Kori

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Name: Kori
Faction: Jedi
Rank: Knight
Age: 18
Species: Mirialan
Hieght: 5'3
Gender: Female

Force Sensitive: Yes, Trained by Kol
Appearance: Being of about 5'3 and little thing at that but with a green skin tone to her. In her own eyes she looks like her mother did at her age but for the hair that she choose to dying with the color of red put in to the black mane of hers. Even then she couldn't help but with her own markings a cross her cheeks. Also she has a other tattooing that doesn't show she would keep those to her self the time being. For her weight what is this a lady will never tell her weight or age. *its already above*

ATTRIBUTES: Finding herself not only does she got the dexterity of her species but others strengthens as well. In them she will unlock each of them. Another of her strengths is being resourceful. As the day that she met Kol her mother formal lover, at the local bar she was working at. Being there for over two years she had pick up the ability to do different laugh ages.

Some of her disadvantage is sometimes she don't think things through and just reacts in the moment, causing more problems then anything else. Also that she not the best in her piloting skills. Even more so she isn't the best when it came to her ability to using the force to pull or push things towards or way from her. Having a temper at times that leaves her feeling in rage is another one of her faults. Even those she is still young she has always had this fault when it came to things growing up in the orphanage.


PERSONALITY: She a little rough around the edges when it comes to meeting new situation head on that is when some of her traits come out. Finding that with this in mind she has a way about her when she is around other people one could say she not very personal but others that she is around she is very loyal to. Having not known her mother she has her own way of looking at others.


BIOGRAPHY: Being raised in an orphans with others kids of her age and abilities. Some how she always found herself in trouble for the face that she had a high able to get into and out of tight places when she was growing up. This bring her to the fact the last time she got into trouble she ran away at the age of 14. This causing her to have some street smarts with some of the other children that ran away with her. Being smart with her wits she landed first doing dishes in a little bar, then she had that ability to work her way up to one of their bar maids. Even then she had a very shapely form that was when she learn the ability use it to get the tips that was needed. One things she didn't do like the others barmaids was to sell herself for some extra credits no matter how hard it seem times got.

This one night as she went about her business she saw a guy that seem to not fit in. Finding herself drawn to him in a way she didn't understand. Even when she did come up to get his drink, he stared at her as if he knew him. It was then discovered that he knew her mother and that a friendship was form and soon she was taken away from the life that she had for the past two years. This it soon told by Kol that she had the living force with in her that would be special training. That what they did finding themselves in different situation this always working on her force skills on mission.


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Marcus

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Ok, I have three main issues here, although I love this character concept. First, she's ready to join up and is found to be Force Sensitive, but you have her as a Knight? You either need to enter her as a Padawan (not required here by the way), or you need to edit her Bio and add pieces about how she got to Knighthood. This would also increase her age.

Second, The Bio is just a bit lacking in general? The last half is not filled out and just has the template bits left behind. I'd love to see more of this filled out before we move forward.

Third, I'm concerned that the "temper" as the main weakness may not be enough for you to write on. If that is your main focus, give us some context as to WHY that is a major weakness and what that looks like in her past.

Great start!
 
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