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Hey there, @210yeti.
Let me first preface my comments here by saying I am no character moderator, but there are several obvious flaws here that would need to be addressed before you could use this character in the RP.
For starters, I am seeing a lot of Warhammer 40K influence here. It's alright if you want to take inspiration from somewhere else for your character, but when it is done this heavily it ceases to be inspiration, and more direct copying. With that in mind, his "power armor" will have to go. Simply put, power armor of any kind isn't allowed. Period. I would recommend you peruse our Tech Boards for an armor that has already been approved for use and use one of those. Be mindful that you don't pick an armor belonging to a specific character though.
Second, his hammer. The weapon itself is, well... there isn't much information on it, and the whole "Force imbued" aspect is a little sketchy. While it is possible to imbue ordinary weapons with the Force to increase their effectiveness or resistance to lightsabers, it would take some formal training to learn how to properly do that. And so far as I can tell, he hasn't had any formal training with either the Jedi or Sith. So I would call into question how he learned to imbue his weapon with the Force beyond simply "meditating on it" - as that in and of itself wouldn't be sufficient.
Third, the "political dispute" between the Jedi and Sith won't fit, I'm afraid. To put it simply, the Jedi of our current timeline are more militaristic when it comes to dealing with the Sith. And doubtless if they had discovered the Sith meddling on a rural backwater world, they would have been more apt to try and kill the Sith to permanently end their influence as opposed to negotiate with them. That said, I don't think "too zealous" would have been a disqualifying factor for the Jedi. If anything, they may have wanted to take him in and train him how to focus that energy in their battle against the Sith. I'll tag @Valen Pelora (resident Jedi Faction Leader) to confirm or deny this, but at my last check the Jedi are not shy of their zeal against the Sith. I'll also tag @Malon (resident Sith Faction Leader) for his verdict on this matter as it concerns the Sith as well.
Fourth, the idea that he somehow managed to lead a "purification" of his homeworld is not only a very Warhammer inspired concept, but highly unlikely. I would recommend removing that part of his backstory entirely as such an act would be near impossible without using some Death Star level weapon/technology; which would be forbidden nonetheless.
Finally, the "Force-Undivided" concept. I would recommend giving the site's Guide to Force Powers a read. Since the introduction of the new Disney canon - which this site follows - the Force here is clearly set into two categories: Light and Dark. There is no room for a middle ground, so it really isn't possible (at this time) to form a philosophy based on the notion of a "unified" Force. The way it works as of now is the Light is the natural state of being for the Force, and the Dark is an unnatural corruption created by the Sith and their philosophies.
Let me first preface my comments here by saying I am no character moderator, but there are several obvious flaws here that would need to be addressed before you could use this character in the RP.
For starters, I am seeing a lot of Warhammer 40K influence here. It's alright if you want to take inspiration from somewhere else for your character, but when it is done this heavily it ceases to be inspiration, and more direct copying. With that in mind, his "power armor" will have to go. Simply put, power armor of any kind isn't allowed. Period. I would recommend you peruse our Tech Boards for an armor that has already been approved for use and use one of those. Be mindful that you don't pick an armor belonging to a specific character though.
Second, his hammer. The weapon itself is, well... there isn't much information on it, and the whole "Force imbued" aspect is a little sketchy. While it is possible to imbue ordinary weapons with the Force to increase their effectiveness or resistance to lightsabers, it would take some formal training to learn how to properly do that. And so far as I can tell, he hasn't had any formal training with either the Jedi or Sith. So I would call into question how he learned to imbue his weapon with the Force beyond simply "meditating on it" - as that in and of itself wouldn't be sufficient.
Third, the "political dispute" between the Jedi and Sith won't fit, I'm afraid. To put it simply, the Jedi of our current timeline are more militaristic when it comes to dealing with the Sith. And doubtless if they had discovered the Sith meddling on a rural backwater world, they would have been more apt to try and kill the Sith to permanently end their influence as opposed to negotiate with them. That said, I don't think "too zealous" would have been a disqualifying factor for the Jedi. If anything, they may have wanted to take him in and train him how to focus that energy in their battle against the Sith. I'll tag @Valen Pelora (resident Jedi Faction Leader) to confirm or deny this, but at my last check the Jedi are not shy of their zeal against the Sith. I'll also tag @Malon (resident Sith Faction Leader) for his verdict on this matter as it concerns the Sith as well.
Fourth, the idea that he somehow managed to lead a "purification" of his homeworld is not only a very Warhammer inspired concept, but highly unlikely. I would recommend removing that part of his backstory entirely as such an act would be near impossible without using some Death Star level weapon/technology; which would be forbidden nonetheless.
Finally, the "Force-Undivided" concept. I would recommend giving the site's Guide to Force Powers a read. Since the introduction of the new Disney canon - which this site follows - the Force here is clearly set into two categories: Light and Dark. There is no room for a middle ground, so it really isn't possible (at this time) to form a philosophy based on the notion of a "unified" Force. The way it works as of now is the Light is the natural state of being for the Force, and the Dark is an unnatural corruption created by the Sith and their philosophies.
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Okay, so I will speak to two things: the Sith portions of the backstory and the hammer.
@Gamov is largely correct. The political tensions you see between the Sith in Legends games, such as Knights of the Old Republic and The Old Republic don't much exist in this timeline. Both factions are in open war—no holds barred. They are less likely to negotiate with a backwater world to achieve Force-sensitive trainees, and they are more likely to either A) pressgang them all into servitude and take the FS-members of the species by force or B) commit genocide to prevent the Jedi from gaining more members.
As to the hammer, I'm sensing a Thor vibe. I don't know if you intended that or not, but I sense it there nonetheless. Furthermore, a hammer wouldn't be a very effective weapon, Force-imbued or otherwise. If you're insistent on using it, flesh out what it can do—though doing so would require you to submit it as tech in the Tech Boards.
@Gamov is largely correct. The political tensions you see between the Sith in Legends games, such as Knights of the Old Republic and The Old Republic don't much exist in this timeline. Both factions are in open war—no holds barred. They are less likely to negotiate with a backwater world to achieve Force-sensitive trainees, and they are more likely to either A) pressgang them all into servitude and take the FS-members of the species by force or B) commit genocide to prevent the Jedi from gaining more members.
As to the hammer, I'm sensing a Thor vibe. I don't know if you intended that or not, but I sense it there nonetheless. Furthermore, a hammer wouldn't be a very effective weapon, Force-imbued or otherwise. If you're insistent on using it, flesh out what it can do—though doing so would require you to submit it as tech in the Tech Boards.
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@Gamov is correct regarding the Jedi portion of the back story as well. There would never be negotiations or a peaceful meeting between the Jedi and Sith. Certainly, not over Force sensitives on a backwater planet. The Jedi would, most likely, work to recruit the children without the Sith's knowledge. If the Sith showed up it would be a fight, almost every time. The Jedi and Empire are at open war. This version of the Jedi don't shy away from zeal. There are many Jedi who might be characterized as zealots when it comes to the Sith. A significant portion of the Order views the Sith as needing to be completely removed from the galaxy.