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For clarity, this was my last PM, "Wait, so when he was coming towards Kronos they were facing each other. But when he attacked he turned sideways so that his body is now perpendicular to Kronos with his right side closer to him and the left pointing away from him?" While I get how you're positioned, its still not clear how the second stamp came down and how it would have enough power to break bones. I went as read all our posts in the IC thread last night and I actually and as I was still confused I was in the process of sending a new message your what when Sreeya posted here.
And this here was what I had typed up before she posted:
Now I'm going to read your post, I just posted all this here to let it be known that I do share Sreeya's concerns.
And this here was what I had typed up before she posted:
As Ze'kyre's foot slammed upon the ground the densely corded muscles in his calf erupted and the weight of his knee was catapulted over the ball of his foot. <-- First stamp done here, this was the one from the previous post right?
Having kept his gravity evenly centred, it was buoyant and now his heel came down right where Kronos' left foot was landing with enough Force to break a couple of the small bones in the top of the foot. <-- Its not very clear what he's doing here, all it says is that now the heel came down on Kronos' foot, but when did it go up and move towards his foot? You mentioned in the previous messages that he brought the same foot down again, moving it forward to cover the distance between where it landed and where Kronos' foot had landed. The problem I'm seeing here is that the initial stamp was stated to be one with some force behind it as he let his entire centre of gravity fall down with it. After that you bring your foot up and bring it down again to try and crush his foot, the would give him enough time to react in some way. Or if it were just a shuffle forwards then it would not have the force needed to do any serious damage.
Also, could you help me visualise this part a little better:
He did nothing to stop the whip-like blow he had begun, but something that an arm could provide that a whip could not was a great deal of rotational tension. And so by suddenly tensing this group of muscles, as well as tempering the movements with his bicep, Ze'kyre was able to bring the base of his blade right by his face as it continued on its rolling arc out toward the Sith. For one flash framed instant, the light of the blade covered the echani's fair skinned face with a swatch of saphire, the blue reflecting strongly in his silver hair and eye as he glared up into the soul of his opponent. Another likened instant and both blades would be found near parallel, almost touching one another but for the fact that Kronos' was moving upwards and outwards, and Ze'kyre's was moving in a now horizontal arc that would separate the Sith at the waist.
"With this new axis it would come to pass that the blue blade of Ze'kyre's lightsaber and the crimson of Kronos' own would meet, the blue on its downward arc, and the red swinging up in a failed attempt to lop off the white warrior's arm - were it not for the added tension provided to alter the course of his lash-like blow." <--The blades clashed at the end of your post's previous paragraph, so what exactly is going on here? Instead of how his muscles move and such could you explain in terms of how his arm is lined up as he strikes and then how it moves as he executes this follow up?
Particularly this line: "And so by suddenly tensing this group of muscles, as well as tempering the movements with his bicep, Ze'kyre was able to bring the base of his blade right by his face as it continued on its rolling arc out toward the Sith."
You were bringing the blade down in a vertical strike, I
Now I'm going to read your post, I just posted all this here to let it be known that I do share Sreeya's concerns.