Evihl Ti

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EVIHL TI
“If it is me you’re after, you’ve already made a mistake.”
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NAME: Evihl Ti
FACTION: New Jedi Order
RANK: Padawan
SPECIES: Togruta
AGE: 16
GENDER: Female
HEIGHT: 5’7
WEIGHT: 125 + 20 (Montral) +5 (Headtail) = 145
EYES: Dark Violet
HAIR: Black Montral’s w/ white designs
SKIN: Bright Coral
CREDITS: 900 Credits
DISTINGUISHING MARKS: Gashes on her back, a sliced Head Tail down her back.
FORCE SENSITIVE: Yes, keen sensitivity.


STRENGTH: Cannot lift a 50 pound stone but she will try. 3/10
DEXTERITY: Always on the edge but safe. They’re very nimble and purposely imbalanced. 8/10
CONSTITUTION: Never been known to become ill and has great immunity to sickness.8/10
INTELLIGENCE: Educated well by Elders, She’s shown to have great potential. 6/10
WISDOM: Often acts as a mediator and are looked to for guidance-- yet so young. 7/10
CHARISMA: Speak with purpose but are more comfortable in smaller groups than larger. 5/10


PERSONALITY:____________________________________________________________________________________________________

Evihl Ti was once a child of such hope and ambition that was quickly diminished and suppressed by the anger of her clan and tensions of imminent war. Due to her stress levels fluctuating, she often found herself feeling like a different person. She developed a Bipolar Disorder that caused her to become very stern, alert and cold or thoughtful, calm and vibrant. She is a very temperamental but benevolent person. Her state of mind depends on her stress and what her current situation entails. She is known for being all-around a kindhearted person, even through her cold persona. Becoming more of a peacekeeper than her sister ever was is what drives Evihl.

The young Togruta girl saw the hatred and anger that filled her family's hearts and they had tried to consume her, but she would resist. She had killed her Mother and Sister during the battle in which Evihl had betrayed them for the better ending for both sides. This decision would bring her pain and sadness that she would work to overcome. She would look to the Jedi to help train her to control such violence. When left to herself, her thoughts can run rampant if not occupied by something else; making her dwell in many strange places in her mind. She had taken time to course her mind to help straighten out her thoughts until she realized what made her who she was and how she was likely to change in the future. She felt that she was ready for Jedi training and looked ahead with confidence.

BIOGRAPHY:_________________________________________________________________________________________

Evhl Ti is of the Togruta race Of Shili within the 45th Region. She was raised to fight within a growing tension of war over land and resources, a Cold war that eventually turned bloody. The Mother, an experienced veteran whom had lost their significant other in battle, trained Evhl while the Sister, a Jedi, had returned home to help their end of the conflict. They’d been through many battles together but the abuse that Evihl had endured during her training was immense-- Everyone saying that her style of fighting would be the death of her. She’d had enough and after learning the truths of the reasonings behind the war, how they were simply planning to annihilate the other clan for sport, she’d escape each night and relay information to the opposing Togruta clan and eventually joined their ranks.

Once the two clans fought, the family was surprised to see Evihl’s betrayal. That night was long, full of confusion and emotions but they fought as if it were any other battle. They’d finally clash within haze of war and Evihl’s blade would hit the hilt of her sister’s Lightsaber causing it to sling into the air. Evhl managed to slide between her sister’s legs to catch it on the other side; slicing her sister's legs at the knees. Once Evihl stood, In one swift motion, an arrow made impact to her shoulder was quickly pulled out and fired back to it's origin. She watched the arrow pierce their skull and watched them fall limp. It was strange seeing her Mother’s lifeless gaze meeting hers and disconnect as their shocked expression met the dirt ground. She returned from her mission, commended and allowed the privileges of leading her own clan. It was said that she should become a Jedi for the fact that she defeated her sister; others claiming that she was stronger but Evihl did not see that as the truth.

Nights were harsh on the girl as she remembered seeing her sisters hatred filled eyes disperse into a tearful agony of sorrow before Evihl would strike them down. The memories of her betrayal to the family, even though it seemed like the right decision-- it had left her with nothing. Her sister survived but was ultimately left for dead and the Mother was there to rot while Evihl lived on. When questioned about why she’d killed her sister, she stated that her sisters judgement was clouded and filled with hatred. Evihl believed that her Sister returned to the planet to release her anger and cause chaos, not bring peace. Evihl would state that she could take her place and become a true Jedi Knight. She waited for one day to be taken in as a Padawan and during that time she trained with her sisters Lightsaber, never forgetting how lost her sister had become, even as a Jedi.


FORCE POWERS:______________________________________________________________________________________

Force Speed: Adept
Force Jump: Novice
Force Weapon: Apprentice
Force Push: Apprentice
Force Pull: Apprentice
Force Sense: Adept​

SKILLS:
Imbalanced Combat: Though her strength is lacking, her ability to keep a weapon in her hand and control is far beyond what people expect from her. She may seem defenseless but can disarm and use weapons to her advantage and against their masters.

Combat Savvy: She is incredibly agile and has high tolerance for imbalance. Her fighting style may seem a bit like she has no clue what she is doing but that is because she is able to work off her enemies attacks and with her flexibility-- confuse and use her nimble movement to gain and advantage.

Survival Ability: She is educated on the ability to live off the land and with guidance from the Elder’s. They’re capable of surviving some of the worst conditions that her planet had to offer and even survived a several month journey that started with many but ended with the return of three, herself being the youngest of the group.

LIGHTSABER/SWORD FORMS:
Form IV Ataru
Desires to learn Form VII

STRENGTHS AND WEAKNESSES:_________________________________________________________________________

It is no secret that Evihl is weak but capable of great and unpredictable combat. However, this unpredictability can be counteracted as she’ll often de-arm herself for a split moment to get a better balance for her attacks. This is when it is most prominent and a high-risk, high-reward decision, so if not made at the right time; can ask for very dangerous results. She’s been able to deal with most of her enemies the first time of fighting them but should they escape, they’d know her attack patterns and easily abuse that factor.

Evihl is capable of enduring battle for many hours and days; trained specifically for war. Yet, overtime, her process of fighting may seem repetitive or relaxed due to the extensive fighting that she is use to. Her strongest strikes are at the beginning, the rest are relatively the same force. She has an imbalance factor that gives her a slight advantage but that is easily countered.

Emotionally, Evhil is very unstable and can sometimes even be lead to doing things that even she couldn’t see herself doing. Striking down her Mother and Sister during battle was unexpected but she was surprised that she could. Afterward, the thoughts ate her alive and eventually forced her to meditate to regain her composure at times. She is most weakened by her Personality Disorder. During her more vibrant phase, she is more agile and quick. Yet, during her cold and stern phase, she is more predictable and balanced-- meaning her style of fighting becomes weakened.

GEAR:_______________________________________________________________________________________________
Her sisters Lightsaber, an Orange saber with a thin hilt.
Boots, One-piece outfit, gloves and cloak to hide the scars on her back.
Belt equipped with a bag which contained various small tools. (knife, first aid, smoke bombs)

SHIP:
A used and modified V-wing Airspeeder-like vessel that belonged to her Sister. A distinctive blood red paint on the wings with a modified roof top.
DROIDS:
No droids.
PETS:
No pets.
KILLS:
N/A
BOUNTIES COLLECTED:
N/A
DUELING RING MATCHES:
N/A
GRAND TOURNAMENT MATCHES:
N/A
ROLE-PLAYS:
N/A

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Lyvi's Comments.

If you have more information on Shili and/or the race I've choose, please by all means; tell me. I'm fairly new to the Star Wars universe and am working with my limited knowledge. Please be constructive in your criticism as I do not completely know everything there is to know on how my character should be and if I've done this correctly. Thank you! Any further comments or edits will be placed below the history...

- Lyvi
 
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Ral

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Hey, so you wanted some feedback so I thought I'd give you some as a player instead or a faction leader.

So, for the first part everything looks good, but she's a little light. Something I've noticed (granted this is incredibly nitpicky, and it's not just you so don't feel bad or take this personally) is that people tend to forget that Togruta and Twi'leks have extra mass on their heads. Lekku are largely fat deposits as far as we know (with some bit of muscle and other tissues of course), but each lekku tends to weigh between 8-20 pounds realistically, so most Togruta should be about 25-50 pounds heavier than a human of the same build.

Personality: Her personality disorder sounds a bit like bipolar disorder. I'm not sure if that's what you're going for, but to me that's sorta what it sounds like. Not that this is a bad thing, mind you, you're allowed to have a character with whatever personality disorders you'd like, just remember to apply them in the RP! There is one part where you say, "Her statues depends on her level of stress and what the situation entails." I'm not sure if you meant to say statues or status or another word. I think disposition is what you're going for, though. There are a few other words that you use, like vibrance when you meant to say (at least I think you meant to say) violence, if I'm wrong I suggest explaining what you mean by vibrance. Again, this mostly simple nitpicky stuff that you could probably solve with a read through and basic edit to make it a little clearer. Otherwise I like it, I think she could be really interesting and have plenty of room to grow!

Biography: Alright, so mostly this suffers from the same issues as the personality section. A few wrong words and it could probably use a proof read and a minor edit here and there to make the read smoother and clearer. Maybe go into more detail about why she betrayed her side and how killing her family affected her. Otherwise, again, I think it's interesting, not bad for a first profile. My only quip is that you sorta glaze over how she finds the Jedi because in this timeline they're still rather hard to find.

Skills and strengths and weaknesses looks fine to me. Others might have something else to say though. Hope I didn't come off as rude. Can't wait to see where you go with her in the RP! :)
 

Rae Anne Jarrus

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She can't pick up 50 lbs?? That makes me feel like Hercules. I can pick up 60 and I'm 14 and 102 lbs. And I think I'm 5'9" I haven't measured me lately... XD
 

Tristyn

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I can lift my own weight and I weigh 60kg (130lb)
 

Rae Anne Jarrus

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Oh wow. I haven't gotten that far yet, but I'm getting there. I own a horse so that pretty much why I can pick up that much because that about how much bags of grain weigh. But I hope to get past the 60.
 

Tristyn

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You are only 2 years younger than me, you shouldn't be far off. But anyway Togruta seems to be gaining popularity, which is awesome!
 
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