Fel Knav

[SwineOfTheSkies]

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NAME: Fel Knav
FACTION: The Jedi Order
RANK:Padawan
SPECIES: Kel Dor
AGE: 22
GENDER: Male
HEIGHT: 5’10
WEIGHT: 156lbs
EYES: Silver iris
SKIN:Peach
CREDITS:1000
DISTINGUISHING MARKS: A large scar above his right eye
FORCE SENSITIVE:Yes
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Spoiler: Skills and Statistics

STRENGTH: 6/10
DEXTERITY: 6/10
CONSTITUTION: 7/10
INTELLIGENCE: 8/10
WISDOM: 8/10
CHARISMA:3/10

FORCE POWERS:
Force Push
Force Light
Force Telekinesis
Force Affect Mind

SKILLS: Fel is a exceptional starpilot and swordsman.

LIGHTSABER/SWORD FORMS:
Fel Knav utilizes the forms Shii-Cho (Form I) Soresu (Form III)

Spoiler: Possessions

GEAR:

Lightsaber:

Crystal color:Green

Grappling Hook
Blaster Pistol
Jedi Beacon
Jedi Imagecaster


SHIP:

“Shield Of Dorin” YT-2000 light freighter

DROIDS:

LE-4K, LE series Repair Droid

R9 series Astromech,R9-G2

Spoiler: Personality

Fel Knav is calm and collected like any other Jedi. Also like most Jedi he has very strong emotional control and keeps his mind on the objective. Though maintaining these traits he has a certain pride for his home planet of Dorin and his species. By being a jedi he strives to be a prominent representative of his species in the order. Aside from so he also has the desire to get a seat on the Jedi council. Fel is also a strong believe in keeping the jedi code and never to disobey it as others are starting to. He believes never to be corrupted and to always serve the jed and not a third party as he has now dedicated his life to the order.i.

Spoiler: Biography

Fel's earliest memory was when the cold Ilum wind had brushed his mask as he climbed up the sheet of ice in the gloomy cave. Ilum, Nel and a group of younglings were acquiring their lightsaber crystals. He was in a seperate tunnel in the cave system as were the other younglings. He climbed up a small wall of ice into a arch to reveal a large chamber coating with crystals. He looked around to see a faint green glow from a part of the chamber brighter. He climbed up to the ice platform to see a green crystal on a small outcropping of ice. He knew it was his...it had to be. So he then grabbed it with his hand and took his time back down the ice. When he returned he was the third of six to retrieve his crystal. Soon enough him and the rest of the younglings departed for Coruscant.

By the time Fel constructed his lightsaber and turned 14 he got his first master. His mater's name was Ryknus Varon, human. Nel spent his first four years of apprenticeship navigating his way through completing the trials and learning lightsaber combat styles and the way of the force. The first mission they both went on was to eliminate an imperial knight on Geonosis. They arrived with a team of alliance troopers and embarked to the knight's hold by land transport to find him and his apprentice waiting the jedi with a team of Imperium Troopers. Ryknus engaged in a lightsaber duel with the master while Fel fought the apprentice. The apprentice was a sithspawn equipped with a double bladed lightsaber. Whilst the Imperium and Alliance trooper were battling the jedi and sith dueled. Both duels lasted the same amount of time,about 12 minutes and both the jedi were successful and the mission was accomplished.

Fel progressed his journey at a rather moderate pace and he and his master did what the Jedi Order asked of the master and apprentice. Then Ryknus time had finally come when he had died to a sith out in a starship in deep space. The sith had stabbed his master through the back before engaging Fel in a duel to a draw in which they both escaped. Now Fel is a padawan without a master to teach him the ways of the force.

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ROLE-PLAYS:
Catchhawk: Return Home
The Battle Of Endor: The Pride Of Tarlandia
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[Orphen]

mmkay, as this is obviously a work in progress, i simply have one thing to point out.

Your starting rank for a first character would be padawan. As you progress and grow and learn and master more skills (which is not hard nor long) you will get stronger and more proficient, and as a general site rule, you're able to make a character at any strength you have worked a character up to before. Eg, if you've achieved Jedi knight the hard way, you can make another 'knight,' likewise for master.

The other thing is your starting abilities. 2 in particular. Both shatterpoint and light are 'very' advanced skills. which would denote a higher rank in the Jedi order than padawan. I would learn them both once you get promoted to knight. As force light is the "purest manifestation, and ultimate outward ability of the light side of the force" and shatterpoint is almost literally " being able to see the faults in time and space and being able to exploit them with the force."

It also gives you the chance to learn them in character, which makes for interesting threads which 'will' help you to attain master rank faster.

EDIT: also, as one last piece of advice, if you physically 'type' the letters and symbols [IMG,][/IMG,] But 'without' the commas, you should get your pics full sized

Also, I'd remove Soresu, if not just because Djem so is the balanced form, and there's also a one form per rank thing (padawans should know one, Knight would master one and know another, Masters would master two)

I'd just like to say I'm not trying to rip into you, just trying to give you constructive feedback.

 

[Solaris]

Force Light isn't 'one of the most advanced powers'. It's pretty simple and easy to learn/use for a light-sider. The more potent manifestations of the power would be beyond his reach, but the lesser versions are fine.

Shatterpoint is a power that is more an innate talent than a learned ability. While yes, it is theoretically able to break events... it can't. That use of the power is banned on this site. He'd only be able to break objects.

You're using their most powerful, most advanced manifestations as the benchmark when you should be using their beginning forms. As a Padawan, Swine, your character really ought not to have any powers above 5, and should more be along the lines of 1-4. He is, after all, a rookie.

 

[SwineOfTheSkies]

Edited a good amount of stuff.

 

[GABA]

I think 'lack of emotion' is poorly written, probably what you will be looking for is more along the lines of emotional control. Otherwise, I have no other issues with the profile. : ]

 

[SwineOfTheSkies]

I agree, I'll change that right now.