Kintara the Lancer

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Kιɴтαrα
Tнe Lαɴcer

AGE: Appears to be in her Mid-20's

SEX: Female

SPECIES: Genetically Engineered Devaronian (Click Me!)

HOMEWORLD: Falleen (Click Me!)

HEIGHT: 2.2 Meters (About 7'2)

WEIGHT: 130 Kilograms (Average weight)

EYES: Bright Red (They Glow)

HAIR: Midnight Blue (Braided)

SKIN: Pale Violet, Embroided with gold​



STRENGTH
Kintara is incredibly strong mostly thanks to the high density of her organic tissue (Bones, muscles, and skin). She is capable of lifting a little over 300 kilograms before straining herself and her punches are often capable of breaking the jaws of her opponents in a single blow. She has trained most of her life to achieve this level of strength and control.


DEXTERITY
Despite her weight and density, Kintara is relatively quick on her feet. Though not as agile as someone more slender and nimble, she is quite capable of running faster than the average humanoid. This is a result of both her physical prowess and constant training. She is quite capable of using both hands as well, whether it's with blasters, swords or even writing utensils.


CONSTITUTION
As with her ability to lift great amounts of weight, her tissue density also makes her incredibly durable. She can take extraordinary amounts of punishment that would otherwise kill a normal human, leaving her with mere bruises. It is also substantially difficult for her to break bones, and many would compare her skeletal structure to stone or steel over collagen.


INTELLIGENCE
Though she excels in combat and has a profound martial prowess, Kintara has had little use for any of the sciences beyond simple mathematics and physics (such as gravity exists and 1+1=2). She knows very little of the galaxy as a whole and isn't used to talking to people often, especially since she possesses a thick accent that comes from the Falleen-accented tongue. However, she is a quick learner and has made efforts to increase her knowledge in general sciences since she's been freed from her bonds.


FORCE SENSITIVITY
Kintara, like many others in the galaxy, is connected to the force and highly sensitive to its flow. She has found that she can absolutely trust her gut feelings and sometimes has a "bad feeling" about things before they happen. This allows her to adapt quickly to a bad situation. Subconsciously, she uses the force to guide much of her actions, insisting it's nothing more than experience that gives her these little nudges in the right direction.


PERSONALITY
Abrasive is perhaps the best word that can be used to describe Kintara. She believes in honesty first and foremost and is unwilling to hold her tongue to avoid 'hurt feelings'. However, those few that know her well have seen her compassionate and tender side, so she's not a one-sided coin when it comes to relationships.



WEAPONS OF CHOICE
WITH CLICKY LINKS!


Heavily modified from its original design, this SA-21 Heavy Blaster now sports an extendable stock, a modified heavy barrel, a overcharged power pack and a small holographic scope that allows her to engage her targets at above-average ranges of nearly 100 meters with precision. However, it still possesses the overheating and ammo consumption issues of its original casing.



Lacking the need for modifications and withholding the desire to risk herself with explosives, this CZ-6100 is fresh of the market and in perfect working order. Though she rarely uses it, she feels better knowing that it's there and awaits the opportunity to test it against military-grade droids and air-support craft.



Left to her after the passing of her former master, this particular RZX-637 Sentry Droid named "Goron" has been retrofitted with a new color scheme (gold stripes on a red shell with black hydraulics) and several illegal devices, such as a slicing unit and hidden, rapid firing blaster cannons within its wrists and chest. Its right arm weapon has been entirely replaced by a custom 'hand' that matches its left, allowing it to do more than standing guard.




STARSHIP OF CHOICE
WITH CLICKY LINKS!

Blue Brusque

Commissioned privately with the Mon Calamari Shipyards and modified heavily over the years by various organizations, this starship was inherited by Kintara from her former owner. Coming in a dark blue color with white stripes, the "Blue Brusque" comes with additional features over the standard Oceanspray model, such as an enhanced sensor array, an intricate life-support system with multiple backups and buffers, large communications suite with the ability to access underground (black market) comms frequencies, a military-grade (and highly illegal) shield generator, a short range communications and sensor jammer (that allows her cargo to remain unscanned), and finally several dozen hidden compartments throughout the ship. To top it off, the single twin-light laser cannon has been replaced with a much larger and bulkier missile turret. To compensate for its physical ammunition, part of the cargo bay has been turned into an auto-loader, and her ship can hold up to 60 small missiles. Just beneath the cockpit, a jury-rigged medium laser cannon has been attached to a swivel mount, allowing the navigator to control and fire it independently from the pilot.


BIOGRAPHY
A PLAYGROUND OF GENES

Young Ezerk Unix was not the most esteemed of his kind. Sitting at the lowest tier on the ladder to recognition, few amongst the Falleen Noble Houses even knew his name and fewer still even cared to learn it. Though heir to a massive fortune with hundreds of shares in several outer and inner rim corporations, Ezerk's arrogance and overconfidence won him no friends at court or in the black market, and many often used his name in jest when it came to negotiations, for he possessed no tact or elegance when it came to his dealings. Even when it came to prized possessions and rarities, Ezerk had very little to show, often mocked at parties because of his modest selection of wealth. Humiliation, however, proved to be a valuable motivator. With a small fortune and some perseverance, Ezerk ventured far into the outer rim in search of a mysterious race known as the Kaminoans, whom were only spoken of in myth and rumor. Surprisingly, it hadn't been as difficult as he thought it would be to find them, and they were very receptive to his approach.

After a brief conversation, Ezerk knew he had come to the right place and quickly outlined what he wanted: A female companion of unique design, one that could provide him with both protection and comfort, while earning him renown from his peers. After three years of study and development, Kintara was the result. Created upon a fully mapped Devaronian genome with several genetic alterations, Kintara was grown from a fledgling fetus and into a fully developed, genetically programmed adult. When she was hatched from her tube, she had the basic knowledge of a young adult and the overwhelming desire to serve Ezerk at his every beck and call.

When she was introduced to his peers back home, Ezerk fabricated a story around her origins, claiming she was the result of a Falleen breeding with a Rancor, and that she was a legendary pit fighter wanted in nearly seven star systems. Though the lie was superfluous, her design and combat capabilities gave Ezerk the renown he desired, and soon his name was raised to the likes of even the highest noble houses, especially when she was put on for show in combat rings, both legal and otherwise. With his rise in fame, however, came a newfound ego; once it became so inflated, the originally kind Ezerk became cold and cruel, treating his creation as simply another plaything and severely punishing her for even the most minor of offenses. Kintara, despite her programming, eventually grew to hate her master.

Fortunately, in her third year of servitude to Master Ezerk, the Falleen fell into a bad crown deep within the underground. During a Spice-Deal gone wrong, Ezerk became mortally wounded by a blaster bolt to the belly, and in his last moments, gave Kintara the access codes to all of his belongings, including his massive fortune and custom starship that he won on a risky bet. Though to this day, Kintara suspects it was not given to her out of kindness or love, but out of spite against his heirs and competitors. No longer bound to servitude, Kintara used this opportunity to escape. With a new friend made in the robotic manservant Goron and some basic knowledge on how to fly her former Master's ship, Kintara fled the Outer Rim, seeking refuge and a new life deep within Republic territory...
 
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So, before I get into her history I'd love to know what people think of her general statistics and equipment. Please, fire away with constructive criticism, and I am looking to tie someone into her history that may have freed her from her former (and relatively cruel) master, as she was a slave. So let me know if anyone is interested.
 

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I like her, her profile is concise and informative, I feel compelled to RP with her, and you. As far as weaving her backstory in with another character's, it really depends on what your looking for. My character Emerald, green link in my sig, was a slave by birth, but she wasn't raised as one. During her early teenage years she returned to her homeworld Ryloth, attempting to locate her former masters and any trace of her birth mother, I have no doubt she would have stopped to take the time to free a slave if she could. Feel free to check her out, should she strike your fancy I'm open to editing Emerald's backstory to include that of your character's. Again, well done on Kintara, while I was disappointed to see she wasn't in fact a rancor, I was doubly impressed by the quality of your work so far.​
 

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I agree. Quite unique, well balanced character. Love the image as well :-)
 

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I agree too.
Except for the part where she is a Near-Human that could kill other human-like species with a punch (but "restrains" herself), lift 2 cars at the same time before straining herself, have bones close to unbreakable and being able to take physical punishment that would kill someone with just bruises.
Also, sometimes she has premonitions of the future thanks to the force.
All this with only not being competent on applicated science and knowing little of the universe.

The Character is great in itself, i just can't see a real weakness in it.
 

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I agree too.
Except for the part where she is a Near-Human that could kill other human-like species with a punch (but "restrains" herself), lift 2 cars at the same time before straining herself, have bones close to unbreakable and being able to take physical punishment that would kill someone with just bruises.
Also, sometimes she has premonitions of the future thanks to the force.
All this with only not being competent on applicated science and knowing little of the universe.

The Character is great in itself, i just can't see a real weakness in it.
This basically
A cool character and I like her, but she does seem to have some stats issues. Also, I'm not sure "Unknown Humanoid Species" is gonna fly.
 

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She kind of looks like a twilek/devaronian hybrud or offshoot - maybe she is the product of a kamino genetic splicing experiment ???
 

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She kind of looks like a twilek/devaronian hybrud or offshoot - maybe she is the product of a kamino genetic splicing experiment ???

The only reak difference between a Devaronian and her appearance is that she has horns as a female and doesn't have fur, if not she could very well pass as one.
 

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The only reak difference between a Devaronian and her appearance is that she has horns as a female and doesn't have fur, if not she could very well pass as one.
Could be something genetic - like those female peacocks that are born with male plumage. Not sure what it's called but male or female can be born with opposite gender attributes....i just really like the picture and am trying to justify it .....hm...could she be a theelin? They have horns and purple skin
 

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Neat character. I'm a big fan of the image especially.

Per the species, I might suggest the Iktotchi. They are naturally gifted with precognition, and they sport cranial horns across both genders (unlike Devaronians). I had a Darth earlier in the TL who was an Iktotchi - she's dead now tho :(

Per her strength stat, Olympic athletes can lift upwards of 300 kilograms - here's some material to back that - so I see no real issue with that. A punch that could kill a person though, that I agree is a tad over the top - at least for a straight punch anyway. Otherwise, I don't doubt that she could probably lay someone out with a good right hook.

As for someone in her backstory, my "Sith" (Mila in my sig - she recently left the Order though) was a slave herself and is an avid abolitionist. If you want to weave her into Kintara's background somehow, I'd be alright with that. Just let me know. Otherwise, I really like the looks of this character. Hope to write with her at some point.
 

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Well, why that's true, those are people that train all their life just for that and they can't keep up lifting tons for long times anyway,
This is a random species with the ability of naturally lifting Tons.
Also good luck training all your life on slave conditions, aka Malnutricion, extremely poor health conditions, and looking at the "cruel master" i can guess beatings too.
 

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Well, why that's true, those are people that train all their life just for that and they can't keep up lifting tons for long times anyway,
This is a random species with the ability of naturally lifting Tons.
Also good luck training all your life on slave conditions, aka Malnutricion, extremely poor health conditions, and looking at the "cruel master" i can guess beatings too.

Well, a couple things really:

1) I don't see anywhere on this profile where it says the character's strength is due to some arbitrary racial trait. In fact, the last sentence of the Strength category actually says "She has trained most of her life..." So I'm not sure where you're pulling this species trait idea from - other than by association with the moniker of "Unknown Humanoid Species" (which, while vague, still doesn't hint at any racial advantages).

2) Not all slaves are/were malnourished or suffer from poor health. In fact, by and large, Roman gladiators were often slaves, and most certainly not malnourished (for obvious reasons). Certainly they were socially marginalized and lived and trained under harsh conditions, but by virtue of their profession they were often in fair-excellent physical condition. But, that is a detail that has yet to be born out in the bio (by the authors own admission), so it is impossible to judge beforehand what conditions their character was raised under.
 

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@OhNoesBunnies You see what you have started ? ? ? XD

It started a pleasant conversation! With slightly aggressive tones, but nothing too bad.

Anyway, while i give to you the second point Gamov the first one is said here:
"Kintara is incredibly strong thanks to the high density of her organic tissue (Bones, muscles, and skin)."
 

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@Simonev I was going to say a very zealous, in depth discussion/debate - I wish I had people commenting on my characters like this XD
 

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If I came across as aggressive, then I do apologize. It was not my intention to appear as such. I just prefer to be as concise as possible when bringing any points or facts to light, so as to eliminate any possible confusion or misinterpretations. I dare say that if I were being rude or aggressive, you would know it. My vocabulary would be much, shall we say.... cruder. lol

At any rate, I think we've given @OhNoesBunnies quite a bit to chew through here as is. So I'll refrain from any further comments until we hear from her on the points raised thus far.
 

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Thanks for the feedback guys!

I'm chewing through it all now and I agree with a few points, it's why I asked for the criticism. I'll be making a few minor changes (nothing too drastic) to the punchiness and force-using stuff of her.

Sorry about her not being an actual rancor, haha.
 

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Okay! Changes made, her punches are capable of breaking the average human jaw (she doesn't hold back, but they're not lethal on their own, etc) and I reworded what I was trying to say about her force ability. It's more of a 'bad feeling' about things (which is what a premonition usually is) rather than outright visions of the future, hope that clears things up!

As for her question of strength and health being a slave, in her history she is going to be a prized Pit Fighter, which is why she's so large and able. As for her race? Star Wars is filled to the brim with unknown species that have no official names yet, so I went with that. I was partly inspired by Rig Nema whom has no official name for her species yet.
 

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Oop! Made some other changes as well to her intelligence, quick learner but she doesn't know too much. Explained a little more on what I meant by denoting her knowledge on mathematics and physics as 'simple'. It'll be included in her history that her master, though cruel, did care about her physical and mental health. He wanted the best Pit Fighter his money could make. Etc etc.
 
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