Jokay-Akurn

[Jokay-Akurn]

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NAME: Jokay-Akurn (Last name is Unknown)
FACTION: Independent
RANK: Jedi Apprentice
SPECIES: Human
AGE: 20
GENDER: Male
HEIGHT: 6'6
WEIGHT: 179
EYE: Brown
HAIR: Brown
SKIN: Tan.
CREDITS: 1,000
DISTINGUISHING MARKS: A Jedi symbol on his left forearm
DOMINATE HAND: Left-Handed
FORCE SENSITIVE: Yes

Strength: He is not the strongest person alive, But can still lift things around 120 Pounds (Without force powers)
Dexterity: Because of his Light weight and armor, He is very nimble and can run Extremely fast. For a example, He runs a mile in 6:00 Minutes
Constituion: He can last a while in a fight against Lightsaber or blaster, But he is still training therefore he will become tired and die If fighting one who is stronger then him.
Intelligence: Where he lacks in physical power he makes up in intelligence, He is extremely smart and uses strategy to defeat people. He always studied well.
Wisdom: Because of his young age he is not very wise, Only smart.
Charisma: He is a good influence to others and has a kind hand, Not many know him so he has no influence Atm.

Force Powers:
(none yet)

Skills:
A master at the vibroblade, A martial arts master, A kind person, A agile person and a good fighter in general

Lightsaber/Sword Forms:
Wanting to be accepted by the jedi order, He has yet to learn how to weild a Lightsaber (How do I join Jedi Order?)

Strengths and Weaknesses: Somtimes he can become to Passive and miss out on important things in a battle, unlike some jedi and sith insted of running into battles he can wait for to long of a time and be attacked and (Could) be fatally killed. He is still though a very good fighter, especially with his Vibro Blade

Gear:
Vibro Blade
Teras-Kasi Armor (Can resist ONE blow from a lightsaber, not uber?)
Cloak
Waistpack
Health Stim
Food + Water
Backpack
Blaster

Ship: none

Pets: None

Personality:
Jokay is a extremely passive person and usually scared for his life, Since all the things that have been happening around his time. Throughout his life he was a happy person but always scared because he was force sensitive. He was a passive person because he thinks that fighting in general is a "Stupid" thing, He will often use the phrase "That was ignorant" or, "You silly bafoon". He will try to act over his actual age because of the fact that he wants to be a Jedi already.
He is also a very good and kind person as well. He cares for his friends and even people he doesnt know which is one of the main reasons he wanted to become a Jedi not a Sith. He had been learning how to be such a nice person from the Teras Kasi that raised him from a small child. He likes to play around with his friends by teasing them and calling them names but in the long run he will do almost anything for them, Even die. He has always loved life in all beings and wants to protect it

History:
When Jokay was a small boy his parents were killed for unknown reasons and left him in a ditch on Dantooine, This is where he was found by some of the wandering martial arts masters known as the Teras Kasi, These masters were almost always very ruthless fighters and, To his knowledge were mean people. But the woman among the group took pity on him and took them back to his village.
The womans name was Leetaka-Enkia, A Twilek Teras Kasi, She took me up and raised me as a boy hoping that I would become a powerful young Teras Kasi and named me Jokay-Akurn, She wanted me to not know all the things that had happened to my actual family and began raising me up as a Teras Kasi intell she found out that I was, infact force sensetive. She couldnt let the others hear about me because it could cause in fighting and mabey even my death. And hid me way raising me intell I was the age of 18 and a martial arts master, As well as a vibroblade master
After my 18th birthday she was about to tell me the real truth about my family when things went horribly wroung. The clan had found out that I was force sensitive and were enraged that she had not told them about me, They stabbed her in the back with a sword as I sat there terrified, Her last words were "Your family.....They are all dead..I *cough* cant...tell you a...an..anymore......becom....a je..jedi...my...son" Then faded away.......
After that I knew I couldnt kill the entire clan so I ran, Ran away crying wishing she wasent dead and ran for my life, I managed to find a way off the planet and made it to courasant with only 1,000 credits, Where he inteded to find a Master and did what his mother told him. Become a Jedi.

Kills: None

Dueling ring Matches: None

Grand Tournys: None

Rps: http://www.thestarwarsrp.com/forum/showthread.php?t=17813&page=2


((Tell me if i Need to fix.))

 

[Ru the Boatswain]

Seems alright, but I am not sure. Could use a little story.

 

[Lavi]

You claim in your stats that your character is lacking in stuff, but lifting 120 pounds is considerable strength. I can barely bench-press 40. Your stats are a bit stacked.

Dantooine is also not a playable planet: we're in the Expansion Region (basically the inner planets plus a couple near its borders, in the Middle Rim): no Middle and Outer Rim planets.

Also, "resisting" lightsaber blows is pretty vague for that armor of yours: how does it resist a blade that is capable of cutting almost any material? Plus, it doesn't make much sense: would hitting the armor once with a lightsaber make the whole thing useless? Or would that particular spot that was attacked be vulnerable?

 

[jimmy_moon]

A few technical things:
there are a few spelling errors in your profile (it's spelled until, not intell), in the history you switch from third to first person, either one's okay, but both is a little weird, and the Sith are thousands of years from existing.

 

[Sir Dakar]

You claim in your stats that your character is lacking in stuff, but lifting 120 pounds is considerable strength. I can barely bench-press 40.

Bench-press and lifting are not the same thing... some muscles overlap, but I know when I lift I mostly use my legs. His legs are trained to lift 180 pounds and humans develop leg muscles like crazy, so I would be surprised if he could life upwards of 250.

 

[Ser Yorick]

You claim in your stats that your character is lacking in stuff, but lifting 120 pounds is considerable strength. I can barely bench-press 40. Your stats are a bit stacked.

Wow, you are extremely weak... I can bench over a hundred not including the weight of the bar. And I'm weak.

 

[Kit]

Wow, you are extremely weak... I can bench over a hundred not including the weight of the bar. And I'm weak.

Lbs or KG? Because 100KG bench press for a teen ain't weak. Not even a little.

 

[Storm]

Without even looking at it, "image is avatar" isn't a good idea.

Avatars change, and it's always better to have it in a profile. =)

 

[Lavi]

Bench-press and lifting are not the same thing... some muscles overlap, but I know when I lift I mostly use my legs. His legs are trained to lift 180 pounds and humans develop leg muscles like crazy, so I would be surprised if he could life upwards of 250.

My err, then...

 

[Rev]

My err, then...

I hope you're not counting the bar when you lift. Cause the bar is 50 alone :-p

 

[Ser Yorick]

Lbs or KG? Because 100KG bench press for a teen ain't weak. Not even a little.

Pounds. He said pounds.

 

[Kit]

Pounds. He said pounds.

Oh, right. Must've missed that then, cause I'm used to Kgs in terms of weights, so I was a little thrown there...

 

[Jokay-Akurn]

Mabey im not just ment for this sight....That was quite alot that is wroung with it and I worked pretty hard. -sigh-

 

[Project]

Again, with the grammatical failures, but don't be upset, everybody makes one... but your character seems to be just a idea that you did not thought through.
For example, there is no material in this timeline, that really can stand a lightsaber.An material would be Beskar, also known as mandalorian Iron - but in 13.000 BBY are no mandalorians.They settled it 7000 BBY - other Materials were developed later, as far as i remember.(Cortosis and so on)
Another thing that i saw was, that you wrote "Teras Kasi" armor - it is Teräs Käsi, and they never developed any armor.
As allready mentioned, the Sith do not exist in this timeline, so you cant write "unlike some jedi and 'sith'."

Skills:
A master at the vibroblade, A martial arts master, A kind person, A agile person and a good fighter in general

I quoted this, because your character has with the skills, even the chance to kill a baran do sage (the highest rank of the sages is sage... a little bit confusing) and those guys, are even to some of the strongest fighters, technically Jedi-Masters, except their force techniques.
To the vibroblade thing, i remember that it was mentioned (im not sure) that cortosis is not devoloped, so aren't vibroblades then.
Also it is quiet not nice to read, you allways begin with A (also it is written as small letter, only the beginning of a sentence with A is wrote big)
Your character has the skills of a Jedi-Master, but is a apprentice, which doesn't make sense.
And atleast, you join the Jedi-Order as Padawan if your character is over 10(youngling age) and search a Master, in the Master/Padawan thread.
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This is my sight of things, you can care about it, or not.