Dameon Shikyo

Dameon Shikyo

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Name: Dameon Shikyo
Faction: Neutral.
Rank: N/A
Species: Human
Age: 25
Gender: Male
Height: 5ft 11in
Weight: 190 lbs
Eyes: Blue
Hair: Light Brown
Skin: White
Distinguishing Marks: Scar on right forearm
Force Sensitive: Yes

General Appearance:

Dameon is a lean muscular male with a average height. He is not big and brutish but instead holds the figure of someone who focuses on things other than personal body enhancement. He is an intellect and is shows, the scars and cracks on his face glowing with his power over the force. The scars remaining hidden and unseen until the force is called upon. These scars caused by his neutral side of the force, caught somewhere in between the disfigurement of the dark side and the radiance of the light side. Dameon likes to remain unseen for the most part as he travels and often wears cloaks and robes to disguise himself among the commoners of each planet.

Character Attributes

Dameon is a capable and trained force sensitive user and has incredible power with force powers as that in the end is what he excels most in. Though still capable and strong he lacks the proper and focus discipline to excel in physical combat especially when it comes to hand to hand combat. Dameon is extremely intelligent and wise and uses his mind as a weapon while sacrificing more soft skills when it comes to other people. In fact Dameon is more of a mastermind, tactician, and manipulator than he is a soldier or blunt instrument.

Force Powers:

Dameon has focused his training to excel and have a variety of force powers at his disposal while exceptional at a few such as Electrical Manipulation, Technometry, teleportation, combustion, and mental manipulation. The other force powers he has learned generally are average at best including the basics that is taught to most force users. Though he is capable of excelling in others he seeks to further increase his abilities in the ones he is already specializing in, in hopes of mastering them or finding new uses for them. Since Dameon is less of a physical fighter he makes sure that he has various ways to escape or protect himself from danger using the force. Also, because of his neutrality he tends to know bits from both the light and the dark side. Aside from his manipulation of technology Dameon focused to because an expert in controlling electricity and not necessarily just the dark side variations of. Dameon can manipulate, control, and create electricity and bend it to his needs allowing him to make constructs, absorb electricity, and control electromagnetic waves if needed.

Skills:

Dameon as a child had to learn to live on the streets and as such was a crafty at learning ways to survive such as pick pocketing. Though eventually he learned about computers and started to excel and develop a new craft. As such Dameon spent the better part of his life prior to force training at developing skills such as hacking, slicing, and even building droids or custom parts for ships, computers, and droids. As he got older and became trained his hacking fell off as Dameon could essentially hack using his force powers. In turn his skills with building started to become much better and as such was able to craft his own droids and tools that fit his own needs and even later make modifications to his ship.

Lightsaber/Sword Forms:

Dameon is not strong physically and as such had to learn to find a way to effectively combat opponents who were stronger than him and even more skilled than him with a light saber. Dameon in turn would develop his own forms based on using force powers to try and boost his main weakness which was physical combat. During his training he came up with two styles:

Shikyo I: A self developed light saber form by Dameon in his months of isolated training. This art focuses on swift accurate strikes with counter attacks. Lacking in actual defense the art focuses on using the opponents energy against them to set up for a devastating counter attack. Subtle use of the force is used to help make the opponent lose balance. This is done by force pulling and pushing areas of the opponents body. Precise control of the force is needed or at least be expertly trained in the Shikyo form.

Shikyo II: This form compliments Shikyo I as it is the attacking form of his created light saber form. This form involves very quick movements and attacks in ways that make the opponent lose their balance and potentially open themselves up to more powerful attacks. This form is used interchangeably and the difference is only able to be spotted by expert light saber duelists.

Dameon also knows (albeit not as good as his self made ones):
-Form I
-Form II
-Form III
-Form Form IV

Strengths and Weaknesses:

Dameon is an intellect and strong force user that focuses on manipulation of minds, technology, and defense. He also has exceptional skills at crafting and building modifications and droids. However he has essentially sacrificed his physical combat skills to further his passion with technology and the force. As such he had to create his own light saber forms just to try and overcome his weaknesses as much as possible. Dameon is a very skilled tactician and manipulator often staying in the shadows to whisper to others and using his powers to impact the future to create balance.

Gear:

Clothes (as seen above)

-1/2" light metal ball bearings can be thrown as weapons or manipulated to create platforms. These are hidden in his pockets and other parts of his robe. Can be a potential weapon with his force powers.

Hacking/Slicing tools

Expert Hacking Data Pad: Store bought and modified heavily over the course of a year. This datapad can connect through all frequencies, manually, satellite link, wirelessly and all on the fly. Only someone of equal skill can even use this machine as it is heavily encrypted and requires the foremost expert to be able to use.

Fate: A Custom lightsaber using a combination of his families two crystals; Quixoni and Bondar which increases Dameons Force powers and giving the lightsaber a unique stun effect. The light is unique as the center is blue with a silver glow.

Ship:

Hellion: A light freighter that was modified by Dameon.

Droids:

Waizu: A battle droid similar in design to a Skytrooper however custom built to Dameon's own design. It has a standard blaster rifle, booster pack, and even a vibro staff. It is also capable of exploding with a self-destruct sequence and causing catastrophic damage for 25 meters. This battle droid is used for escort, sabotage, and training.


Personality:

Dameon is a very kind hearted individual who does not seek to harm anyone unless it is out of protection, whether it be protecting himself or someone else close to him. However over the years of training and experience he has developed his own philosophies and often will help either the Jedi or the Sith order to keep balance in the galaxy. Though mostly a protector Dameon is a keen warrior as he knows his strengths in combat and out of combat and is not afraid to kill when the need arises.

Biography:

Twenty five years ago Dameon has been born into a family of wealth and popularity. His father and mother were both wealthy club owners in the downtown district of Courescant. However because of the nature of their business they became prime targets to another group starting up their own clubs and needed their competition out of the way. The once respectable Shikyo family and their club chains were taken over in a single night and the clubs became a place of gambling and prostituting. Dameon’s mother and father were killed in the process. Dameon was left on his own in the streets at the young age of five.

Multiple people had taken Dameon in their homes to raise him but soon realized the burden of a small child and he would be kicked back out onto the streets. By the time he was ten Dameon decided he had to do things for himself and there wasn’t anyone around that would be able to help him. He stayed away from games and instead found a strong interest in electronics and was soon reprogramming droids as well as hacking into computers for people and getting paid to do so. He never thought of it as a crime he was simply a tool people used so they could solve a problem. The way he figured it wasn’t his choice to do illegal things as he had no choice if he wanted to live.

By the time Dameon had turned 16 he had become adept at hacking and splicing he was the go to guy underground to solve electronic needs. However there wasn’t a lot of money in it especially with gangs always strong arming him into not being paid at all. This had gotten him into plenty of fights where he won some but lost just as many. During this time he began to notice strange occurrences where he would know when someone was about to pull a blaster on him so he had a head start to his own. He didn’t know why this was happening and simply wrote it off as survival instinct.

Dameon would eventually establish a business in the darkest areas of the planet. However it was not long after that an attack on his life triggered an awareness in his powers with the force. This was in turn seen by another, an experienced gray jedi who had left the order ages ago but still was a proclaimed protector. He would take Dameon in and teach him what he knew after years Dameon developed into a capable soldier of balance. By the time Dameon turned twenty four he was on his own. His master would be killed in a conflict with another to which he had been ordered to not retaliate in order to maintain balance. Dameon would eventually experiment with his own abilities realizing his experience and skills with technology would assist him greatly in the years to come and he would utilize this strength into his fighting style. On his masters final breaths he would seek out the Jedi order for he feared that the Sith were becoming too strong again. However Dameon remained uncertain as he had been away from the world for so long. Now he needed to proceed forward to see if the rumors were true.

Kills:
N/A

Role-Plays:
 
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Bigfatpenn

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Agreed, tone those stats down a bit but all around a really awesome character! Me like!
 

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I'll do a bit of a comprehensive overview and critique tonight.

But toning down the stats is first priority.
 

Darkwasp

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Hi Dameon,
I agree with the others; in that this character seems extremely powerful, with very few notable weaknesses. Below are a few suggestions (split up by section) that I think would help flesh out your character more.
  • Character Traits
    • I would suggest getting rid of the number system; first and foremost for your attributes (It is too subjective and usually causes more debate than they are helpful). Though it is a little more work, its usually better just to write a couple of sentences to describe the attribute.
    • Assuming that the current number system is "out of 10" almost every attribute is above average or exceptional. The trend is usually; for every elite attribute, there is another attribute that is well below average. Attempt to balance out Dameon's attributes a little more, so that he doesn't appear exceptional at everything.
  • Force Powers
    • Again; the point system is going to cause you more issues than not.
    • We've tried to get away with listing specific Force Powers, and have tried to focus on characters' talents in more general areas of the Force.
    • It's probably best to use sentences rather than lists.
    • "Pro Tip": It's probably best to avoid the use of the word "mastered" in the descriptions. Adjectives like: exceptional - are better to used, when describing a high level of skill in an area. (Master just seems to imply that there is nothing left to learn)
  • Skills
    • It's really cool that he is an amazing hacker. However, right now, his hacking skill is at a level in which it is basically a super power. There are definitely limits to what can and cannot be hacked, as long as you stick with that knowledge in your writing, I see no problem with being an exceptional Slicer/Hacker.
    • Daemon has several abilities that take lots of time to get really good at. Try to rank his focuses in order (Force Abilities, Physical Combat [defensive], and Hacking [Not necessarily in that order]) and balance them using that ranking.
  • Lightsaber Forms
    • Specific Lightsaber Forms aren't as important as they used to be.
    • Not to discredit the awesome form that you had him create, but couldn't he just modify an already existing form? It would take less time and effort to do.
    • See SKILLS above about balancing
  • Strength and Weaknesses
    • I would love to see a personality flaw and/or strength here (not just combat related)
  • Ship
    • Hellion might have enough modifications to warrant a technical write up and submitted for approval
  • Droid
    • I'm unsure about the age of the development of the IG-100 Units, but they Might be too new for this timeline. I'll let someone else field this one.
  • Biography
    • The first sentence in your bio says : "Eighteen years ago Dameon has been born into a family of wealth and popularity." but his age it listed as 25.
Again; These are merely suggestions, and it probably looks like more than it is. If you have any questions about my suggestions, or would like any help, feel free to PM me at anytime.
 

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So, personally, I always find myself comparing a character to the art they're given- in this case, that would be my second favorite planeswalker, Jace. By all means, I love the character. But if Jace was the kind of character you were going for, he was such a powerful mage simply because of his utter mastery of mind magic. Here, you could translate that into Mind tricks, such as the one Obi-wan is so fond of. Also, that is only one example, but their are many more ways for that. Also, Jace wasn't a fighter- he actually lost a few duels early on because of this. He's rather just wipe their minds. Remember, this is only if you are basing him off of Jace.

The next part is universal- I feel like he has too much power in too many things for his age. At 25, he'd only have time in his life for maybe two. And if you're going for a jack of all trades character, a very important to remember phrase is this. "Good at all, exceptional at none." That means that a character can have a wide variety of skills, but the more he has, the less chance he'll have to really advance in one while keeping up his abilities with the rest.'


P.S. Ral Zarek is much more useful than most Jace cards nowadays. Just my opinion.
 

Dameon Shikyo

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Ha ha well as it states he is more of an exceptional force user than anything else. Sure he is great with technology and a hacker but this was also before his training.

Also Ral isn't T2 legal and thats the only REAL format :P
 

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Well still. At that age, he wouldn't have time to hone all these skills, especially seeing how some of them are more advanced skills, such as combustion.

Maybe for you it is. I play only 3 formats. EDH (Angels with Gisella) Modern (Combo with Niv Mizzet) and Casual. Never been a competitive player, tbh
 

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@Dameon Shikyo did I read he could teleport himself? If so you need to cut that out of the profile since there is no way he would know or even be capable of doing that don't think its even canon anymore having the ability to do that.

An his powers of electricity need to be tone down by a lot, sorry to say but it is over powered and not being a part of any main factions or having RPed with him actually learning it is a no go. Now if you RPed with him learning some of these moves that's fine but as it is right now he is near grandmaster level if he could do that with electricity.

And currently one can no be both using dark side powers and light side as currently the rules for the force is being gray isn't really a thing, you can really only be light or dark.

Not waiting to discourage you but tone down on a lot of his abilities involving technology and the other things I mention and it should be good.

http://www.thestarwarsrp.com/forum/index.php?threads/guide-to-force-powers.64253/

^ This might help you to learn what is allowed and not allowed on the site
 
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