Five Syndicates Leona Manes

Leo Manes

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Leona Manes

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Stats
Full Name: Leona Manes
Nickname: Leo
Age: 19
Species: Human
Sexuality: Pansexual
Force Sensitive: No
Home World: Pasaana
Height: 5'4
Weight: 101 lbs
Faction: The Fifth Syndicates
Rank: Scoundrel
History
When Leo was just five years old, she was taken from her parents on the planet Pasaana. She was then transported by a mercenary to the frigid planet of Ryloth where she was traded as a slave. The day she turned 18 her bondage was over and she was turned free by her owner. For the last couple of years has been living in Nabat, scavenging around the outskirts in her heavy fur coat.
Personality
Growing up a slave she became tough. One you get to know her she can be pretty fun. She loves to help other people in any way she can even if it;s not enough sometimes. Even though she doesn't like to she has to sometimes steal to survive.

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Rom

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Hello @Leo Manes

Taking a look at the profile and there are some things that need to change regarding the character background. Kijimi was destroyed in Rise of Skywalker and our RP is set about 100 years after the movie so Leona could not have been living there. I would recommend picking a different planet to set as her home, perhaps Hays Minor? It's the icy homeworld of Rose Tico and one of the planets the Jedi Order has been working on repairing the environmental damage done by the First Order.

I would also suggest expanding on her history and personality somemore as well as adding things like skills or talents. How did she come to join the Syndicates? What trials shaped her into a Scoundrel? Is she a pilot? Handy with a blaster?

Once these changes and expansions are made please tag me and I'll take a look again.

Thank you!
 
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