The Void

[Shalken]

Now that the attacks are basically over, am I free to post the updated version for review?

 

[Dmitri]

Yes.

 

[Shalken]

Edits are posted.

 

[Korvo]

Good job on em! Just a few things;

Doors leading to official areas are armed with an internal alarm system that triggers when a hack is attempted.

I'd like you to change the wording here. Alarms are triggered at failed attempts of a system security breach. No system is infallible that it successfully detects and recognized any and all hacking attempt for what it is.

All major doors and most secure entrances are fitted with solid blast airlocks, that can be triggered from a security hub remotely at a moment’s notice.

My dad always said when you assume, you make an "ass" out of "u" and "me", so in avoidance of that, could you indicate where such doors would be located? You don't have to list every single door, but what areas of the Void are these installed? This is for clarification's sake, and to prevent manipulation of loop holes, where someone could claim a "blast door" wherever they please.

Inside each hangar bay is a set of hidden sentry guns, easily capable of destroying ships with sustained fire.

Okay, here I'd also like clarification for the interior. How many guns? Where are they hidden? I don't mean for you to build up a schematic, but where in the rooms would these be installed? At the back, toward the front, at the sides, etc., and how many?

 

[Nor'baal]

My dad always said when you assume, you make an "ass" out of "u" and "me".

I know this has nothing to do with me, however - that is a wonderful quote.

 

[Korvo]

I know this has nothing to do with me, however - that is a wonderful quote.

What can I say? My dad was a wonderful guy (pretty sure he didn't make it up, though)

 

[Prudence]

I know this has nothing to do with me, however - that is a wonderful quote.

You've never heard that one before? Pretty popular in US Southeast.

 

[Nor'baal]

I am not to hot on my south-eastern US slang.

 

[Korvo]

You've never heard that one before? Pretty popular in US Southeast.

Yep, pretty much this. It's not exactly an everyday expression, but you'll hear it in Florida/Georgia.

 

[Prudence]

Yep, pretty much this. It's not exactly an everyday expression, but you'll hear it in Florida/Georgia.

Yea I hear it at least 1-2 times a year. I've used it a few times myself - North Carolina

 

[Shalken]

Edited!


People up in Nova Scotia use that phrase a fair bit as well.

 

[Korvo]

Looks good! On that note...