Aldain Creed

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NAME: Aldain Creed

FACTION: Shade

RANK: ??

SPECIES: Unknown/ Covered by armor which is hard to tell, but if someone had to guess Geonosan

AGE: Unknown

GENDER: Male

HEIGHT: 6'2"

WEIGHT: 200lbs

EYES: Yellow, when his helmet is taken off

HAIR: None

SKIN: Pale white

CREDITS: 1,000 credits

DISTINGUISHING MARKS: His body was ravaged and ripped to shreds by a explosion leaving him dismembered and dieing. His suite was made to help keep him alive and boast his speed and strength. When his helmet is removed, which is rarely, his left eye has been replaced with a mechanical scope. Both legs are mechanical and his right arm is too.

DOMINATE HAND: He uses his right hand the most with his light saber but his left hand is his dominant force using hand.

FORCE SENSITIVE: Yes

STRENGTH: 7/10.
DEXTERITY: 9/10
CONSTITUTION: 7/10
INTELLIGENCE: 6/10-because of Intellectual chip
WISDOM: 7/10- also because of a advancement chip
CHARISMA: 3/10

FORCE POWERS:
Force lighting, move object, force speed, and Repulse. ( after being trained of course.)

SKILLS:
Pilot: 6/10
Computer skills: 8/10
Melee combat: 8/10
General knowledge: 3/10 half of his brain was destroyed in the blast which is replace by half droid brain, making memories of his past difficult to remember.

LIGHTSABER/SWORD FORMS:
Shi-Cho

STRENGTHS AND WEAKNESSES:
Well having a practically new body Aldain's strength lies with upgrades to speed and strength . his strength is also his weakness, for his cyborg parts are susceptible to electrical damage. Unknown to him his new body parts were also coated by the new found cortosis process. Having a half droid brain also makes it easier to to carry vital information in his head instead of a holo-pad. Just as such he is ever disabled he can be reprogrammed and any information can be recovered like a droid.

GEAR:

Aldain's suit is as much part of him as it is his skin. It keep his vitals stable and protects him from blaster fire and light saber attacks. His suit is highly advanced suit of it's kind for not only is it a suit but it is also an advancement in cyborg and droid technology.

He has a small thin Katana which is also made cortosis. On both wrist he has two mounted blasters and also a grappling hook on one and on the other is a close range dart gun. His helmet help protect his fragile droid and normal brain. It also attaches to his mechanical eye and helps hide his scars and his appearance.

Adain also has a cloak that makes a electrical force field that disrupts mechanical devices such as camera's, droids, and any other computer controlled device. With the design of the cloak it radiates outwards so it does not effect him as long as he keeps it on and his hood up.

SHIP:
None

PETS:
None

PERSONALITY:
Aldain is driven by anger for whoever made him the way he is today. He also wants to kill whoever had tried to kill him before he was turned into a monster. All he remember is that he was part of some war and he can never remember anything about his past except brief glimpse and images that flash into his head every now and again, causing extreme pain.

HISTORY:
Aladins child hood was just your typical child hood. His father was in the serves and his mother always followed wherever her husband went. Aldain moved around allot like any typical military brat and got to see most of the galaxy. He never minded much because it was what he wanted to do ever since he could remember.

Aldain knew he was different then most children because it seemed he always knew things where going to happen seconds before they happened. He could never explain it and he tried to tell his mother but she always said he was talking crazy and that he should stop. It wasn't until he turned 13 when one day he was at school and he saw a accident in his mind seconds before it happened and he tried to stop it and ended up causing the accident which killed five people.

He tried to tell his mother and she had him committed and they used shock therapy until he was "cured". He never forgave his mother and from that day on he he always got in trouble and tried his hardest to disobey everyone. Finally at her wits end Aldains mother sent him to military school where he was trying to get the entire time.

Excelling in close combat and military tactics Aldain quickly surpassed all the other students and by the age of 16 he was taken into the local military force for a special program. This program went on for 2 yrs and by the end he was placed in a special forces program at the age of 18. After series of small battles and skirmishes Aldain proved his worth in combat and also mad a couple of enemies along the way.

One day Aldain was sent on a smash and run mission he found it to be more then he was told. Out number by ten to one, His battle cruiser was shot down and him and his men fought bravely to the bitter end. While fighting his captain told his squad to advance and capture a advantage point so that his command can gain an upper hand in the battle.

After a furious fight and with half his men dead, Aldain reached his destination only to be betrayed by his captain and was shot at by a starship weapon. The shot did not hit Aldain directly but the blast and shrapnel tore threw his flesh and knocked him down a crevasse. On the verge of death and what seemed to be still in the middle of the battle Aldain was found by cloaked figure and was carried off to a medical facility.

There they operated on him and attached one of the most advanced droid/cyborg bodies made in that time. Aldain sustained massive damage to his body and head which were replaced by cyborg parts and half of his brain was replaced by a droid brain.


KILLS:
None

DUELING RING MATCHES:
None

GRAND TOURNAMENT MATCHES:
None

ROLE-PLAYS:
Non
 
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Ols

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For me, considering that Darth Vader's suit was pretty much the most advanced thing Emperor Palpatine could get his hands on (even if he wanted it to cause pain to Anakin), this suit seems like a bit of a stretch for 13,000 odd years before. The character itself is good though.
 

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well his suit is bulky and i would have to agree with you. i just wasn't sure what would be aloud or not so i figured i could post it and change it later to everyone's qualifications. If thats ok with everyone else.
 

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I'm not disallowing it, I just think you should be careful with the boosts it gives you. It's a good limiter for a character, but stuff like the cloning midi-chlorians, that isn't allowed.

Oh and ftr although most people will pass opinions on a profile, they don't need to qualify it. Unless an admin tells you something has to be changed, there's no obligation to change it (although if a lot of people feel annoyed by it, it may be advisable to lol).
 

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k it's gone, as for looks wise i had General Grievous in mind when i made him. as soon as i can make a pic with photo shop i'll post it. I would have to agree with you on the cloning device.
 
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