Ranganok M. Thanaton

Ranganok

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NAME: Ranganok M. Thanaton, also known as Mikaeli Wolfsbane
FACTION: Sith Empire(Former), Rebels(Former), Alderaanian noble(currently)
RANK: Dark Lord(Former), Rebel General(Former), Diplomat and Heir of the Wolfsbane House
SPECIES: Energy Vampire(He doesn't have the ability to turn others into zombies)
AGE: 1000+(officially 21)
GENDER: Male
FORCE SENSITIVE: Trained Master of the Force

APPEARANCE:
Original Appearance:
Before being mutated by the dark side he had quite a simple look. He also uses this appearance when masking. He is fairly tall having 179 cm. Also quite "skinny" with only 71 kg. He has a slim-athletic build. His silhouette is slim, and even if he doesn't have muscles big in mass, he has them well defined, and as powerful as the others. He has a prominent collar bone and jawline, as the other bones due to his slim build.

He has a downed messy hair, brown in color. His bangs are formed from spike-like strands of hair pointed downwards. His face looks both cold and young...like a 17-20 yo human boy. Tough some people might see him having an innocent like face. His eyes are like two cold brown jewels, clear and sharp. He has small ears and a pretty small mouth. His eyebrows are slim and well contoured, like he was shaping them, though they are like that naturally. Also, his teeth are made to look like normal human teeth and the canines elongate only when feeding.
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True Appearance:
His true form isn't much different from the original one...thanks to his enhanced trinkets and his high regeneration(when feeding) he managed to keep the body mutation to a minimum. He now has white hair, like the snow on Hoth. His teeth, aside from the long canines, are sharper, having a pointy end( like the beast fangs). His eyes are red, with a feline like pupil, looking like lusting for blood and sending a grim vibe. His nails are long and in a V form. They are also more durable like the claws of a beast.

All over his body are red inked tribal tattoos. On his hands, covering from his wrist and ending on his chest. On the front , covering the chest and the abs. On the legs, from the waist to the ankle. And finally, on his back, the entire region is covered in a tribal tattoo depicting the head of a wyrwulf.

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(Note: The tattoo markings are not accurate since I suck at arts XD. But it should be enough to give an example or glipse of what he has.)
ATTRIBUTES:
Combat skills:
His best strength in a combat is the force itself. He is a force oriented user...knowing a lot about the force. His connection to the Force is very strong and thus, his force powers are very powerful and devastating to some. When in a fight, he uses the force at aprox 80% of the time.

Tough he is very good at using the force, due to this, he lacks on the lightsaber training. He isn't trained almost at all in lightsaber fighting, thus almost never uses one. He knows the basics, but that makes him just an amateur. Instead, to compensate for his lack of close combat/melee skills, he learned martial arts, which helped him greatly at dodging trough acrobatic movements.

Stats:
Due to his focus on the force, and working as a leader to people, Ranganok became quite intellectual. Intelligence being on of his greatest assets.His mind is always working always finding multiple solutions for a problem and tactics to use. Also because of the amount of force he uses, he also developed his stamina, thus being able to cast his techniques for a longer period of time.

Due to his Martial training, his dexterity improved a lot, being more flexible and quick to react.

But because of his focuses, he neglected some of the stats, thus, his strength being below average. His race has enhanced strength, but he has the strength of a human.

Personality:
There are several good things and bad things here. For example, he believes in destiny, that everything happens for a reason, be it good or bad and that the force always moves to our greater good(even if that means your death). Thus, he is able to get over things very fast and accept them, concentrating on what he can learn from it and what to do next. He also has the ability to go in a state of tranquility, remain calm and serene, detaching himself from everything, thus making it harder for those who want to mingle with his mind .

One of the things that can cause him a lot of problems is that when someone asks for his help, guidance, something....he always says yes. However, he helps that person as he thinks it's best, which sometimes might not be what that person wanted.

He also never lies....He never did and never will use deception. Tough it may avoid the truth or not say the full truth...but he never gives false information(unless he thinks it's true).

He never forced anyone to do his bidding...He never uses mind control techniques. He gives them the options they have and lets them choose. But he will act accordingly to their choices....as each action has a consequence.

He accepts anyone who wants to join and help him, thus making him somehow vulnerable to some nasty things, exceptions being when he thinks someone else needs them more.

When he promises something, he always keeps his word...even if that kills him.

During his long life, the dark side started to seep more and more into his mind trying to drive him mad. In all his lifetime he gone mad twice...killing a lot of lives until he was stopped. While he can keep it under control usually...when he uses the dark side's power, he slowly tends to become more and more agresive, going more and more towards that point of madness again. Great anger also makes the dark side's influence stronger.

PERSONALITY:
It couldn't be said that Ranganok has a well defined personality. If it were to describe him in one word, it would be Singularity. He tends to be able to be everything, from a cruel tyrant to a kind stranger, from a very serious person to a very sarcastic/joking one, from a hard working one to a lazy one and so on, and all of these sides are still him.

Though there are some traits that he has almost at all times. He is always open minded, and is never 100% sure of what he knows. He always leaves room for doubt in case he is wrong, so that he may learn and become better. Always thirsting for knowledge, he loves exploring old ruins, artifacts and learning teaching from all(sith, jedi and those with their own manifestation of the force) He doesn't try to prove his point or to prove that the other is wrong. Instead, he keeps asking them question until they block and some realize they're wrong themselves.

He loves life, and all living beings. Unconditional love, love for all creation. This is one of the main reasons he can't feel hate and envy. Tough this doesn't stop him from experiencing anger. He doesn't believe death to be something negative or bad at all. In his philosophy, all life comes from the force, and once it ends it returns to the force: There is no death, only the force. Also because of his love, he wants to guide the people, to help them raise themselves, teach them how to achieve what they want and be happy, and this doesn't limit only to force sensitives. He believes that any sentient can manifest the force with enough guidance.

He can also have complete control over his emotions and desires, making it much easier to use his power. This way, he can be both warming kind or cruely cold. He can kill someone without any hesitation, swift and merciless, if he deems that is necessary. He believes his actions are guided by the Force itself, trying to help the destiny unfold. He believes that everyone has a path, and the force's will is to make sure that destiny will happen, one way or another.

The force, in his eyes, is singularity. Everything in the galaxy is the physical manifestation of the force, the living included. Thus, He is the Force itself and his will is heeded by the force, after all, If he wants something he asks it from the force and it will somehow give Ranganok's the opportunity to gain what he desires."Everything is yours for the taking, if you only ask".

His philosophy about the people is that everyone has the right to be who they want, how the want and do what they want. But the others have the right to respond how they want as well. "You are free to choose what you want, but you are not free from the consequences of your decisions."

One of his strongest personality traits is empathy. He is able to understand any living being, even when they do most atrocious things. Because he always tend to put himself into the other's shoes in order to understand them better. This way, he developed a skill to read people and guess their intentions.

One of his greatest desires is to create a place, where people understand each other, where they share their knowledge and work as one. A place of eternal happiness, love and knowledge and a sanctuary for any who comes to it.

Ranganok often likes to stay and observe people, to test them and see how they react in some circumstances, what decisions they make and where will they end to. He will grant them knowledge and help them harness they power, so that he may see how they use them and if they end in the light side or they fall into the dark side.

Even though he lived for a long time and maybe he achieved some things, e still keeps himself humble, thinking that he is just doing what he needs to, as everyone else, and he doesn't see himself special, above all others. On the contrary, he believes that with proper knowledge and training, everyone can achieve the level he has, thus, making everyone his equal.

He also thinks of himself as a keeper of balance. So whenever someone seems to threaten the balance and bring chaos, he will start to act and eliminate those persons, some times in a most horrid way. He doesn't discriminate, be it jedi, sith, light side, dark side etc...if it goes out of control, he will eliminate, and trim it down to an acceptable scale.

Even though he did and sometimes still does atrocious things, he knows self restraint. He knows when to spare and when to kill. When to win and when to lose. When to act and when to stay.

He is a very honest man, never lying and when he promises something he sees it trough the very end. He knows that when in someone's else base, he should abide by the rules, as he expects from them when coming to his. He never lies, and because of that he never tries to deceive anyone. He respects the free will above all else, thus never imposing his way of life, teachings or even his will onto others.

He likes to explore new places, and enjoy the little things in life, like good food, and find new sources of entertaining. Traveling to new places, learning from different cultures, eating new types of food and drinking, participate in games, or just spectate, admire views, know people and observe them and this list goes on and on. Whenever he discover something new or interesting he becomes enthusiastic like kid when discovering something new to play with.

Ranganok also has a philosophical side, where he sometimes talks about life and all it has to offer, sometimes even speaking in rimes. He made a habit of this from learning many force factions philosophies including the jedi and the sith, creating his own from a combination of those. He could be seen as the "wise old man" who sometimes talks in riddles.


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BIOGRAPHY:
More than a thousand years ago, in a galaxy far, far away, on a peculiar planet, there was a tribe of energy vampires. They weren't a big community and they didn't involve themselves with the rest of the galaxy. They spent their time living in peace...until 3 children with an extremely strong connection to the force was born. A very powerful Sith found out about the little vampire tribe and it's 3 children strong with the force. He ordered the Empire to kidnap them and take them into the empire to make true sith out of them. The 3 children, which happened to be brothers, were abducted by the empire, from their tribe. The oldest was 5 years, the second was 3 and Ranganok had only one year at that moment.

The empire took care of them, and the Great Sith became their "father". The sith training began at the age of 7 for each one of them, until then being "invaded" with suggestions, which would control their grow. The first "son" had a natural talent for melee combat, thus being very good at lightsaber training. The second one, had a very sharp mind, being able to learn people and manipulate them even at young age. And Ranganok, had a very destructive release of force. His connection at 7 years was stronger even than some siths. Most of his training was on force use, while he didn't have any talent on lightsaber training.

The training was going smoothly and at an exaggerated speed rate. At the age of 12, Ranganok was sent on Korriban to continue his training at the Sith Temple. In one year, he killed a dozen competitors, in training, and on challenges due to the fact that he couldn't hold back his power. So at the age of 13, he became the apprentice of his "father". The next 2 years were still spent on Korriban, training to better control the force.

At the age of 15, Ranganok and his Master, Mogorth, left Korriban and got involved in the war. At first, he only participated in small skirmishes, and always with his master nearby, watching and ensuring that the boy doesn't die sooner than needed. After two years, he started doing his first solo mission, which was a huge success, ending in killing a jedi knight. This is also the time when his body started to slow it's aging more and more until it practically stopped.

For the duration of 4 years, Ranganok had win after win, kill after kill, making his ego grow bigger and bigger and start overestimating himself. He reached the point where he thought about himself to be invincible. At the age of 21 he became a commander in the Sith Empire's military, commanding his own battallion.

The very first mission he had as a commander, he had to go against a jedi master, member of the jedi council. While he managed to infiltrate and push back the enemy, having the upper hand, Ranganok's arrogance made him overestimate himself and went after the jedi master. The fight ended in a crushing defeat and destruction of most of his battalion. He was captured and spared due to the Jedi thinking he could save the boy, and draw him out of the dark side.

But before he could actually gain any results, Mogorth infiltrated with a small sith unit into the republic base and managed to break out the boy. That serious blow taught the boy a few things, and opened his eyes...he wasn't as invincible as he thought. He decided to work under his master again for 10 years, trying to learn everything possible from him, his way of thinking and how to be a better sith.

After 10 years of guidance, Ranganok emerged as a new man...a wiser man, now knowing better than to venture blindly into the enemy lines, even though he still looked like a 17 year old kid. By this time, both his brothers had become generals in the Sith Empire's military, Astaroth (the oldest) was a great military leader and Kherubim (the middle brother), was one of many advisors to the sith council, a prestigious position to be sure, and he was very good at politics and scheming from the shadows. All three generals were ruthless and deadly efficient, earning the "title" of the Three Demon Generals.

It was also the time when Ranganok reached the Prime of his power, being a Sith with great destructive power in the Empire. He participated in solo missions for a while, having a success rate of 70%. He commanded regiments of sith and imperials, squads in several operations, but he couldn't use his full potential, mainly because the other members of his team or the army wouldn't be able to keep up. That is when he decided that he needed his own army, his own people hand picked by him.

He went to the imperial intelligence and scoured the entire galaxy for the best agents he could find, even non imperials. He found agents of skills unparalleled, the best of the best, and formed a pro squad of 70 imperial agents. Then the search continued, and he recruited 6 of the most versatile sith each being the best on their aspect. They weren't official, nothing was known about them and the data on each person was erased. They started doing high risk missions, and they succeeded, entering enemy lines, ambushing, assassinating, sabotaging, completing their missions and leaving without leaving any trace.

After a few months of activity, the group got it's own name from the republic enemies....The Ghost Division. At that time, the ghost division was a great asset to the Empire. Their exploits were both impressive and dreaded. Nothing was know about them, not even by their own allies, except the dark council, Ranganok's brothers and the Emperor. They were though to be just a myth, since they would leave no survivors and no trace that could point to them.

Years passed, the empire was having the upper hand, until something unexpected happened. The oldest brother, Astaroth, deserted, joined a resistance faction and allied himself with the Republic. The Ghost Division was tasked by the emperor to hunt the traitorous general and bring him back, dead or alive. The hunt began, Astaroth keeping the "Ghosts" at bay for several months, until, they finally found him...or rather, it's leader, Ranganok found him.

A fight of epic proportions unfolded between the two. The environment was scorched, cut,corrupted, and after hours of fighting, Ranganok was defeated by his older brother. Astaroth talked about the reasons he left the empire and having an attempt to open his little brother's eyes too, before Ranganok fell unconscious.

Years have passed by again, with the republic regaining it's standing against the empire. Aside from being the leader of the Ghost Division, he also took the duties of his older brother, leading larger armies. Because he was taught the Art of War by Astaroth, before he deserted, he was able to handle the job very well.

Ranganok then got a pretty unusual job. The empire caught a jedi padawan with a very strong connection to the force. Though she had no combat capabilities, she had the most powerful healing, and cleansing powers of all the jedi there. She was deemed and extremely important asset so Ranganok was tasked with guarding her so she won't be able to escape. The young girl, though she wasn't shackled, she was always with the general, following him everywhere as she was supposed to. He even took her to the battlefield a few times, Elisee, trying to heal all wounded, republic and imperial alike.

Time passed, Ranganok and Elisee went trough a lot of missions and thing together, which ended in them getting closer and closer. After a few months, the young vampire had already become attached to the girl. Soon the girl taught him what is love, and slowly things were changing in him. His perspective was enlarging, and that started him on the road to become what he was today. Soon he started to see that all the empire did was to destroy and bring chaos to the galaxy, thus, he decided to go on his older brother footsteps and desert, taking the girl with him.

Ranganok joined the resistance (a faction made by people oppressed by the Empire), becoming a general, and allying himself with the Republic...however, he did not discard his dark side powers and his style remained almost the same. The tide now turned in their favor, until after half a year, when the "abandoned" Ghost Division came after him. Only one sith with 10 agents came after him. Some agents decided to desert and go to Ranganok's side which made the operation fail miserably but there was still the sith who challenged his former leader....A fight between the two emerged which ended in the sith getting killed. After that event, Ranganok spent his next 17 months trying to recruit his Ghost division into the alliance or eliminate them. Needless to say that almost all the sith refused and Ranganok was forced to kill them all, though some of the black agents agreed to join. The rest were disposed of by the deserters mostly.

By destroying the ghost division, The Empire suffered a nasty blow in it's military power. And the fight was in their favor....Until one day, when Ranganok's unit was caught in an ambush and annihilated, only Elisee and the vampire remaining. This plot was the work of none other than the middle brother, Kherubim, who personally came after his younger brother. A ferocious fight between the two ensured, no one giving an opening to the other. The fight continued for 3 hours, until Kherubim used his dirty trick, using the girl, attacking her, to make Ranganok vulnerable. And it worked...Ranganok was struck down and cursed, and in response, he was making a diversion so that Elisee escapes.

He was fatally wounded, and he would have died in a matter of minutes...so Kherubim decided to leave him to his death and leave. In order to survive, Ranganok made a pact with the dark side. He used sith alchemy to save his life, corrupting him in the process. The process drove him mad and twisted his apearance. He drifted like a monster trough the stars, killing many innocents and otherwise. He drifted alone and lost in in the galaxy, until he reached a certain uninhabited planet.

There he met a man, he looked in his forties, but he was very strong with the force. He used his powers to help Ranganok regain some of his sanity and regain most of his original form. There he stood for 5 years, where the man visited him regularly and taught him secrets of the force and the way he can save himself. After all this time, Ranganok was a new man again, having a new philosophy of life, knowing a lot more, and being a lot wiser. He also had now the dark side under control tough the changes made on his body remained to a degree.

Then the man took Ranganok to him, on another planet, a planet flourishing with technology and people, an entire Empire . But the place was in complete balance, every person was happy and there were no material or otherwise problem...no poor and unfavored....it was truly paradise. For the next 2 years, he was working under this Benefactor of his, helping him, training, and interacting with the other people of the empire. During that time he made himself a little band of brothers which would follow him.

Before he went and joined back in the resistance, he went to his Homeplanet and found his vampire tribe. There, for the next month, he was guided and taught by the elders, their ways and customs, and everything he had to know. After his training was complete, he went trough a rite of initiation, which tattooed his whole body with permanent blood marks. After finishing his rite, Ranganok left the planet to return to the battlefield.

He took the little strike team he assembled and left without a problem. In the meantime, the empire and the resistance had a skirmish on Taris. The two faction groups were led by the two vampire brothers, Astaroth and Kherubim. The battle was well balanced until Ranganok and his squad arrived. At that moment the tides of the battle turned in the Republic's favor. The sith empire was overpowered by the resistance and won a key point on Taris.

From there, Ranganok was reunited with his beloved, and continued his fight against the empire for another year. In that time, the empire lost many battles and the republic managed to finally reach Dromund Kaas where the emperor was. A final assault ensured which was led by several generals, the two vampire brothers being among them. The fight was fierce as the resistance and Republic forces were advancing towards Kaas City. Some of the republic generals took the main army and advanced towards, taking on most of the imperials, also creating a diversion for other strike teams to infiltrate and take out key persons of the empire. Ranganok and Astaroth both took the best men in their battalions and formed a strike team and went after Mogorth, which was in a sith temple outside Kaas.

The strike team managed to reach the temple entrance where they were greeted by Imperial guards led by Kherubim and another Sith. A fight ensured between the parties, where Ranganok fought Kherubim while Astaroth fought the Sith. The battle between brothers was fierce, both of then going all out and fighting by the best of their abilities. After what seemed like an eternity, Ranganok was finally able to defeat Kherubim and probably kill him. Astaroth did the same to the other one.

They fed on the other guards until they died in order to recover their strength and heal themselves after which the brothers proceed into the temple alone. There in a throne room, the two of them met with their "father". A fight ensure between the three of them, where Ranganok and Astaroth used the skill they cultivated together, force meld in order to unite against their father. The fight was more intense than ever given that the slightest mistake in the brother's actions would result in death. After heavy injuries, and a lot of fighting, the Mogorth and the two vampires used all their power in a final attack. That force was enough to ruin a part of the temple, resulting in the death of Mogorth and the disappearance of the brothers. The republic won that day, but they also suffered great losses. The Vampire brothers were counted in those losses.

After a hundred years, Ranganok woke up in a kolto tank, being awakened by an HK droid which seemed to have worked for Mogorth, his former Sith Master. After the awakening, he was all alone, times changed a lot, and most of the people he knew were already dead....including his beloved. After looking trough the holocrons, seeing the message and wisdom his Sith mentor left behind, with the news of the aftermath, he decided to leave on a journey of finding himself.

With 750 years before current time, Ranganok brought a mysterious Sith and helped him become stronger. Most things about this incident are unknown...like where he took the Sith from, his identity, almost everything about that man was a mystery. He taught the man for some time as a master and after that he left him to his doings. Not after much time, a few years maybe, the republic and a jedi managed to strike down the Sith and defeat his knights.

With 500 years before current time, Ranganok acts once again, in helping some rebels with their coup against another's Empire Dynasty. He decided to help those rebel, and give them his aid, teaching them, guiding some of them and eventually fighting some key persons in that empire. He was only one of the many supporters in this coup though, but his help was useful nevertheless. The coup was a success and a democratic federation was formed instead of it. Ranganok learned a lot from his experience about the mortal mentality, and was very curious to see how they would rule this empire better since the Dynasty wasn't very efficient. He remains for a few weeks there after which he leaves again, observing their actions discreetly from time to time.

With 370 years before current time, Ranganok decides to return to Alderaan and resurrect the long dead family of his beloved, the Wolfsbade House. He went there and reclaimed their house, trough less peaceful means, took the wealth he amassed and which he found in the house's stash and worked on establishing a new Noble line. He put everything in place and made his reputation. Until he decided to take a step forward. The force guided Ranganok to a girl of a powerful noble house in Alderaan. He started to spend time with her as she was become closer and closer to the vampire.

Eventually they married, and the Wolfsbane gained the support of a powerful ally, which boosted the house in the ranks. They had two human kids, thanks to his sith alchemy. He spend the next decades with his wife and teaching his kids and grandkids life lessons and about the force. He left a lot of holocrons in a secret library in the house where force sensitives can learn about what he learned until then. When Ranganok's wife reached 70 she was struck by a horrible disease which was weakening her more and more. Ranganok offered to use his Alchemy to extend her life and help and make her younger, but she declined the offer. Because she didn't asked for help, Ranganok's philosophy of life wouldn't let him interfere so he just stayed and watched he as she died after 3 years. After that, he named his heir in the family, out of his grandkids, and left on a journey again.

173 years before current time, Ranganok gone mad again from using the dark side a prolonged time. All those dark arts he used came back at him like karma. He turned into a homicidal maniac, seeking destruction of all life. For 3 years he terrorized innocent souls, bringing death to many, and starting numerous genocides which ultimately ended in failures. However, after this time, the jedi managed to defeat the Mad vampire and imprison him in stasis in a special facility on Belsavis. After 70 years of imprisonment, a force sensitive manages to enter the prison tomb, and release Ranganok.

Thanks to the time he spent in stasis and his defeat, he managed to regain his sanity and come to his senses. He befriended this force sensitive, sharing knowledge with him and spending time for 3 months, after which, he decided to continue his journey separating from his new friend. The very next day, the final Sith War begun.


He disappeared without a trace, no one knowing anything about him, until 3 years before current time. Ranganok decided to return to Alderaan to House Wolfsbane. There, with the support of his house, and a few contacts, he managed to forge himself a new identity, Mikaeli Wolfsbane, member and heir of the Wolfsbane family. He also forged himself a history...having 18 years, a son of the House's Head, he lived hidden in exile in order to be protected by the assassins that were after him. And he just returned to his family. The next 3 years, Ranganok studied etiquette and everything a nobleman should know, and also studied diplomacy and politics. Thanks to his influence and new knowledge he became a diplomat ready to start his road to become a senator.

SKILLS:
Starting with his more pacifistic skills, he is quite a tongue user. During his long and numerous travels, he learned many things about the cultural diversity of the galaxy and their languages. He was also taught the arts of diplomacy for 3 years while in Alderaan being taught by House Wolfsbane.

Also due to his history in dealing with the sith, he had more than a few opportunities to partake in their politics, learning some for himself. He has the knowledge to know how tings work in generals and what a senator should and should not do.

Being in the Sith Empire, he managed to learn many things from the tombs of his predecessors and his master, one of these skills being sith alchemy. It was maybe the most twisted thing he ever learned. This expanded his horizon and options quite a bit, though most of what he learned couldn't be actually used in combat.


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RELATIONSHIPS:
House Wolsbane:
He is the "official heir" of the House, thus having a lot of respect from his own house as well as other houses of alderaanian nobles.

SHIP:

None yet.

DROIDS:
None Yet.

PETS:
Do humans count? If yes, then he doesn't.

KILLS:
None yet.

COMBAT:
 
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Gamov

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I hate to sound like a dick here, but this character is ridiculously over done.

A former Dark Lord? Of what Empire? There are none mentioned in canon within the 1,000 year time span your character lived in before our current timeline. The same goes for his supposed role as a Rebel General.

His Force powers are also over the top. Being able to teleport through space on a whim is going to be a no-go, I can almost guarantee that one. The same can also be said for midi-chlorian manipulation. There can be no circumventing character death - be it cloning, cryostasis, or the Force - and this ability would blatantly allow him to do that. Similarly, this amulet that "absorbs the Dark Side" seems a bit sketchy to me and looks like a cheap (for lack of a better term) work around to the site's approach to how the Force works and how the Dark Side effects Force sensitives.

As it stands, this character could literally (stats and skills wise anyway) overpower any other character on the site at the moment. And that includes the likes of the Jedi Lord and Supreme Leader.

I'll tag @Phoenix (Sith FL) and @fyremage (Republic AFL responsible for Senate character reviews) for further input on this. But I have a feeling you'll need to do some major nerfing and revising to get this guy down to a more reasonable level.
 

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I hate to sound like a dick here, but this character is ridiculously over done.

A former Dark Lord? Of what Empire? There are none mentioned in canon within the 1,000 year time span your character lived in before our current timeline. The same goes for his supposed role as a Rebel General.

His Force powers are also over the top. Being able to teleport through space on a whim is going to be a no-go, I can almost guarantee that one. The same can also be said for midi-chlorian manipulation. There can be no circumventing character death - be it cloning, cryostasis, or the Force - and this ability would blatantly allow him to do that. Similarly, this amulet that "absorbs the Dark Side" seems a bit sketchy to me and looks like a cheap (for lack of a better term) work around to the site's approach to how the Force works and how the Dark Side effects Force sensitives.

As it stands, this character could literally (stats and skills wise anyway) overpower any other character on the site at the moment. And that includes the likes of the Jedi Lord and Supreme Leader.

I'll tag @Phoenix (Sith FL) and @fyremage (Republic AFL responsible for Senate character reviews) for further input on this. But I have a feeling you'll need to do some major nerfing and revising to get this guy down to a more reasonable level.

This character is a complete and utter mary sue, and As AFL, I officially state this. Please consider creating a new character, as personally i feel the very species of energy vampires are overpowered in and of themselves and should be banned from the site. I agree with @Gamov 's assessment.
 

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Midi-chlorian manipulation is the sith alchemy that raises the span life of a lifeform...it is also used for healing. As for ressurrecting it works similar to a resuscitation...when the heart stops it can still be made to function again if it's done soon enough. Also healing fatal wounds, is pretty costly in terms of corruption and force power. I didn't use canon as I heard that I can't actually touch canon so i try to keep it vague but at 2000BBY The New Sith wars started...roughly 1000 years before current time of the forum.

Teleport on a whim isn't quite accurate...it greatly corrupts him doing so...and he can do it only if he knows the place, somehow. Well I could edit it to be able to teleport only to places he's previously been though.

Many sith artifacts were made to do different things: like Cronal who also created a specialized helmet that, when used, would amplify his dark side powers to an astounding degree, as well as allowing him to draw on the force abilities of other force-sensitives called the Pawns. Or sith blades that were so strong they could hold their own against a lightsaber. Well I could start and explain it better if needed further explanation.

I understand he might look unreasonable..but that is why I posted him here...to see how can I make him work the best...he doesn't really need to start with all the abilities as some he can learn on the way. Hope the admins will have patience with me. :)
 

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Energy vampires are on our current timeline approved species list (with the provision of not being able convert other beings into zombies).

That said, @Ranganok, I would suggest you re-write your CP per the suggestions above.


All others, give Ranganok time to make the necessary edits.

Thanks!
 

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Ok...edited at energy vamp said he can;t turn others to zombie...Now let's start with skills. Miss and Mister Admins, what are the force skill that are a complete no go under any circumstances, because maybe we can modify them a bit to look more acceptable...i will try to come with explanations but if they are not good enough then I will remove them.

After that I need to know the max number of abilities i can have at start, so i trim them down, and maybe learn the rest as I rp :).

3rd...we need to see the inconsistencies in the history and how we can repair them. Here is a link with the history http://starwars.wikia.com/wiki/Timeline_of_galactic_history/Legends

And last any other fixes that might need to be done.
I will also tag the admins too for help: @Phoenix @fyremage @Padmé

EDIT: In response to my char being too op...actually he is not...he can easily be overpowered by someone mastering the lightsaber combat since he doesn't actually has any close combat skills. He might be able to defend himself to a point but if the attack is relentless either Ranganok will exaust himself, be overpowered, but in most cases unable to attack without getting injured and forced on the defensive.

Thanks. :)
 
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OK, so. For the benefit of you, the Admins, and the Senate Leadership Team, i'm going to go through, line by line, and tell you what all should be fixed or changes, as well as outlining any misconceptions or misunderstandings you might have concerning the Site and the story we're working off of.

From the very start, and this was further indicated by your linking to the Legends timeline in your last post, you think this is the same timeline as The Old Republic, being either Star Wars: The Old Republic, or Knights of the Old Republic. This is incorrect. The entire site used the new Disney Canon, otherwise known as the NuCanon, and the era we're using is entirely created by the Admins for our use. You can read more on it HERE. It is highly recommended that you do so, as it will help things move a lot smoother.

The next immediate issue I see is that you're making a character for the SENATE. Not the Jedi or Sith, or a force oriented Indie. This means that you're gonna have to scrap, likely, most of the Force User aspects. While it might be fine to have some, although that's more a question for @fyremage , that's not at all what the senate is about.

I won't really go into detail with the appearance. It seems a bit "2edgy" but it's not really violating anything.

OK, sorry, but this needs to be addressed very briefly before I continue into the attributes. This character is utterly, and entirely, a special snowflake. A special snowflake is essentially a hightened form of Marry Sue, where not only are they amazing at most things, but their backstory has something completely deviating from the bounds of the universe, or has them complete numerous feats most others in the universe couldn't. This is very, very, very very, that. And being a special snowflake is something we should all strive to avoid, since almost no none wants to play with them in the RP.

OK, time for a bit of brutal honesty. I can't read half way into this Biography. Like, each new paragrahh reads like a new set of problems. Like the deep seeded issues tying the biography to the Old Cannon that we don't use. It's also very snowflakey. Your character is one of several energy vampires so strong the emperor himself ordered them captured, and them became their "father". This doesn't even fit into the old Canon, as the Sith Emperor i'm assuming you're referring to, which is found in SWTOR, was, for the most part, without a mortal body. And then he goes on without any losses to become a huge hotshot general who's amazing and ugh. He then gets defeated, BUT comes back to become the most powerful sith in the entire Empire.

This is ludirous man. And you're saying he's NOT OVERPOWERED?!

And then we go down through all the history to get to a wall of force powers. Not only do we prefer not listing force powers on profiles, as this is more of a free form writing site and the new rules concerning them make listing them somewhat obsolete, but the amount of them here, and the extremity of those powers is unacceptable.
 
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OK, so. For the benefit of you, the Admins, and the Senate Leadership Team, i'm going to go through, line by line, and tell you what all should be fixed or changes, as well as outlining any misconceptions or misunderstandings you might have concerning the Site and the story we're working off of.

From the very start, and this was further indicated by your linking to the Legends timeline in your last post, you think this is the same timeline as The Old Republic, being either Star Wars: The Old Republic, or Knights of the Old Republic. This is incorrect. The entire site used the new Disney Canon, otherwise known as the NuCanon, and the era we're using is entirely created by the Admins for our use. You can read more on it HERE. It is highly recommended that you do so, as it will help things move a lot smoother.

The next immediate issue I see is that you're making a character for the SENATE. Not the Jedi or Sith, or a force oriented Indie. This means that you're gonna have to scrap, likely, most of the Force User aspects. While it might be fine to have some, although that's more a question for @fyremage , that's not at all what the senate is about.

I won't really go into detail with the appearance. It seems a bit "2edgy" but it's not really violating anything.

OK, sorry, but this needs to be addressed very briefly before I continue into the attributes. This character is utterly, and entirely, a special snowflake. A special snowflake is essentially a hightened form of Marry Sue, where not only are they amazing at most things, but their backstory has something completely deviating from the bounds of the universe, or has them complete numerous feats most others in the universe couldn't. This is very, very, very very, that. And being a special snowflake is something we should all strive to avoid, since almost no none wants to play with them in the RP.

OK, time for a bit of brutal honesty. I can't read half way into this Biography. Like, each new paragrahh reads like a new set of problems. Like the deep seeded issues tying the biography to the Old Cannon that we don't use. It's also very snowflakey. Your character is one of several energy vampires so strong the emperor himself ordered them captured, and them became their "father". This doesn't even fit into the old Canon, as the Sith Emperor i'm assuming you're referring to, which is found in SWTOR, was, for the most part, without a mortal body. And then he goes on without any losses to become a huge hotshot general who's amazing and ugh. He then gets defeated, BUT comes back to become the most powerful sith in the entire Empire.

This is ludirous man. And you're saying he's NOT OVERPOWERED?!

And then we go down through all the history to get to a wall of force powers. Not only do we prefer not listing force powers on profiles, as this is more of a free form writing site and the new rules concerning them make listing them somewhat obsolete, but the amount of them here, and the extremity of those powers is unacceptable.

I 100% agree with what @Outlander is saying.

If you end up reading about what's been going on within the timeline, suffice to say the Republic Senate is not too keen on taking in a Sith oriented Senator.

One positive thing I have to credit you for though is your creativity. This definitely is a creative character, just not within the bounds of what is acceptable here on this site.

The reason i suggest making a new character, is because you would have to edit nearly 90 percent of whatever is in this character profile for it to be acceptable. And at that point, there would barely be anything left.

Not trying to be mean mate, just trying to be honest.
 

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Energy vampires are on our current timeline approved species list (with the provision of not being able convert other beings into zombies).

That said, @Ranganok, I would suggest you re-write your CP per the suggestions above.


All others, give Ranganok time to make the necessary edits.

Thanks!
I thought they just couldn't convert PCs into zombies.
  • Energy Vampire (Nerfnote: Cannot convert PCs to zombies)
NPCs are still fair game. I'm just assuming to be realistic on the conversion and whatnot.
 

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I thought they just couldn't convert PCs into zombies.
  • Energy Vampire (Nerfnote: Cannot convert PCs to zombies)
NPCs are still fair game. I'm just assuming to be realistic on the conversion and whatnot.

I think the distinction on what he can and cannot turn into a zombie is the least of this profile's issues.
 

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I think the distinction on what he can and cannot turn into a zombie is the least of this profile's issues.
True, but I mainly wanted to make sure for my own sake ;)
 

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True, but I mainly wanted to make sure for my own sake ;)
You can make your zombies. Though my understanding is that they vodoo type zombies not undead type. Since they can be saved.
 

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I officially hate Energy Vampires, they just scream Twilight-esque snowflake and anime tackiness, just being born immortal while being magically immune to the weaknesses and disadvantages any species would have by actually becoming immortal through the Dark Side.

That's just my blunt opinion I had to let out, not trying to attack your character. You're free to use the species if you like, but I think it would be way cooler if your character became immortal unnaturally as it would give him way more discernible weaknesses and limits that would make his personality a bit more balanced. My character, Vereshin, is an immortal human, but has severe illnesses and conditions which impact his daily functioning, which are really cool to RP.

@Ranganok
 
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I'm working on a write up to give EVs more of a background and such. i'm working on their weaknesses too. I mainly did it for the fangs O-O
 

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Energy Vampires are beings that feed off Energy.

They are not Dracula.
 

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They fangs and claws, feeding off energy through bites :3
 

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But still, no grabbing a crucifix and catching fire, or running around at hyper-speeds and screaming ''ZE DARKNESS MY IZABELLA!''
 

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OK, so. For the benefit of you, the Admins, and the Senate Leadership Team, i'm going to go through, line by line, and tell you what all should be fixed or changes, as well as outlining any misconceptions or misunderstandings you might have concerning the Site and the story we're working off of.

From the very start, and this was further indicated by your linking to the Legends timeline in your last post, you think this is the same timeline as The Old Republic, being either Star Wars: The Old Republic, or Knights of the Old Republic. This is incorrect. The entire site used the new Disney Canon, otherwise known as the NuCanon, and the era we're using is entirely created by the Admins for our use. You can read more on it HERE. It is highly recommended that you do so, as it will help things move a lot smoother.

The next immediate issue I see is that you're making a character for the SENATE. Not the Jedi or Sith, or a force oriented Indie. This means that you're gonna have to scrap, likely, most of the Force User aspects. While it might be fine to have some, although that's more a question for @fyremage , that's not at all what the senate is about.

I won't really go into detail with the appearance. It seems a bit "2edgy" but it's not really violating anything.

OK, sorry, but this needs to be addressed very briefly before I continue into the attributes. This character is utterly, and entirely, a special snowflake. A special snowflake is essentially a hightened form of Marry Sue, where not only are they amazing at most things, but their backstory has something completely deviating from the bounds of the universe, or has them complete numerous feats most others in the universe couldn't. This is very, very, very very, that. And being a special snowflake is something we should all strive to avoid, since almost no none wants to play with them in the RP.

OK, time for a bit of brutal honesty. I can't read half way into this Biography. Like, each new paragrahh reads like a new set of problems. Like the deep seeded issues tying the biography to the Old Cannon that we don't use. It's also very snowflakey. Your character is one of several energy vampires so strong the emperor himself ordered them captured, and them became their "father". This doesn't even fit into the old Canon, as the Sith Emperor i'm assuming you're referring to, which is found in SWTOR, was, for the most part, without a mortal body. And then he goes on without any losses to become a huge hotshot general who's amazing and ugh. He then gets defeated, BUT comes back to become the most powerful sith in the entire Empire.

This is ludirous man. And you're saying he's NOT OVERPOWERED?!

And then we go down through all the history to get to a wall of force powers. Not only do we prefer not listing force powers on profiles, as this is more of a free form writing site and the new rules concerning them make listing them somewhat obsolete, but the amount of them here, and the extremity of those powers is unacceptable.

This discussion makes me really amused. I hate to see it end but we have work to do.

@Outlander Ranganok's history has nothing to do with the Old Republic. The time of Star Wars the Old Republic is aprox 4000BY and the Old republic ended somewhere between 3500-3000BBY which means there is still at least 1000 years difference from the old republic and Ranganok's birth. But i do agree that I might have made too much for him for which I tried and changed it so that if a sith would live for 1000 years his achievements shouldn't be uncommon. I have read the forum's background and it says that the Sith Empire was unleashing it's terror for millennia which means thousands of years of conflicts. If we go by the site's background, the conflict and war were started long before Ranganok was born.

Also fixed the overpowered story thing...no longer said he is the strongest in the empire and removed the sith emperor completely...Ranganok is now just a great asset of the empire instead of the strongest. The war is made to be vague and general in the history...meaning that he both won and lost fights, only the faction advancements were showed and some special events for him. He also is just another general now. If it's still to much, tell me which "chapters" to say so you consider too much so I see where I need to work more on.

I have also worked on the Skills. I have removed the basic skills that all sith have and also removes some troubling skills like Force travel. I have also updated the Sith alchemy to the point where, whenever Ranganok wants to resuscitate someone, it will need admin approval to be successful. You should see them being fewer and maybe more acceptable. If there are still discrepancies please tell me so that we can figure something out.
 

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Just to wade in here.
I won't be allowing this character into the Republic, as from an IC perspective a former Sith Lord makes no sense being in the Republic.
 
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