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So, after a long break, I am gonna try again. Feel free to comment and give tips. Also, picture help?


NAME:
Sometimes they called her Jayden, other times she had no names.
FACTION: none yet
RANK: slave, is there any lower rank?
SPECIES: She is a Human/ Mirialan cross
AGE: She is not too sure about how old she is, probably in her 20s. Yet, when she is free, she will act like a child in some ways.
GENDER: female
FORCE SENSITIVE: yeah, but ya think anyone has looked at her? Not in a good way. She was trained as a Sith Spy or servant, depending on their needs. She has learned how to use the force, but is commanded to use it either for work or her master's will.

APPEARANCE:
At first, this girl is not much to look at, being as skinny and thin as any slave that exists. Her small, 4ft, 10in size makes her look weak and helpless, a good look for a slave, especially one whom is a slave for the Sith. Her long, black hair is dirty and tangled, often worn in a messy pony tail. Scars fresh and old criss cross all over her body, including dagger slashes on her face. She wears the binders and collars of a slave and the thinnest robes you ever did see. They do nothing to keep her warm, but she does what she can. She is light, weighing only about 70lb or lower.

However, due to her years as a servant, or as some call, a slave, to the Sith, she has become strong enough to do the lifting and such needed for her work. You can just see muscles on her skinny arms and pale skin. Her blue eyes are hard, showing that she had survived. Her hands and arms bear the scars of fights, which she had to do to survive.

ATTRIBUTES:
Strengths:
She is a quick leaner and has a stubborn will. While she will not go against her master, she will fight to finish a task. The girl follows the rules well, even adding her own if she doesn't know the rule for something. Being quick minded has led to her staying alive even to this day. she quickly gains the pattern of an event, which hints at her force abilities. She is obedient and quick to act. She is a very good actor and can make you think she is happy when she is not.

She has the nerve and the grit to take on whom needs to be taken down, though, unless commanded, she will not kill a Sith.

Weaknesses:
She is a natural submissive, letting others do what they will. She tends to ignore pain, to the point of passing out. She cannot handle major changes in the environment, such as cold and heat, often getting sick from a particularly strong breeze. The girl is also afraid of everything, noises, lights, you name it. Due to the Sith Torturing her for their own amusement, she tends to be very defensive to anyone whom is not her master. She never shows weakness, only using strength. Even is she has to scare others to keep them at a distance.


PERSONALITY:
The girl is a nervous creature that has a submissive personality. While she thrives under structure, she gets scared if the pattern of events are broken in even a minor way. She Is shy and tends to stay out of the way. Without a structure, she can get very scared. Yet, she has a strong will. even is she does obey her masters. Sadly, she has no concept of what is right or wrong other than what her masters push into her frail mind.

On the outside, she doesn't show any of that. To others, she is defensive and dangerous. she shows no pain and tends to push people aside. she prefers to do things herself. She can be ruthless to the other various servants of the Sith, but feels no remorse. If you want to survive, you have to be strong.

BIOGRAPHY:
Slavery, it was all she knew. Ever since she was taken from her parent's dead bodies. she was kept for one purpose: to serve. She was trust into the hands of another slave whom was instructed to teach her the ways of servitude. At first, the girl didn't understand what was going on, why were these people so mean? She would later find that it was because they could be. The strong had to exert their authority and be mean, or they would be weak. The weak served the strong, even if it was something the weak didn't want to do.

She had seen so many come under the iron hands of her Sith Masters, only to die for their pleasure or anger. She considered herself lucky that they kept her alive. She never had a name, though sometimes the Sith would call her Jayden, but that was rare. All she knew was this simple fact: if you disobeyed or spoke, you were beaten. If you were quiet, quick and obedient, you were left alone. Her personality and attributes formed under the cruel, iron fist of many Sith Masters. They even taught her how to use the force when they discovered she was force sensitive.

SKILLS:
quick learner and quick thinker. She can naturally use the force, but it is very weak and not focused. The girl has not fighting skills, but has the stamina for a sprint and dodging.
GEAR:
Slave collar and binders

whatever her masters give her for a task

thin robes that do nothing to keep her warm

ROLE-PLAYS:

To be added to

RELATIONSHIPS:
to be added to


SHIP:

Are you insane? she owns no such luxury.

DROIDS:
very funny, slaves do all the work.

PETS:
None, yet, but would be nice.

KILLS:
She has killed others before, but will never state the reasons.
COMBAT:
She fights to survive, nothing more.
 
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I'm not sure why the sith wouldn't train a force sensitive slave? I mean it would make sense to gain as many followers as humanly possible and work to forge a sith in fire or have them burn and wither away. Sure she wouldn't be treated as a true sith and likely be ridiculed for her origins by most, but she would still be trained as an acolyte of the sith or taken by the inquisition to be indoctrinated and serve them.
 

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I see what you mean, but I want to have a slave character that becomes a free person. Is there a way she can still be a slave, but receive "training" in some way?
 

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It seems to make since, I mean, didn't they have them build one of the temples?
 

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It seems to make since, I mean, didn't they have them build one of the temples?
Perhaps, but that begs another question, why have a tiny, weak, mentally slow/developmentally slow person as a slave? Nothing I've read in canon suggests the sith capture people and raise them for the sole purpose of torturing. Those that do get captured and tortured do not last long(not even two weeks). She obviously can't help build temples, nor be used as an assassin, a servant slave perhaps but servant slaves are usually treated well(for a slave) as they're demonstrations of wealth and power. Look, I'm not against playing a slave, I've played a former one myself. But I'm going to be honest with you, this feels like a Fetish indulgence.

She doesn't have any real redeeming qualities, her whole concept, biography and personality is based entirely around her being a slave. I know nothing about this character outside of her being a slave. I would, personally, like to see more depth added as a whole.
 

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Perhaps, but that begs another question, why have a tiny, weak, mentally slow/developmentally slow person as a slave? Nothing I've read in canon suggests the sith capture people and raise them for the sole purpose of torturing. Those that do get captured and tortured do not last long(not even two weeks). She obviously can't help build temples, nor be used as an assassin, a servant slave perhaps but servant slaves are usually treated well(for a slave) as they're demonstrations of wealth and power. Look, I'm not against playing a slave, I've played a former one myself. But I'm going to be honest with you, this feels like a Fetish indulgence.

She doesn't have any real redeeming qualities, her whole concept, biography and personality is based entirely around her being a slave. I know nothing about this character outside of her being a slave. I would, personally, like to see more depth added as a whole.
I'd actually have to agree with BN, the profile is generally lacking when it comes to redeeming qualities and actual character traits not related to being a slave. Slave characters are cool as a starting point, and if you want their main character development to start with them as one then becoming free and doing whatever that's fine but with the character being your second slave character thus far I feel like you're limiting yourself to one character archetype.
 

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This is the part I have trouble with, making the profile for the character. I have it in my head, but have trouble finding the words.

How can I adjust this?
 

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fixed some stuff, what ya'll think?

I don't see much difference, can you point it out?

If you'd like some suggestions for things to add, add in a purpose in her bio. What was she a slave for? Is she still a slave? Who owns her? Does she have plans for escape? What would she do if she was free? Perhaps a mysterious figure is training her in the background? Perhaps her master is training her in the force? These are the kind of questions that add meat to a character.
 

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Not really relating to this character directly, but I noticed that all of your characters have been slaves or former slaves. Its absolutely fine to have a niche, but sometimes it can be a good experience to step outside your comfort zone and try something different. I've pretty much always played Paragon characters, but I decided to try something new and made my current character, Bria Tsuani, a lot darker and morally ambiguous following the timeskip, and I feel like it's made me a better writer because of it.

Just something to consider, and I wish you the best with this and other characters. :)
 

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i am handwriting a new profile for Jayden, once I make it, I will type it here.
 
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