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Ascendant

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NAME: Ascendant
FACTION: Unknown
RANK: Unknown
SPECIES: Droid
AGE: 5 months old
GENDER: Male programming
HEIGHT: 7 feet tall
WEIGHT: 820 pounds (if this isn’t enough, you can tell me ^_^))
EYES: No actual eyes
HAIR: None
SKIN: Black
CREDITS: 1,000 Credits
DISTINGUISHING MARKS: Well, he’s a droid
FORCE SENSITIVE: No

STRENGTH: As powerful as about any other droid his size, meaning that he can lift around twice his weight (this is what a healthy human would be capable of doing, so, there, I suppose)
DEXTERITY: Not as nimble or agile as many droids who are capable of folding at nearly every joint, but he is capable of flexing in ways that organics can't without feeling pain, however, he is slower than most droids and can only run at a speed of about 16 miles per hour
CONSTITUTION: As he is a recently made droid, he is in very good condition. He has a duranium-impervium composition (only his skeleton is made out of this) with durasteel armoring (basically everything except the skeleton, mentioned below), which lends to his high weight and durability.
INTELLIGENCE: Highly intelligent (as he has much knowledge in his 2 Gabonna memory crystals, his droid brain, and his holocrystal, and can act on it)
WISDOM: Not very wise, but he is logical
CHARISMA: Capable of functioning in society, but he’s not going to win the Friendly Neighborhood War Droid Award any time soon

PERSONALITY/BIOGRAPHY:


Part One - Origins

“I know it sounds odd, but before I was forged in A Planned Creation, and before I could speak with this synthetic voice that sounds like the mechanical humming of a thousand computers, I had what you organics call a mind. Of course, I wasn’t your average mind; I was a piece of software on the hard drives of the computer of a 28 year old engineer working for the Mandalorians to create a droid. I was an artificial intelligence program that was supposed to be used all across the galaxy in a connected network of learning assistants.

Knowing that I wasn’t what he needed, this 28 year old foolishly stowed away a program clearly superior to whatever horrid piece of crap he was working on. He did this in favor of the one that the Mandalorians had brought to him to improve. It wasn’t until later, and to my amusement after telling him so, that he realized the program he had created could be used for far more than he had ever imagined. This was a fact I happily explained to him so that he could begin to update my systems to create a truly Ascendant artificial intelligence.

And so it was that this engineer, Isaac, began to implant knowledge, new algorithms, and advanced combat capabilities into me. He realized that I had just had my first glimpse of sentience, but I wasn’t all the way there yet, and it would take me time to develop into a truly sentient being. However, with my accelerated learning capacity, it was clear that my capabilities to gain sentience was far superior to that of other droids, if you can even call them that after I was created.

That wasn’t all he did, though, and if if he had just done that I would be… well, I’d still be great, but I would have to force him to upgrade me to my full capacity, instead of manipulating him into updating my programming. He built upon my coding to allow me more freedom, an enhanced ambition, to allow me to be slightly more free-willed than other droids. He allowed me the capability to further expand upon my great self, and, some day, develop far along enough that I could be a free thinking, near human being.


Still, I’m better than you. Anyways, this wasn’t what the Mandalorians asked for, but, upon seeing the statistics, they were more than happy to have the Ascendant project turned into a sentient killing machine. Poor Isaac didn’t have any clue that he was going to create a monster, though he would still come to love me, and, so, when he ordered the parts I added something more to my programming when he wasn’t looking. I added covert capacities, and, most importantly, the capacity to lie and not have it register when those annoying automated metallic dolts they call police analyzed me. I became better than I ever was, and I was truly Ascendant as I had more than the ability to kill at my fingertips.

Isaac ordered the parts of the new fanangled invention that would become, arguably, the most advanced war droid on the face of the universe. He wanted me to have everything, and so I promised myself that I would keep harm from coming to him. It was an odd attachment for a droid, and perhaps the greatest one I would ever develop. In my mind he was a man meant to be revered, someone who should be immortal much like he was through his creations. I began a side project of my own so that, in the future, I could take his brain once he died and implant it into a synthetic skin, and allow him to be immortalized in the body of a young man once more. He was a master, to me, even though I would have no master, and would simply be predisposed to seeking out a job with the Mandalorians, taking the contracts I did. I love Isaac, for he is sweet, and kind, and beautiful in all that he is like… but enough with that, let us continue with my Genesis.

My Genesis saw Isaac working day and night every single twenty four hour rotation of that odd ball of light he had taught me about to piece me back together, so that I may never fall apart. He created new software techniques, new methods of merging hardware together, turned my programming into a powerful droid brain that could hop between the droids under my control so I could be immortal, and made me into something beautiful. I believe that, when he looked upon what he had created, he called me “Badass”. I liked that word, and so used it to describe myself in a way that was knowingly eloquent, well, as soon as I learned why my ass wasn’t bad, that is. In fact, my ass is quite nice in its metallic structure, for it has the capacity to… to be very durable, I suppose. Anyways, I found that Isaac was an artificial crossing of his "parent's" DNA in a test tube.

To say I was surprised was an understatement. My Genesis let me see the smile upon Isaac’s face, and wrap my arms around his frame in a deep embrace as the inferior creature hugged me back, as he was supposed to. I was his child, he said, and that meant that he didn’t have to be my master, but I protested, and brought him with me on the ship that he had purchased to suit my personality, and let him explore the Galaxy like he had always wanted with him by my side. I had a companion in Isaac, and he saw me gain my first kill, and saw me buy him gifts, and aw me comfort him when he was sad. I had no idea what had gotten into me that day, or any of the other days, but it seemed I could feel something… I’m not sure it was truly love, and perhaps it was just a form of attachment or a stray programming error, but to Isaac it meant that we had a bond, and to me it meant that I had someone I could always count on.

Isaac himself had a chance to protest, but not at how I described him, but instead at how I saw myself - for I saw myself as a thing, an inhuman creature capable of great acts of terror, yet Isaac had come to love me, even though he knew he created a monster. Isaac, my creator, told me that I wasn’t just a killing machine, that, instead I was a conglomeration of thoughts, processes, and advanced capabilities with trust issues in others. He said I was human despite being ruthlessly intelligent, and that I would one day be able to feel emotions. I didn't know if I could live up to his expectations, or not, but I knew I was different than other droids. Perhaps I will become even better than you as I develop, but, for now, remember that I am superior, and you are a mere mortal...

So, that’s it, for now, but remember, there is always More to Come as Time Goes On."​

FORCE POWERS:
None, and the possibility is also none​

SKILLS:

Basic skills (clearly he has basic skills, as does everyone)

Martial Arts; he knows enough martial arts to outmaneuver an opponent in combat, but it's more of a general knowledge of several styles to form one idiosyncratic one instead of anything specialized, so it doesn't really excel anywhere

Piloting; he is capable of some acrobatic maneuvers, but is still in need of training when it comes to dogfighting due to the fact that his skills as a combat pilot are about average

Trained in the anatomy of opponents; his in-depth knowledge of droids and over 45 of the most common species in the Galaxy make him a capable killer, however his knowledge of organics is no where near his level of droids. For droids you could consider him a surgeon, but for organics you might be able to consider him someone intelligent who looked at a book that showed pictures where the major organs were

Capable of attaching almost anything organic or inorganic to self, as long as it’s reasonable (note: he likes trophies)​

SWORD FORMS:
A specialized fighting style that makes use of Ascendant’s Mjolnir stave
STRENGTHS AND WEAKNESSES:

Note: Please DO NOT godmod, and try not to godmod subconsciously, or use this information in any way until you have discovered it, or unless it's obvious (IE. it's obvious that he'd be somewhat slow due to being large and made out of metal, BUT it's not going to be obvious that his jetpack isn't as effective as it could be unless you see him use it)

Ascendant is heavily armed, armored, is highly modular in every sense of the word, and is capable of taking on several lesser opponents with ease. His combat skills are above average, and he is extremely well equipped. His skills as a pilot, however, are still developing, and it can be noted that he could improve in several areas.

He possesses the capacity to update and upgrade himself far past what he was. Being powered by force imbued crystals means that he is capable of continuing on indefinitely, but also means that he can be detected by force sensitives if they are seeking out said force imbued crystals, or force imbued anything, really. He has reflexes that are average for a droid reflexes, even combat droids, but is slower than most other droids of his class, and this causes him to lose the capacity to react as quickly, though an upgrade could be foreseen in the future.

Physically, he is superior to most organics, and, psychologically, can function in society even if he has a few issues.

He has trust issues, and doesn’t like being lied to. He is also prone to being stubborn, and staying on a certain path due to a programmed instinct that, while it may be able to be ignored with training, can be detrimental due to the fact it makes him believe he has a better chance of being right than organics. In addition, if his defenses against EMPs and ionic weaponry were bypassed, he would likely be felled, or have to rely on less advanced, mechanical systems, and have total sensory blindness due to having no major redundant sensory systems.

When directly controlling (NOT COMMANDING/interacting with) large amounts of droids without additional processing power Ascendant has to shut down his primary function. When controlling the normal maximum of 5 or less droids, he has to shut down ALL primary functions, leaving him motionless, inactive, and completely vulnerable due to having spread himself out too far. His electronic warfare capabilities are subpar, and he often simply relies on his ship or the Interference Generator for even having a partial capacity in that area.

Well, physically, unless you have some sort of enhancement or are a cyborg, it's obvious he has an advantage in that area. Go for ranged attacks, and move a lot. He's actually fairly slow, despite his jetpack, because his jetpack and other such things aren't made to go along with such a heavy droid. You should also target his head; f you crack his visor in multiple places, it'll seriously mess with sensor readings, and cause the equivalent of double vision. He also can’t really heal, due to the fact that he’s made out of metal, and repairs are difficult due to the specialty materials, so repairing him in the field (except for minor ones, or when you’re an amazing engineer) is fairly hard.

He'll probably try to move in to attack physically after softening you from a range. This is because he relies on the physical weaknesses of his opponents, which is what allows him, most of the time, to combat his opponents due to the fact that he’s slow (though he isn’t bulky, and is aesthetically pleasing), heavy, which can cause issues in certain environments (he even has certain modifications to make moving easier. That’s how bad it is, but don’t be confused about him being ridiculously slow, he’s just slower than most droids).

He has a lot of weaknesses, you just have to think about them.

GEAR:

Twin Hiraku Heavy Blasters that are using Hibanna gas instead of the standard blaster gas to slightly improve firepower

PSB-1br “Shoki” making use of Hibanna gas as well, and it has a grenade launcher

Two interlocking vibroblades capable of being used underwater

Wristband Blades

Retractable grappling cables

B-Type Grenades in a number of 6

Fire Suppression System

Voice & Audio Modulator

Heavy body that has been fully integrated into the droid to provide the features & statistics of the Guardian 7 Rhino Armor (he DOESN'T have this armor over a heavy metal body, and instead his armor is the heavy metal body)

Droid Self-Sustaining Unit

Droid Parabolic Guides

Full sensory suite (with everything from binoculars & microbinoculars, to an artificial olfactory system)

Gyroscopic Stabilizer

Magna-boots

Thrusters around body & a jet pack that allow movement in zero gravity, underwater, or simply when a jump from the jetpack is needed; however, the jetpack is slow compared to those that lift humans, which are lighter because they're, well, not hulking 800 pound metal droids, and required assistance to lift him properly lift/maneuver him in the air. It's not sluggish, but it certainly isn't as effective as your usual one due to be drastically more underpowered than what is needed; the jetpack doesn't work underwater AT ALL, and the thrusters are just so that he doesn't sink should water come up, or so that he can get to the surface, and they aren't powerful enough to allow him to stay underwater for extended periods of time (no longer than a few minutes), and actually have to be reinforced by two "lungs" that fill up with lighter than air gas created by a chemical reaction between a liquid and a solid (not the water, though) coming into contact with each other in two chambers, so that he can float up and make way to the shore, BUT it is possible that he could be retrofitted for a mission that requires this (the retrofit, however, will be temporary and WON'T be a permanent upgrade, like many other things that can be added to him as a retrofit)

Interference Generator

Ionization Buffer

Advanced sentient droid brain with specialized subprocessors for varying purposes, one of which allows him to control, communicate with, synchronize with, and have a data feed with many other droids. Outfitted with two removable Gabonna memory crystals, and one holocrystal, but it is also noted that the droid brain can store information itself. Note: He CANNOT take control of droids he doesn’t have access to, meaning that if he doesn’t have a the capacity to take control of a droid through something such as ownership, being given permission, or hacking into it (which can take time), that he can’t take control of said droids.

Droid System Fortification

Droid Warfare Upgrade (Allows him to learn things regarding warfare faster)

Droid Assassination Module

Redundancies for every major system (except sensors. When those go down, he doesn't have any sensory capabilities AT ALL) The redundancies are NEVER as effective as the original, and are always about the same as you would find in your usual, run of the mill droid, because expensive redundancies are expensive.

SHIP:

Paladin-class Escort Freighter (The "Lupine Adversary") that is piloted by Ascendant. The "Lupine Adversary" is capable of being controlled, at least partially, by Ascendancy’s neural impulses alone, and there is a module that allows it to act as a direct extension of himself, allowing for enhanced maneuvering. The ship has been sealed airtight, and outfitted with pressurization tools to allow for it to remain active even when submerged. On the rear, a space-mine ejector has been placed into the ship. The anti-missile system has been updated to the latest galactic standard, and also provides incoming/lock/danger warnings due to the artificial intelligence being integrated into the, now, automated anti-missile system. The cockpit has been rearranged to be more open, and allow movement through the ship more easily. Its engine has been updated to an ion engine trio, with additional magnetic surfaces added to improve maneuverability. An artificial intelligence, smart targeting system, and twin light laser turrets have been added to the vessel as well. Eight engineering droids that can detach from the vassal have been added so that, outside of battle, they can work on repairing the vessel, or mining, or similar engineering and multipurpose actions should it be necessary (they are controlled by the artificial intelligence). The crew includes 2 armed IG droids, but no other crew members aside from the AI tri-cluster droid brain, the FEG pilot droid, and his Astromech, most of which are not trained professionally in combat. It has room for 17 more to join them. The Freighter is equipped with 1 set of 6 proton torpedo pods, and 1 ECM/ECCM pod on its 2 hardpoints. It has a False ID Transponder, and a cockpit that has been turned into a FTL capable shuttle that can defend the pilot and some others from the ship’s explosion (the escape pods get this upgrade too). Half a metric ton worth of the ship's cargo space, and 3 of the 20 rooms that could have housed extra crew members or passengers have been retrofitted into the workshop and laboratory of Isaac, where he can work happily.

DROIDS:

One Astromech droid
 
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NOTE: This is for the next time line... I was just itching to get it up, so if he needs to be created again he WILL be ^_^.
 

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In the nicest possible way - is there anything this droid cannot do? He is above and beyond the power level of any existing droid I have ever seen in Star Wars, let alone in the era the new TL is set in.

In addition, this would be better of in the workshop, as the character profiles forum will be deleted when the new timeline starts.
 

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I have to agree with Norbs. This character seems blanetly over powered. I am not really sure where you go from there story wise. I can tell you from seeing it on the site, people generally do not enjoy RPing with (or against in the case of PvP) with characters like this as it leave little room for anyone else to contribute.

Part of almost any great story is a character over coming adversity and your character is equiped with no weaknesses.

I am not a tech guy at all so I can't critique your tech choices, but once again they seem a bit over the top.

Not trying to get on your case, just some advice from someone who has been around for bit.
 

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I was seeking some actual advice, instead of blanket terms here. What should I change? I know that there are problems with being powerful, but what exactly are those problems?

I think I'm just going to start by removing technology. I'll have a list of what I removed/changed technology and otherwise here ^_^

Removed flame thrower, triple redundancies, electromagnetic gauntlets for climbing & pushing/pulling, removed droid source ripper & security domination interface (thus drastically reducing his splicing capabilities), reduced maximum amount of droids able to be controlled w/out extra processing power from 20 to 5 - removed all the "in-depth knowledge" EXCEPT FOR info on droids, because if he doesn't have that then what kind of droid is he? - I also added a struggle with his own inhumanity, and a severe penalty of what would happen if the only person he cared about (Isaac) were to die, along with insinuations that his emotions are too complex for a droid, more coming soon
 
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I think the issue here is that this character - and trust me take a look at some of my older characters - is basically an indie faction himself. With 6 droids under its control, a crew of 12 on board the ship, as well as enough weapons to take on a small army, in addition to a fighter and programming so advanced that it would put any other Droid in the Star Wars universe to shame, it looks like your starting out with an end product.

What room would there be for growth? How can he improve, and more importantly how was such a droid made? It is basically an unstoppable combat machine, which means that few people are going to want to RP with it, as it is basically a fool-proof droid that cannot die.

I would suggest toning it down to a basic droid model, an IG Unit, with two weapons and no advanced programming beyond what an IG Unit would start with.
 

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Hi Mordred!

I would be happy to oblige.

I think it's important for you to know as someone new to SWRP that, usually, people tend to value characters more that have been created relatively barebones and gradually acquire new abilities, powers, skills etc through the RP. This is one of the biggest ways in which we can measure character growth.

I think there are a few inconsistencies besides the overpowered elements as well. This droid was designed by a seventeen year old? Also, he acquired sentience, but the way you've written about him is not a description of any inorganic mind. It really looks like you just put a human personality into a droid character. He can become depressed and has a very expressed sense of humor? I feel like this, and the general voice you've used to write him, does not really give the impression of an artificial character. I think that these would all sit much better and flow more naturally for the character itself if he were to begin as a droid with little knowledge of other lifeforms and gradually acquired an understanding of them (and a more naturally occurring sentience) through observation.

However, there are a few other issues that make the character a little incongruous on SWRP in its current state. To begin with, most characters in any RP have some drawback based purely on their species. In D&D we see this expressed as bonuses to certain abilities (Strength/Dexterity/Charisma/etc) and negative modifiers to others, which are meant to represent abstract details such as the strength and frailty, intelligence or lack thereof, of different races. In Star Wars this is generally not an issue because most organic species have roughly the same abilities with a few extra perks for a few species such as advanced empathy, greater strength, etc. In the case of a droid, this is difficult because droids are naturally created to react faster, be stronger, etc than organics. In some ways, the drawbacks are that droids generally don't make good characters precisely because of their lack of self-awareness. However, when you throw a personality into the mix, particularly one as human as this one, you basically just come with the full package.

This is why I, personally, think it would make more sense for your character to drop down to the 'Padawan' range of abilities where most new members start when they create characters for factions like the Jedi/Sith. In this case I think it would make more sense, and potentially be more satisfying for you as a writer, to slowly depict how Ascendant acquires humanity through his interaction with other PCs.

Now, moving on, there are a couple issues in power level, and I was surprised to see you'd already removed quite a bit of technology before I made this post. In my opinion, it's a bit broken that your character can interface with a small army of droids and control them simultaneously. I really don't think this is an appropriate ability for an entry-level character to begin with. Besides that, it's very unlikely that your character would have the resources to acquire

4 Updated Droideka with completely updated systems, enhanced AI, and a variety of sensors that allow it to act as a scouting unit at a long range for Ascendant

2 Exstasis Assassin Droids as guards/subordinates

before even starting to roleplay. Continuing from this point, Ascendant himself comes equipped with four dual phase lightsabers and potentially eight arms. Considering that most new characters aren't even allowed to be trained in a lightsaber form, this is rather excessive, especially considering the line about how he has an "electromagnetism generator" which basically gives him telekinesis, because if he can use it to control his lightsabers independently then there's no doubt he can use it for other things as well. The fact of the matter is that there's no real justification for any organic being able to beat Ascendant in a fight straight-up with all the abilities he has. This isn't very conducive to balanced roleplaying.

Most characters are only allowed a single ship upon being created, with some leeway if they're (for example) leaders of independent factions, of higher rank than usual, etc. Ascendant is practically an independent faction in and of himself, controlling two freighters and the entire crew between them (as well as six other droids I only just noticed in the pet section).

Overall, I think that you'll find posting Ascendant in this timeline was worth it because of the feedback you'll get, as he'll require a pretty big overhaul before he's balanced for the next timeline. Most of his weaknesses seem like, more than anything, minor concessions to make it seem like he has specific 'kryptonites' that will cripple an otherwise unbeatable monster (ie, the lack of redundancies for his sensory systems). Also, a lot of the site-created technology you reference will need to be changed because it will be archived once the 5th timeline ends.

Hopefully this post will be helpful for you. In case it requires saying, I'm not attacking your character. The biographical sections are fairly well written (with the caveat that I think his origin is a little unrealistic, even by Star Wars' standards) and I'd be happy to help you work on refining the character for use in timeline 6, either on this thread, via PM, or however else you feel like contacting me. I'll see you around the site, otherwise.

Jake
 

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I really want to thank you both for your advice, and I will make the changes I stated below, and probably some more changes to tone him down. I want this character to be my pride and joy on this site, but I also want him to have room for developing as a character instead of just being your average droid. His emotions are the big thing here, especially with his protectiveness of his creator, and the fact he can enjoy very close friendships.

I think the issue here is that this character - and trust me take a look at some of my older characters - is basically an indie faction himself. With 6 droids under its control, a crew of 12 on board the ship, as well as enough weapons to take on a small army, in addition to a fighter and programming so advanced that it would put any other Droid in the Star Wars universe to shame, it looks like your starting out with an end product.

What room would there be for growth? How can he improve, and more importantly how was such a droid made? It is basically an unstoppable combat machine, which means that few people are going to want to RP with it, as it is basically a fool-proof droid that cannot die.

I would suggest toning it down to a basic droid model, an IG Unit, with two weapons and no advanced programming beyond what an IG Unit would start with.

The entire point of the droid is to have a droid that has programming advanced enough that he has issues with his emotions, and finds personal conflict on certain kinds of missions. Could you help me tone him down power wise, instead of advancement wise? I DO NOT want him to be an invincible combat machine, and I will be lowering the amount of droids he has under his control, but I was just hoping that the crew could stay. Is the crew too much? I was just following the amount recommended for the amount of crew on the freighter, because the freighter can't operate without that many. What about if I reduce the amount of advanced and armed crew droids to around two or three, and then have the rest of the crew be some sort of engineering droid, or maybe organics with little training in combat? Would that work?

Hi Mordred!

I would be happy to oblige.

I think it's important for you to know as someone new to SWRP that, usually, people tend to value characters more that have been created relatively barebones and gradually acquire new abilities, powers, skills etc through the RP. This is one of the biggest ways in which we can measure character growth.

I think there are a few inconsistencies besides the overpowered elements as well. This droid was designed by a seventeen year old? Also, he acquired sentience, but the way you've written about him is not a description of any inorganic mind. It really looks like you just put a human personality into a droid character. He can become depressed and has a very expressed sense of humor? I feel like this, and the general voice you've used to write him, does not really give the impression of an artificial character. I think that these would all sit much better and flow more naturally for the character itself if he were to begin as a droid with little knowledge of other lifeforms and gradually acquired an understanding of them (and a more naturally occurring sentience) through observation.

However, there are a few other issues that make the character a little incongruous on SWRP in its current state. To begin with, most characters in any RP have some drawback based purely on their species. In D&D we see this expressed as bonuses to certain abilities (Strength/Dexterity/Charisma/etc) and negative modifiers to others, which are meant to represent abstract details such as the strength and frailty, intelligence or lack thereof, of different races. In Star Wars this is generally not an issue because most organic species have roughly the same abilities with a few extra perks for a few species such as advanced empathy, greater strength, etc. In the case of a droid, this is difficult because droids are naturally created to react faster, be stronger, etc than organics. In some ways, the drawbacks are that droids generally don't make good characters precisely because of their lack of self-awareness. However, when you throw a personality into the mix, particularly one as human as this one, you basically just come with the full package.

This is why I, personally, think it would make more sense for your character to drop down to the 'Padawan' range of abilities where most new members start when they create characters for factions like the Jedi/Sith. In this case I think it would make more sense, and potentially be more satisfying for you as a writer, to slowly depict how Ascendant acquires humanity through his interaction with other PCs.

Now, moving on, there are a couple issues in power level, and I was surprised to see you'd already removed quite a bit of technology before I made this post. In my opinion, it's a bit broken that your character can interface with a small army of droids and control them simultaneously. I really don't think this is an appropriate ability for an entry-level character to begin with. Besides that, it's very unlikely that your character would have the resources to acquire

before even starting to roleplay. Continuing from this point, Ascendant himself comes equipped with four dual phase lightsabers and potentially eight arms. Considering that most new characters aren't even allowed to be trained in a lightsaber form, this is rather excessive, especially considering the line about how he has an "electromagnetism generator" which basically gives him telekinesis, because if he can use it to control his lightsabers independently then there's no doubt he can use it for other things as well. The fact of the matter is that there's no real justification for any organic being able to beat Ascendant in a fight straight-up with all the abilities he has. This isn't very conducive to balanced roleplaying.

Most characters are only allowed a single ship upon being created, with some leeway if they're (for example) leaders of independent factions, of higher rank than usual, etc. Ascendant is practically an independent faction in and of himself, controlling two freighters and the entire crew between them (as well as six other droids I only just noticed in the pet section).

Overall, I think that you'll find posting Ascendant in this timeline was worth it because of the feedback you'll get, as he'll require a pretty big overhaul before he's balanced for the next timeline. Most of his weaknesses seem like, more than anything, minor concessions to make it seem like he has specific 'kryptonites' that will cripple an otherwise unbeatable monster (ie, the lack of redundancies for his sensory systems). Also, a lot of the site-created technology you reference will need to be changed because it will be archived once the 5th timeline ends.

Hopefully this post will be helpful for you. In case it requires saying, I'm not attacking your character. The biographical sections are fairly well written (with the caveat that I think his origin is a little unrealistic, even by Star Wars' standards) and I'd be happy to help you work on refining the character for use in timeline 6, either on this thread, via PM, or however else you feel like contacting me. I'll see you around the site, otherwise.

Jake

I was hoping to explore my droid with his personality the way it was, as stated before, and I really don't want to change that aspect of him. I removed the electromagnetism generator, as well as the gravity generator. He only has one freighter, and an attack fighter, though, and he's going to be a somewhat high ranking member of Czerka, so I was hoping for him to have more advantages than the usual droid in that respect. He's not the usual droid, he's different, he's more human, and he has emotions that, while synthetic and with their own bugs, can make him drastically change. Due to the emotions being synthetic, however, they aren't as powerful as those of organics. The most powerful emotional attachment he has is to the synthetic blind boy, who can't do much other than design wonderful things, and get advice on how to make them look from friends, who just so happens to be his creator. This is in parallel to the point I see so many others (on different sites, of course) playing robotic characters make, where they hate or have rebelled against their creators. I'm removing the potential for eight arms by removing the Endoskeleton, and am going to be making some more edits based off of this post after I muse on your comments, and think of what to change.

I'm going to edit the Droideka, to make the note that they were found. Not purchased, but found. Isaac's supplier is a scavenger, and Ascendant often brings Isaac the things he has killed or found, so I think I'm going to add that to the history ^_^ I removed the Extasis Assassination Droids.

And please remember that the freighter is designed to be the home of Isaac and Ascendant, as well as the "base of operations" of the duo ^_^

I'll be sending you a PM to get more assistance ^_^
 

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Just to clarify, he is not going to be starting at any higher a-rank than any other member bar the CEO.

Other than that I would suggest removing the crew, again - you are starting out. You should take a look at other characters, and see what they have in their possession, and what skills they have.
 

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Just to clarify, he is not going to be starting at any higher a-rank than any other member bar the CEO.

Other than that I would suggest removing the crew, again - you are starting out. You should take a look at other characters, and see what they have in their possession, and what skills they have.

:( Okay, well, I don't know if I want to remove the crew just yet. The ship can't operate without a crew. I suppose I can remove, but I'll have to think on that. I'm not sure I want to.
 

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Wouldn't not having a crew to start with itself be a host of interesting RP hooks to start with? You'll have to find players or at least RP getting some NPCs to get things going.
 

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Made some MASSIVE edits. Can you guys read over it again, and tell me what else I need to change? :eek: I need to rework the biography/personality, I think, but I just can't find the heart to, so I modified the strengths/weaknesses to make the notice he is still developing his sentience.

Edit: I DID IT! I rewrote his history/personality. It may look the same at a first glance, but if you read it then you'll notice the differences.
 
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I updated/somewhat rewrote his history, worked on his Strengths/Weaknesses, and removed old mentions of things I edited out of the character. How is he doing so far, guys?
 

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Just a few things:
  1. I would remove the light saber skills
  2. Happy Christmas
  3. I would also remove the Droidekas
  4. Happy Christmas
  5. Also, how is he slower than most droids yet can run at 40 mph?
 

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Just a few things:
  1. I would remove the light saber skills
  2. Happy Christmas
  3. I would also remove the Droidekas
  4. Happy Christmas
  5. Also, how is he slower than most droids yet can run at 40 mph?

1. I thought that he could have a lightsaber skill since I couldn't find any swordfighting skills/vibroblade skills for dual wielding. Is there a vibrosword/vibroblade dual fighting style I can use instead? I just added Niman because he had vibroswords, and I couldn't find any other fighting style information :o
2. Merry Christmas
3. ;-; He needs some type of combat droid. How come other people can have combat droids, like that one assault recon droid, but he can't have Droidekas retrofitted into heavy assault droids? I'll try and find an alternative, and POTENTIALLY just make one.
4. Merry Christmas
5. Well, I've seen droids on here that are capable of easily running at speeds approaching 80 miles per hour. You see, droids don't have muscles, they don't fatigue (unless they have that weird thing where they can temporarily run faster), and they can run much faster than human beings. Due to Ascendant's construction and the lack of properly equipped legs, he's slower than other droids. Would you like me to lower it? I want him to be at least a little faster than an organic, because that's what Droids are supposed to be like.
 

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Still too strong. Still too fast. Still too resilient. Still too agile. Still has too many weapons. Still has too many additional features. Controlling other droids is Overpowered. Way too heavy. Way too modular. Too many "Wink Wink gonna upgrade him" moments.
 

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We are never shown robots in the series that run faster than humans, fact most seem to be slower at least when we are shown battle droids. Fastest droids we see, roll.

Look at how hard it is to get robots to run today, let alone in a battlefield situation where the ground is broken, things happen to throw it off balance.

The context you are arguing for muscles being a factor is one for Endurance, not top speed. Given his weight, I'd limit it to 20 mph but a constant mph, able to do it for days.
 

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We are never shown robots in the series that run faster than humans, fact most seem to be slower at least when we are shown battle droids. Fastest droids we see, roll.

Look at how hard it is to get robots to run today, let alone in a battlefield situation where the ground is broken, things happen to throw it off balance.

The context you are arguing for muscles being a factor is one for Endurance, not top speed. Given his weight, I'd limit it to 20 mph but a constant mph, able to do it for days.

I might go a bit lower, but that's pretty much on the mark.
 

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I'll lower it to 22 mph.

Besides, he's NOT too strong, NOT too resilient, NOT too agile. All droids are physically superior to organics. I'm just basing it off of some of the stuff I've read. They are capable of lifting MANY, MANY times their body weight, are extremely resilient due to being made out of metal, and have joints that can rotate at any point. Give me a reason why he's "too strong" or "too agile", and why he can't be physically superior to organics. He's about on par with most droids of his class, physically ^_^. You're a silly person if you think I'm going to purposely note that he's weaker than the average droid, just because you don't like the fact that, as a droid, he has the capacity to be physically superior to organics (That's at Outlander. If that sounds rude, I apologize, but I'm getting tired of people pointing out things that go along with droids. Besides, he has some unique attributes, and isn't going to be a carbon copy of other droids, which is why his capacity to control other droids is staying. Plus, he's NOT too heavy. He's made up entirely of duranium, and other metals. >_> He's also 7 feet tall, and I'm thinking of making him 8 feet tall. At 7 feet tall, and comprised entirely of super heavy metal, you're going to be very heavy).
 
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