Jason Krake

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JASON KRAKE



AGE

► 24

SPECIES

► Human

HEIGHT

► 6'1

WEIGHT

► 183

EYE COLOR

► Hazel

HAIR COLOR

► Brown

HOMEWORLD

► Mandalore

GENDER

► Male

FACTION

► Mandalorian Dominion

RANK

► None Yet

FORCE SENSITIVITY

► None

ENEMIES

►NONE (yet)














  • Jason Krake was a white human male.When Jason had his helmet on, his helmet had a few blaster bolt burns on. When Jason took off his helmet (very rare) you could see his hazel eyes. He had brown hair that was short. .Jason stood up straight he was 6'1.


  • When Jason was a child, his parents brought him up strictly. They taught him to be open minded and not to care what other people thought of him. Growing up he had a Strill named Ack'tia. He went hunting in the woods and always came back with food. His dad died in a blaster fight when Jason was young. Ever since Jason planned to track down the killer and kill him. At the age of 21, Jason found the killer and killed him. Shortly after he became a bounty hunter and went to work for several local gangsters. After he killed his father's killer, he went back to Mandalore to tell his mom of the good news. Jason was an only child and was mischievous when he was by himself. He had a lot of friends to adventure with. His mom gave him his first weapon at the age of 10. It was a B-8R Blaster Pistol. She told him "Now Jason this blaster has been passed down for centuries now, it was your father's now it is yours."



CHAPTER:1 {THE BAR}

Jason never thought he would be stuck on Tattoine. Of all the planets it had to be the hot planet. He walked over to a local bar. "Hey do you know a Jendendar Lucras?" "Huh? the gangster?" the bartender said in basic. "Yea thats the one he owes me something." "Ha! you can't get anything from that nerf head, theres no reasoning with him." "Well he has to give me information. So are you going to tell me where he is or not?" "Yea sure, you see that castle out on that mountain?" the human pointed. "Yes a nice fortress if i may." "Well he never lets anyone in, so unless you know him personally you ain't even gonna live to see the gates. He's got lazer cannons and guards that kill the moment they see a living being." "Well fortunately i was a good friend of him back in the day, it's been years since we talked." Jason said. "Yea well of you happen to talk to him put in good word for me, the names Harrah." "Will do. Hey while i'm here can you fix me a classic beer?" "Sure that'll be 7 credits." "No problem."

Chapter:2 {Meeting the local gangster}

After the drink, Jason said goodbye and headed up the mountain to his old friend. "Hopefully he'll happen to take a look and recognize me." Jason thought. "Wouldn't want to come home in blaster ashes." As soon as he got to the gates the gate opened. "Wow i expected to have to fight my way to get in." Jason walked down the long dark hall way. "Wow this smells worse than a bantha dung." The hallways finally ended. There was a big metal door. "Guess i have to knock?" Jason was about to put his hand up against the door to knock when the door slid open. "I guess their expecting me." When Jason took off his helmet, his eyes adjusted to the darkness of the room. "Well well well....look who shows up." "Jendendar, is that you?" Jason said as he looked around the room. He was surrounded by countless servants, bounty hunters and guards, all of whom had their blasters pointed at him. "I expect you will be wanting your ship back?" Jendendar rasped. "Yes my good old friend." Jason said through gritted teeth. "Refer to the master as lord." A guard said through his helmet. "It is ok Jason and i go way back. He has done me some favors and i will repay him." Jendendar said, "You may lower your weapons, Jason has no reason to fight." "My apologies the way my people are treating you, its just simple procedures, you can never be so sure when someone wants to have your head, i am not that kind to the people." "Also, thank you for letting me borrow your ship, Persistance." Jason looked around him to see if there was an exit, just in case, if things went wrong. "No problem, but future missions require my ship back, if you don't mind." "Of course." Jendendar pointed at one of his guards. "Go take my friend to his ship." The Gamorrean just grunted and walked with Jason to his ship. "If you need anything, just tell me, you have a powerful friend here, bye now." Jendendar pressed a button and the door closed. Jason's meeting with the gangstar was over. The two stopped at another door. The Gamorrean knocked on the door, and it opened. The room was huge, it had several small skiffs. In the middle was Jason's ship, Persistance, a Selonian light Freighter. Jason walked over to the ship. "Well Gamorrean, this is the last i'll be seeing you, tell your boss i said thanks." The Selonian light Freighter lifted off the ground and zoomed out of the fortress.




Format by @Vosrik

 
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Pernicious

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Why post twice? You can just edit your main post bruh.
 

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Why post twice? You can just edit your main post bruh.
yes I know that, but on the other one there were old comments and I wanted new ones based on this character
 

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yes I know that, but on the other one there were old comments and I wanted new ones based on this character
If you want to do something like this in the future, I would advise for you to use the workshops sub forum. It's basically a WIP board where you can get feedback etc, without making it an official post of sorts.
 
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I see you're singing up to different factions with this character, which is good because joining factions opens up RPing opportunities you won't normally get. But you should finish the character first.

When you sign up a character to a faction the leadership of the faction needs to review said character. That takes time and effort. Right now this timeline is coming to an end and we're about to transition to a new one. Everyone is pretty busy with that, and making them take out the time to review your character when it isn't even complete seems unfair on the people who have to do the reviewing. Also, you have signed this character up to be a moff and an indie faction. That isn't allowed as per site rules, one character can only be a member of one faction. So you'll have to choose what you want to be a part of. Again, reading the rules would have informed you of all of this so I'd suggest doing so yet again.
 

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Hey there,

I sent you another PM so check it out when you get a chance. I know it's alot to get ones head around the first time, but kuddos on being receptive to feedback.
 

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Hey there @Jason Krake . First things first if people haven't said it all ready.

Looks like there are some coding issues. Just wanted to point that out incase you were unaware of them. That won't keep your profile from getting approved but it helps make it looks nice.

There's nothing stopping people from using tech from Wookieepedia so long as it's canon. The DE-10 blaster is only in legends as of this time. I suggest looking through the plethora of technology the community has submitted. the same goes for the ship and other gear. Also don't forget to state the amount of ammo your character carries with him.

There looks to be a few grammatical errors here and there. A trick i use is to say a paragraph or whatever out loud to see if it sounds right. more often than not i come up with situations where i accidentally hit the wrong key as i was typing. Google docs and any Microsoft Word type of application will also help as you can spell check later on.
 

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