Need feedback on a RP

[The Lionheart]

FEEDBACK​

...on that fight, and what people thought of Vedic in general - and what they think of Mikelus, now.​

:CStern​

I don't care whether you care or not, so keep your 'I don't know who he is, I don't care who he is, I haven't read, blah blah blah' comments out of here.​

:CStern​

For the people who have taken the time and courtesy to read what I've done with Vedic Cael and the others around him,​

I'd like to have your thoughts, comments, and criticisms on the character and general story flow.​

I'm not going to stay here to 'RP' endlessly with things that evolve into nothing. The reason I have come to these places - and continued to participate here - is to try to improve my writing abilities and character concepts, story concepts, etc., somewhat. So, now that I've actually closed out a character's story, I want to know what people thought.​

Thank you.​

:CHappy



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Edit: Wrong smiley at the end. :P​

 

[Project]

Coherency is a skill, that you have not mastered.

 

[The Lionheart]

Coherency is a skill, that you have not mastered.

And you're sadly lacking proper, coherent sentence structure. :GL



I don't see how anyone with a plus-gradeschool education wouldn't be able to comprehend what I've written.

Furthermore, that has nothing to do with Vedic/Mikelus, the whole arc, etc. Take your trolling elsewhere.

 

[The Lionheart]

38 Views and nothing to say beyond something about coherency that was irrelevant?

You're getting soft; the lot of you. :CStern

 

[Jaqen H'ghar]

Or we just don't care...?

 

[JMocks]

Or we just don't care...?

This.

 

[Viggy]

I'm not commenting because....

keep your 'I don't know who he is, I don't care who he is, I haven't read, blah blah blah' comments out of here.

^

 

[Will]

Or we just don't care...?

This. There's a reason few people will comment about a self-made discussion about an RP...

With yourself.

 

[Mars]

Let me read it and I'll post.

<----- Has been following Vedic since his introduction back when.

EDIT: And now he is dead, and I am sad.

 

[The Lionheart]

Or we just don't care...?

This.

Figured as much. Why are you replying, then? :bitchez

I'm not commenting because....



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:CStern

...totally missed the point. :/

This. There's a reason few people will comment about a self-made discussion about an RP...

With yourself.

It's not just about the thread, it's about the character.

I see nothing wrong with asking for feedback concerning something I put time and effort into while contributing to this site.

Nor do I see anything wrong with taking the time and effort to contribute something that's done solo in the storyboard. It's done in plenty of other places, and it's not a sin - I don't appreciate the insults or the snide little quips, either.

<----- Has been following Vedic since his introduction back when.

EDIT: And now he is dead, and I am sad.

One person.


Thank you.



NOW, for the purpose of this thread:


What did you think about Vedic, and the way the story played out, and ended up?

Actually, Let Me Put It This Way


I am NOT an orthodox RPer.

Never was, never will be.


I'm a writer.

And I'll write as I choose to.



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[Will]

Figured as much. Why are you replying, then? :bitchez



:CStern

...totally missed the point. :/



It's not just about the thread, it's about the character.

I see nothing wrong with asking for feedback concerning something I put time and effort into while contributing to this site.

Nor do I see anything wrong with taking the time and effort to contribute something that's done solo in the storyboard. It's done in plenty of other places, and it's not a sin - I don't appreciate the insults or the snide little quips, either.




One person.


Thank you.



NOW, for the purpose of this thread:


What did you think about Vedic, and the way the story played out, and ended up?

Actually, Let Me Put It This Way


I am NOT an orthodox RPer.

Never was, never will be.


I'm a writer.

And I'll write as I choose to.



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Don't throw a hissy fit when no one replies then. Hell, I written a solo RP before. I'm just saying, don't expect people to rush to give you feedback.

 

[The Lionheart]

Don't throw a hissy fit when no one replies then. Hell, I written a solo RP before. I'm just saying, don't expect people to rush to give you feedback.

I said you were all going soft for not grilling me like steak on the irons. :CStern


Does that really equal a hissy fit? :CIsee


What's with this 'whiny lion' shit recently? It does nothing but paint me in a negative light, goldarnit.

I actually get in a better mood for a bit and next thing I know I can't even get a conversation from people on the writing site I've been on for five FROGLICKING years with my head in the sand!

:CNot

 

[Will]

I said you were all going soft for not grilling me like steak on the irons. :CStern


Does that really equal a hissy fit? :CIsee


What's with this 'whiny lion' shit recently? It does nothing but paint me in a negative light, goldarnit.

I actually get in a better mood for a bit and next thing I know I can't even get a conversation from people on the writing site I've been on for five FROGLICKING years with my head in the sand!

:CNot

Ok, my bad. THAT is a hissy fit. :CHappy

And I'm not into S&M, I don't grill people over irons.

 

[The Lionheart]

Ok, my bad. THAT is a hissy fit. :CHappy

He is learning...

*strokes beard*​

And I'm not into S&M, I don't grill people over irons.

Well, that's because you're an alien, and your avatar is a creeper. :bitchez

 

[The Lionheart]

Alright, I don't care anymore.

 

[Brandon Rhea]

Moved to Story OOC.

But for the record, I still think you should try fan fiction rather than RPing by yourself. RPing by yourself is just pointless, because it's not really role-playing.

 

[The Lionheart]

Moved to Story OOC.

But for the record, I still think you should try fan fiction rather than RPing by yourself. RPing by yourself is just pointless, because it's not really role-playing.

No point writing what won't be appreciated; and the events that I've been writing have effects on my characters in the story. It's why I put them in the Storyboard.

 

[Brandon Rhea]

No point writing what won't be appreciated; and the events that I've been writing have effects on my characters in the story. It's why I put them in the Storyboard.

Then you can't expect people to get energized and be willing to read your RPs when all you're doing is RPing by yourself. What also has effects on your characters is RPing with other people. Otherwise, all you're doing is writing fan fiction, posting it in the Story board, and labeling it a RP.

 

[The Lionheart]

Then you can't expect people to get energized and be willing to read your RPs when all you're doing is RPing by yourself. What also has effects on your characters is RPing with other people. Otherwise, all you're doing is writing fan fiction, posting it in the Story board, and labeling it a RP.

You haven't even read it. :CAbove

Why should I take interest in the work of others if they're not going to take interest in mine, or (as has been the case in the past) make every effort to belittle/nullify anything I try to contribute in a topic with other people?

(Yeah, what a shock - I actually have been in threads with others. :CStern)

 

[Jaqen H'ghar]

This thread is quickly turning into a "poor me" thread, can we not do that and just let it die off as only one or two people respond, the whole thing dies off and falls into the depths of oblivion?