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  • Yea I rush sometimes thanks keep on forgetting to slow down
    Khivas
    Khivas
    lol I had that issue when I first started too. Had to learn that Quality takes time, and rushing for quantity is rushing for waste.
    Nah don't worry I don't beat myself up, don't worry but yea don't worry you can give me as much constructive criticism as you want it would help me and thanks it does help if you do
    Actually sadly no, it is my first I am just bad, I am sure I have a few mistakes if you want to point them out to me that would be appreciated. Damn it is embarrassing, but yea sadly Im that bad with English
    Khivas
    Khivas
    No no lol Don't beat yourself up man, ain't healthy for you. I'll gladly help you out with your writing, it's actually something I enjoy, I just have to be careful with it because not everybody is so keen on being criticized, even if it's constructive.
    Khivas
    Khivas
    My first bit of advice on that front however, is to slow down when you write out your threads and posts. I notice you leave a lot of words out, and use the wrong word at times. Nothing so severe, but slowing down when writing will help greatly with that. It's why Editors get paid so damn much lol
    Khivas
    Khivas
    And second bit (the end really) is to use more Adjectives when describing Jaleer or his surroundings. Instead of saying Jaleer, try replacing it with Him, Himself, The Young Healer, etc. And never be afraid to make a mistake, it's how we learn.
    Hey I propose a trade, if you can teach my character force valor and persuasion I can help train your character in advance telekinesis and force heal
    Khivas
    Khivas
    lol I can teach you the basic concept of Valor, and same goes for Persuasion, but as you saw, they're not too well versed lol But you got yourself a deal
    nah I mean we don't know if their will be a Jedi temple on Naboo or like anything specific but yea I can make the thread, if your cool with Ryloth than we can do it their.
    Well I am not sure about naboo since the battle isn't finished yet plus, we wont know what will happen to it, if you want my character is from Ryloth in a small isolated village, and I have trained several padawans on that planet and village, we can do it their
    Khivas
    Khivas
    Oh dude the end's already been declared lol It was declared awhile ago lol Naboo is the seat of a new Proto-Republic. We own it now lol But if Ryloth is your first choice, then Ryloth we will go to =)
    Well alright where do you want to do the training?
    Khivas
    Khivas
    I think this time Naboo sounds good. I hear the weather's nice this time of year =P
    Khivas
    Khivas
    Also, if possible, can it be set after the Meeting In The Woods thread, so we have a reason to know each other.
    I see well don't worry my character has trained with telekinesis's for most of his live so he could help your character with what your asking for.
    Khivas
    Khivas
    Sounds like a plan to me!
    damn my character is a padawan too, well I am sure I can do my best maybe we can both use it as training, what techniques does he know?
    So why you looking for advance Telekinesis? An what rank is your jedi?
    Khivas
    Khivas
    lol Khivas is a Padawan still, but lacks in Force Power training. His TK is a 4/10, and he can use push and pull and what not, but he needs a bit of advice and a few exercises in how to use it. It's all to help for his promotion to Knight.
    Notice that you were looking someone to teach advanced telekinesis, my Jedi can do that if your interested
    Sorry mate. I don't really have the motivation to write Korra since she is going to die in a thread. You can write her off in the mission thread.
    Khivas
    Khivas
    Damn, seriously? I was actually looking forward to writing with that character lol even had an idea to show that Khivas isn't a total jackass involving her.
    OMG, I'm so sorry, yes you can... Shenzai Kosher and Minion Holphee are both PCs of the same writer, I must have mixed up the names, the Shenzai Kosher link actually went to Khivas' profile. Again, I'm sorry, I was in a hurry since it was minutes away from the site downtime last night.
    Hey just wanted to let you know that the thread for the Palawan training group is up you can find the link in the interest check.
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