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Okay, as a lot of members probably already know, I recently launched a "Character Project" which I labelled Orion. Now what this character project entails was that I had to build not only this character from a character RP point of view, but also, build several key items for him, armor, weapons, things like that. Now it has apparently come to my attention that a majority of RPers who have reviewed said tech that I have put forth, not only have many questions, but also criticisms, and so I am respectfully asking either for a little help to make this character work, or their opinion on whether I should just trash a whole week's worth of writing and calculating for the character's tech, and other story boarding for the character itself. So. Here's what I have to work with right now from the character sheet. The armor is being redone, and several key points that have been brought about it (which I foresaw but didn't have the time to get the proper tech pages up) are also here. For those reading over the character portion, you can ignore the points of where he is raised and kidnapped by the Sith, as even that loyalty is under the scalpel right now.
Character portion:
COMPOSITION AND APPEARANCE:
6'4" cyborg body, silver eyes. His new body is in the perfect example of what a human should be at the age of 26, with plenty of muscle mass. His skin is very human like, made of a synthesized compound that mimics the elasticity, and color of skin, while also being just as durable, if not more so. His hair has a sickly look to it, being synthetic and white. When his skin covering is off and his armor plates are on, his body is matte black, his arms having synthetic bundles of muscle tissue to replace the actual muscle tissue, and with completely artificial joints, digits, and everything else. What dominates his appearance outside of his artificial skin, is the long and menacing modified Vibro Sword (also under contruction if any). He carries blaster rifle over his back as well, right underneath the sheath for his vibro sword.
Inside, his internals are modeled after a human's even with a circulatory system inside of his arms that directs the materials from the harvesters in his forearms back to the fuel cells for them to process the harvested materials into an extremely weak version of fuel to assist the recharging of his power cells. In order to keep the appearance of being human, they made the lubricant that keeps his artificial muscle from catching and rubbing against each other to the point of damaging it, the same coloration and viscosity of blood. However, if a limb becomes severed, it will become quite clear that it is synthetic with robotics.
PERSONALITY:
James is a character that is full of hate. He hates Jedi, the Alliance, and due to the Virtual Reality life that he lived for the last four years, he fervently believes that he is human. He is arrogant, but also quite intelligent. His intelligence stems from all of the "schooling" he received while in his Virtual Reality life, but his cunning is quite natural. He is one that loves the chase, of hunting down his prey, and getting them to fear him. He also takes much joy in taunting them, preferring to drive them into a angry haze which blinds them, rather than his which he believes enhances his senses, gives him strength. His pride is massive, and stems from what he believes is his natural abilities and strength. He also is a bit of a historian, and something of an art connoisseur, being able to admire good works of art, both paintings, murals, and books, though his views on which ones he likes, is quite narrow, only going after the kinds that agree with his line of thinking. However, their is one thing that is quite defining of his personality, even more so than his rage. It is his fear. He has a fear of failure, a fear of ridicule, and a fear of finding a problem that he can't fix. He fears that even with his strength and raw power he possesses, that he still will be not strong enough, not smart enough, not fast enough. But his greatest fear, is getting close to someone, only to see them die. This is why he goes to great lengths to distance himself to others, and if his "world" as in, all that he thinks he knows is true, was shattered and the truth revealed, he will not be the same.
LIKES AND DISLIKES:
James loves hunting whatever his superiors puts in front of him as prey. But his favorite kind of prey is Alliance troops, or what he hopes to go after soon is Jedi. He also likes the Sith as he thinks they stand for order and strength. He has a bit of curiosity about art, and history, especially military history. He looks at history with the sense of someone who is looking for answers to the future. He thinks that by studying the past, he can find all the answers for the future. As for something he prefers, he doesn't like having to lie, about anything. At all. He will hide from plain sight, and avoid something or tell a half truth, but he will never lie.
What he hates though, is the Alliance, the Jedi, for what they did to him in his "life" in the Virtual Reality. He also hates most other people, as he has preconceptions that they all hate him, and say things about him behind his back. But most of all, he hates losing. He absolutely hates losing to anyone. He also doesn't like others for racial reasons, seeing humans as genetically superior. He has a distaste for robots as well, and is very egocentric. As for another extreme dislike, is that for people who lie, more to him, than anything.
STRENGTHS AND WEAKNESSES:
James strengths are naturally his strength with his body, and ability to fight with his sword and blasters. Another strength that he has is his rage, as it grants him the ability to fight with much more strength, and with much greater ferocity than most warriors on the battlefield. He also has a natural cunning and intelligence that is enhanced by his cybernetic augmentation that he doesn't realize is true about him.
His weaknesses is also, his rage. It comes up quickly, and he can hardly control it. He also is extremely hard on himself for every loss, and every failure that he has experienced. But his major weakness, is what he believes is true. He absolutely believes that he is completely human, and to convince him of other wise would be difficult, but once he realizes something like that, his psyche, everything about him will fall apart. He won't know how to handle it, and will completely fall apart. Another, quite obvious weakness is that his cybernetic body is not completely hardened against EMP strikes, only vital systems that are keeping him alive. Everything else is vulnerable. A powerful enough blast from an EMP type weapon would leave him disabled and unable to move for an extended period of time, permanently if he isn't repaired. Also Ion weaponry is very effective against him, being able to temporarily disable body parts, and under concentrated fire, having the same effect as an EMP weaponry, or blast. He is also head strong, and always underestimates his opponents. His rage will also tire him out if he fights for too long. One last weakness that he has, is that he has an extreme distaste for lying, and, is very easy to read.
BIOGRAPHY:
James was a little street rat that lived on the streets of Nar Shadaa. He had a knack of surviving by stealing food from local vendors. He lived like this for eight years, when by simple luck of the draw (for various reasons, genetics, appearance beforehand, and lack of any notable parenting figures plus, dumb luck), he was kidnapped at the age of 12, and sent to a Sith facility. After a few months of living there as the Sith "rehabilitated" him. What was actually going on was that he was being prepped for the surgery and mental brainwashing. His brain and spinal cord was then surgically removed, and he was placed into a Virtual Reality for four years, but to him, it had seemed like it was thirteen.
It was there that he began a strict regime of good supportive parents with obvious loyalty to the Sith, school yard bullying for the way he looked and acted, and several incidents where the Alliance slaughtered all the “friends” that the system generated for him. This would continue as the system moved him from “family” to “family” until finally, he was virtually old enough to join the military. It was then he signed up voluntarily, and then when it was suggested that he volunteer for a new experimental program, to become an assassin of great strength and power, so that he could wreak destruction and havoc. The others he saw that were joining the Alliance, even his system generated “friends” hated him for joining the Sith. So he learned to hate them back. His “instructors” informed him to be ready to use his hatred to become stronger.
So James learned to hate them with everything he had. To get revenge, he subjected himself to the training to become an assassin. He learned how to kill, how to fight, how to shoot. Whenever he was put into a combat simulation, the doctors would put him to sleep, saying they had to put on his advanced armor which was extremely hard to begin with, and would be nigh impossible with him awake. What they really did was change the simulation to simulate his actual body without the skin covering and the added plates for his armor. For what seemed to be thirteen years to the boy, really took four. He learned to master the blade so he could fight Jedi, and blasters so he could fight regular troops. Whenever the training simulation was over, he get to the end where the doctors would tell him that he'd have to go back to sleep in order to get the armor off, which would really, be them putting the skin covering back on.
When he finally awoke from the VR room, and the brain was put into his cybernetic body, he didn't suspect anything. Now, all James is waiting for, is for his master to send him after his first target. He practices with his blade, and blasters, and the doctors have seen that the Virtual Reality training has done wonders for James, him continuing to have such ability with his weapons even in real life. His abilities mirror that of someone who was trained for ten years under the most skilled and harsh of trainers, which to this day have scientists wondering if such a project was just a fluke, or if there is actually a way to repeat such a project to get similar if not better results.
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Tech portion:
Orion Class Combat Armor
Class - Armor/Light
Appearance - See picture above
Function - Combat covering that comes in two layers. The "skin" which is polyfibe with durasteel woven into to help with strength, and to protect against smaller caliber blaster pistols. Against medium type blasters, rifles and sniper rifles, the armor is paltry, hardly helping at close range, and being moderately effective at mid to long ranges. For heavy type blasters, it is minimally effective at range, and non-existent at close range. To provide added protection to major components, several plates of a phrik/durasteel alloy have been placed at key points, on upper torso, forearms, calves/shins, and shoulders. The alloy is 30% phrik, and 70% durasteel, to help make it lighter and more durable, but also, more cost efficient.
Then there are the "fins" that are located at key points along the shoulders, along the fore arm, and upper arm. These fins are two centimeters in width, and vary in length to try to offer the most protection to the operator from melee weapons, and more specifically, light sabers. To make it easily replaceable without compromising the integrity of the armor too much, the "fins" are detachable, allowing new ones to be installed to replace the damaged or destroyed ones. This is difficult though without the aid of other personnel that are trained to handle the fins and install the new ones. The alloy that these are formed of is a solution (50/50) of Phrik/Durasteel with a Cortosis coating on the end to try and have an added protection. Tests have shown that the fins are moderately effective, and fit their design specifications perfectly. The ones at the shoulder, and upper arms are not designed to deflect repeated hammer blows from a lightsaber, and have shown that after one or two strikes, these plates fail catastrophically. The ones at the fore arm are considerably thicker, at 2 cm at the base, and with two of them in the same location allowing the fins have more durability, and tests have shown that should the operator become disarmed, these make excellent last resort defense options. However, with repeated hammer blows, they will only last twice as long as the shoulder and upper arm fins do, so about after the fourth strike, the fins usually fail. These fins are also highly effective at deflecting and blocking blows from standard melee weapons such as vibroblades and axes.
Another added utility on the armor, is the grappling claws located on the hands. To insure maximum durability and life span, plus strength, these are pure phrik. Combined with the strength of the artificial muscle aspect of the forearms, and calves, and these grappling claws can be used to cut and latch onto durasteel walls, giving the operator the ability to climb on just about any surface. It also makes these claws potent weapons, being able to cut through most tissues with ease, and allowing them to be used as infiltrators tools for other applications.
Artificial Skin covering
Class - Armor/Ultra light
Appearance - pale white
Function - The skin is a covering that is made for when James is outside of combat. The covering is made of a synthetic polyfibe that is made to mimic all the properties of skin, and is even a bit stronger than natural skin. It is more scratch resistant, able to withstand just a little more outside stress and trauma than normal skin. However it is not able to be able to repair itself, or stop any blaster fire of any kind. And the skin is not able to protect against other serious trauma like blades, however it is able to take punches from an average sized human with decent durability. It is not able to take hits from another synthetic very well at all.
Biological fuel (which for simplicity's sake, I referred to as a serum, being it is liquid mixture of many complex compounds) - Highly Pressurized and concentrated solution mix between Deuterium (the stabilizer and added fuel), Na3, Cl2, and massive amounts of condensed proteins all inside in the mix making it an extremely powerful, and potent energy solution for the fuel cells located next to his spine. This is synthesized synthetically onboard a ship's medical wing from chemicals, though a not very efficient replacement can be harvested from biological blood.
What you see above is what I have left for now. And I'm getting ready to completely scrap this project as it would seem that many a member has been infuriated with the small misunderstandings that this project seems to have been generated.
Character portion:
COMPOSITION AND APPEARANCE:
6'4" cyborg body, silver eyes. His new body is in the perfect example of what a human should be at the age of 26, with plenty of muscle mass. His skin is very human like, made of a synthesized compound that mimics the elasticity, and color of skin, while also being just as durable, if not more so. His hair has a sickly look to it, being synthetic and white. When his skin covering is off and his armor plates are on, his body is matte black, his arms having synthetic bundles of muscle tissue to replace the actual muscle tissue, and with completely artificial joints, digits, and everything else. What dominates his appearance outside of his artificial skin, is the long and menacing modified Vibro Sword (also under contruction if any). He carries blaster rifle over his back as well, right underneath the sheath for his vibro sword.
Inside, his internals are modeled after a human's even with a circulatory system inside of his arms that directs the materials from the harvesters in his forearms back to the fuel cells for them to process the harvested materials into an extremely weak version of fuel to assist the recharging of his power cells. In order to keep the appearance of being human, they made the lubricant that keeps his artificial muscle from catching and rubbing against each other to the point of damaging it, the same coloration and viscosity of blood. However, if a limb becomes severed, it will become quite clear that it is synthetic with robotics.
PERSONALITY:
James is a character that is full of hate. He hates Jedi, the Alliance, and due to the Virtual Reality life that he lived for the last four years, he fervently believes that he is human. He is arrogant, but also quite intelligent. His intelligence stems from all of the "schooling" he received while in his Virtual Reality life, but his cunning is quite natural. He is one that loves the chase, of hunting down his prey, and getting them to fear him. He also takes much joy in taunting them, preferring to drive them into a angry haze which blinds them, rather than his which he believes enhances his senses, gives him strength. His pride is massive, and stems from what he believes is his natural abilities and strength. He also is a bit of a historian, and something of an art connoisseur, being able to admire good works of art, both paintings, murals, and books, though his views on which ones he likes, is quite narrow, only going after the kinds that agree with his line of thinking. However, their is one thing that is quite defining of his personality, even more so than his rage. It is his fear. He has a fear of failure, a fear of ridicule, and a fear of finding a problem that he can't fix. He fears that even with his strength and raw power he possesses, that he still will be not strong enough, not smart enough, not fast enough. But his greatest fear, is getting close to someone, only to see them die. This is why he goes to great lengths to distance himself to others, and if his "world" as in, all that he thinks he knows is true, was shattered and the truth revealed, he will not be the same.
LIKES AND DISLIKES:
James loves hunting whatever his superiors puts in front of him as prey. But his favorite kind of prey is Alliance troops, or what he hopes to go after soon is Jedi. He also likes the Sith as he thinks they stand for order and strength. He has a bit of curiosity about art, and history, especially military history. He looks at history with the sense of someone who is looking for answers to the future. He thinks that by studying the past, he can find all the answers for the future. As for something he prefers, he doesn't like having to lie, about anything. At all. He will hide from plain sight, and avoid something or tell a half truth, but he will never lie.
What he hates though, is the Alliance, the Jedi, for what they did to him in his "life" in the Virtual Reality. He also hates most other people, as he has preconceptions that they all hate him, and say things about him behind his back. But most of all, he hates losing. He absolutely hates losing to anyone. He also doesn't like others for racial reasons, seeing humans as genetically superior. He has a distaste for robots as well, and is very egocentric. As for another extreme dislike, is that for people who lie, more to him, than anything.
STRENGTHS AND WEAKNESSES:
James strengths are naturally his strength with his body, and ability to fight with his sword and blasters. Another strength that he has is his rage, as it grants him the ability to fight with much more strength, and with much greater ferocity than most warriors on the battlefield. He also has a natural cunning and intelligence that is enhanced by his cybernetic augmentation that he doesn't realize is true about him.
His weaknesses is also, his rage. It comes up quickly, and he can hardly control it. He also is extremely hard on himself for every loss, and every failure that he has experienced. But his major weakness, is what he believes is true. He absolutely believes that he is completely human, and to convince him of other wise would be difficult, but once he realizes something like that, his psyche, everything about him will fall apart. He won't know how to handle it, and will completely fall apart. Another, quite obvious weakness is that his cybernetic body is not completely hardened against EMP strikes, only vital systems that are keeping him alive. Everything else is vulnerable. A powerful enough blast from an EMP type weapon would leave him disabled and unable to move for an extended period of time, permanently if he isn't repaired. Also Ion weaponry is very effective against him, being able to temporarily disable body parts, and under concentrated fire, having the same effect as an EMP weaponry, or blast. He is also head strong, and always underestimates his opponents. His rage will also tire him out if he fights for too long. One last weakness that he has, is that he has an extreme distaste for lying, and, is very easy to read.
BIOGRAPHY:
James was a little street rat that lived on the streets of Nar Shadaa. He had a knack of surviving by stealing food from local vendors. He lived like this for eight years, when by simple luck of the draw (for various reasons, genetics, appearance beforehand, and lack of any notable parenting figures plus, dumb luck), he was kidnapped at the age of 12, and sent to a Sith facility. After a few months of living there as the Sith "rehabilitated" him. What was actually going on was that he was being prepped for the surgery and mental brainwashing. His brain and spinal cord was then surgically removed, and he was placed into a Virtual Reality for four years, but to him, it had seemed like it was thirteen.
It was there that he began a strict regime of good supportive parents with obvious loyalty to the Sith, school yard bullying for the way he looked and acted, and several incidents where the Alliance slaughtered all the “friends” that the system generated for him. This would continue as the system moved him from “family” to “family” until finally, he was virtually old enough to join the military. It was then he signed up voluntarily, and then when it was suggested that he volunteer for a new experimental program, to become an assassin of great strength and power, so that he could wreak destruction and havoc. The others he saw that were joining the Alliance, even his system generated “friends” hated him for joining the Sith. So he learned to hate them back. His “instructors” informed him to be ready to use his hatred to become stronger.
So James learned to hate them with everything he had. To get revenge, he subjected himself to the training to become an assassin. He learned how to kill, how to fight, how to shoot. Whenever he was put into a combat simulation, the doctors would put him to sleep, saying they had to put on his advanced armor which was extremely hard to begin with, and would be nigh impossible with him awake. What they really did was change the simulation to simulate his actual body without the skin covering and the added plates for his armor. For what seemed to be thirteen years to the boy, really took four. He learned to master the blade so he could fight Jedi, and blasters so he could fight regular troops. Whenever the training simulation was over, he get to the end where the doctors would tell him that he'd have to go back to sleep in order to get the armor off, which would really, be them putting the skin covering back on.
When he finally awoke from the VR room, and the brain was put into his cybernetic body, he didn't suspect anything. Now, all James is waiting for, is for his master to send him after his first target. He practices with his blade, and blasters, and the doctors have seen that the Virtual Reality training has done wonders for James, him continuing to have such ability with his weapons even in real life. His abilities mirror that of someone who was trained for ten years under the most skilled and harsh of trainers, which to this day have scientists wondering if such a project was just a fluke, or if there is actually a way to repeat such a project to get similar if not better results.
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Tech portion:
Orion Class Combat Armor
Class - Armor/Light
Appearance - See picture above
Function - Combat covering that comes in two layers. The "skin" which is polyfibe with durasteel woven into to help with strength, and to protect against smaller caliber blaster pistols. Against medium type blasters, rifles and sniper rifles, the armor is paltry, hardly helping at close range, and being moderately effective at mid to long ranges. For heavy type blasters, it is minimally effective at range, and non-existent at close range. To provide added protection to major components, several plates of a phrik/durasteel alloy have been placed at key points, on upper torso, forearms, calves/shins, and shoulders. The alloy is 30% phrik, and 70% durasteel, to help make it lighter and more durable, but also, more cost efficient.
Then there are the "fins" that are located at key points along the shoulders, along the fore arm, and upper arm. These fins are two centimeters in width, and vary in length to try to offer the most protection to the operator from melee weapons, and more specifically, light sabers. To make it easily replaceable without compromising the integrity of the armor too much, the "fins" are detachable, allowing new ones to be installed to replace the damaged or destroyed ones. This is difficult though without the aid of other personnel that are trained to handle the fins and install the new ones. The alloy that these are formed of is a solution (50/50) of Phrik/Durasteel with a Cortosis coating on the end to try and have an added protection. Tests have shown that the fins are moderately effective, and fit their design specifications perfectly. The ones at the shoulder, and upper arms are not designed to deflect repeated hammer blows from a lightsaber, and have shown that after one or two strikes, these plates fail catastrophically. The ones at the fore arm are considerably thicker, at 2 cm at the base, and with two of them in the same location allowing the fins have more durability, and tests have shown that should the operator become disarmed, these make excellent last resort defense options. However, with repeated hammer blows, they will only last twice as long as the shoulder and upper arm fins do, so about after the fourth strike, the fins usually fail. These fins are also highly effective at deflecting and blocking blows from standard melee weapons such as vibroblades and axes.
Another added utility on the armor, is the grappling claws located on the hands. To insure maximum durability and life span, plus strength, these are pure phrik. Combined with the strength of the artificial muscle aspect of the forearms, and calves, and these grappling claws can be used to cut and latch onto durasteel walls, giving the operator the ability to climb on just about any surface. It also makes these claws potent weapons, being able to cut through most tissues with ease, and allowing them to be used as infiltrators tools for other applications.
Artificial Skin covering
Class - Armor/Ultra light
Appearance - pale white
Function - The skin is a covering that is made for when James is outside of combat. The covering is made of a synthetic polyfibe that is made to mimic all the properties of skin, and is even a bit stronger than natural skin. It is more scratch resistant, able to withstand just a little more outside stress and trauma than normal skin. However it is not able to be able to repair itself, or stop any blaster fire of any kind. And the skin is not able to protect against other serious trauma like blades, however it is able to take punches from an average sized human with decent durability. It is not able to take hits from another synthetic very well at all.
Biological fuel (which for simplicity's sake, I referred to as a serum, being it is liquid mixture of many complex compounds) - Highly Pressurized and concentrated solution mix between Deuterium (the stabilizer and added fuel), Na3, Cl2, and massive amounts of condensed proteins all inside in the mix making it an extremely powerful, and potent energy solution for the fuel cells located next to his spine. This is synthesized synthetically onboard a ship's medical wing from chemicals, though a not very efficient replacement can be harvested from biological blood.
What you see above is what I have left for now. And I'm getting ready to completely scrap this project as it would seem that many a member has been infuriated with the small misunderstandings that this project seems to have been generated.
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