip: https://clyp.it/cac01loi#

 
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Wit

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Hello there, welcome to the site!

While this isn't a bad start to your character, I would advice you to further expand on it. The personality mentions his parents getting killed by Sith but the biography has no mention of that. At the same time the biography tells very little about his past, how he got to the Jedi, why he joined the Jedi, how and when his parents died, how did he stumble upon the padawans he protected from a monster, and so on.

Also, I'd like some more details on the monster he encountered on Tython, and what exactly you mean by destroying the land around him. While putting in incidents that show the competence of your character is a good thing to have in a character profile, you also don't want to make your character appear over powered.
 

Valen Pelora

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Hey there!

I have looked over the profile and think it would be best if we handle one section at a time. I don't want you to think we are into micromanaging profiles but to approve we need to have a better idea of what we are accepting. I'm going to list things out in bullet points for ease of reading.
  • Proof reading: I would suggest doing a once over just to try and clean up some of of the proof reading errors. It makes reading things a little bit easier.
  • Attributes: This doesn't tell me a whole lot about the character. It mostly reads like an addendum to the history. It still has the mention of the "monster."
  • History: I have a few questions that might help clear up the history. Where is he from? Who is his family? Why are they such good soldiers? Who is his father? I think all of that would really make things a lot clearer. Tython, before it was destroyed, was only home to Jedi.
Tag me when the changes have been made or PM me with any questions.
 

Valen Pelora

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@Bastilo Marshall,

Thanks for working with me so extensively over PM. I appreciate the amount of effort you have put in to getting it all together. My last 2 notes (I swear!), it's a little odd that the Jedi wouldn't tell him how his father died but you can sell on not wanting to traumatize a young Force sensitive. There might be an interesting character arc there given any information regarding the death could have been destroyed when Tython was destroyed (along with the Jedi who found him). I would caution the use of Force stealth in general. You can hide your Force presence but using the Force for invisibility is not feasible this time line.

Now the fun part.

APPROVED!

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Zenya

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Okay @Bastilo Marshall Apparently your character profile has been completely changed.
So I'm going to tell you what needs to be fixed, when I get the chance. (Right now I'm pretty absent.)
But as of right now, your approval has been suspended.
 

Zenya

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Sorry this has taken so horrendously long.

Fisrt, a baby's force abilities probably aren't strong enough to make things float or break when they are upset.
Padawans don't exist in this timeline. They are called initiates.
You mention how he is stronger and faster than other kids. Unfortunately the direction you are going is much too overpowered.
A child would not be able to defeat a Nexu on his own.
You have Waaaay to many light saber and force abilities.
You can not create your own force abilities. Please remove those, and you also cant deflect missiles with a "force shield."

Other than that, looks good. Tag me when you've made the changes!
 

Bastilo Marshall

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I've made the changes @Zenya and I've been told that it is somewhat possible to make your own force abilities.
 

Undine

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Fisrt, a baby's force abilities probably aren't strong enough to make things float or break when they are upset.

Just to nitpick... fast forward to 2:18 where the Rodian toddler is levitating his toy ball. I'd argue that such a child would be able to do much the same thing when upset.

 
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