Mark Valus

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NAME: Mark Valus
FACTION: N/A
RANK: N/A
SPECIES: Human
AGE: 21
GENDER:
Male
FORCE SENSITIVE: Yes / Trained

APPEARANCE: eye color: brown Hight: 6 foot
Hair color: black and short almost looks shaved.
Skin color: Lightly tanned skin
Body type: skinny but built
Scares: one that under the right eye

ATTRIBUTES:
Strengths include: light saber combat / Force ability. not amazing but a well rounded force user that can handle his own with no lack in variety in the force. But does not always use this o his atvantage focusing on other things. His intellect he is able to read people and their intentions some of the time, and solve problems at fast paces. He is also very persuasive having a natural talent with people so he is trusted more often. Physical strength is average for most humans and reaction as well. But is faster than most though this is a result of his training by using the force to enhance this. His weaknesses include: poor judgement as in he has the right idea about things but goes about it the wrong way with his choices. His feeling and how he cares for others can be used against him as well in many cases.

PERSONALITY:
He is a easy going calm and collected person for the most part. But can can have mood swings depending on his situation. But he has a thirst for thrill and will seek it out recklessly for he is young and he wast to act the part. People say he is every easy to get along with and not one to not do what he said. He is very trusting and not one to give second chances very often. Although very easy going he is in a way nervous in a way without showing. He feels that if his best is not shown he lets others down. So in a way very picky about himself.

BIOGRAPHY: Mark was abandoned as a child left to probably die some where in the outer rim. This would have been the case if not some one had found him to Mark through his distress in the force. The person took him to Adumar a temprent forest planet out of the way of most conflict a peaceful place. this person would come to be a father figure some one he looked up to and loved. He would know him as The Wise Old Man This person raised him and and showed him how important life was. At the same time showed what the force was and how it bonded everything together in harmony. The old man then trained him to use the force which had led him to mark in the first place and showed that one should not try to dominate the light or the dark side but have balance between the two. Mark loved it he was always ready for his lessons and never hesitated to do as told by his mentor. As he reach 21 years of age his mentor was old and frail and mark did his best to aid him. The old man never talked a lot but the last thing he said to him was "I have tuaght you all I know there is nothing else for you here you must go and experience new things for yourself my son." Mark now cried as his mentor his father died in his hut. But he knew he was right he must move on and see the galaxy for himself. So he grabbed what he needed and now was ready to set out for whatever life had waiting for him./ Now he headed to a small town for off world transport thus finding a small cantina. Where he met a man named Roro and was about to see if he would give him transport.

SKILLS:
Mark is a skilled force user and lightsaber duelist having practiced all lightsaber forms so he does not only process one. As well as knowing force push, grip, lightning, and heal he uses his knowledge to see an opponents battle style and acomidates to this for an atvantage. But he has the flaws of that he is very less effective to more aggressive/offensive fighters. As well as others that meet him in his own ability in intellect as well as some one more fit it becomes a challenge for him to out smart some one as smart as he is. He also has trouble evening his force abilitys out mostly focused of enhancing his stamina and agility and not able to use other abilitys. So leaving himself vulnerable to certain force attacks

GEAR: Mark where's a gray/dark gray sort of robe with wrist protectors and basic boots. He also carries two lightsaber's one being his own purple in color and the other his master a blue one. Concealed of course in his clothing.
 
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Hey! Interesting character!
I would very much like to see a photo added, (or more detail written about his appearance) And more on his personality. You can technically get along with the minimum word count, but I really want to get a deeper feel for this character.

He's a bit overpowered. He doesn't have any in combat flaws. Every character will falter if you use their feelings against them, not just yours. Also, his skills are overpowered. You can't have, "he uses his knowledge to see an opponents battle style and acomidates to where he can set the tempo of the encounter." That is a big no-no.
Also, because he does not have a Sith backstory, please remove the force lightning.

Aaaand, that would be all~
 

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"some where in the outer rim"
um....can you tell us where?

also the open post you made. can you put details in it so if people want to reply they can. there isn't a lot of information on the first post and i didn't want to post OOC on that thread.
 

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I see both of your points he is just starting and I will look over him and adjust where it is needed that's really good help
 

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"some where in the outer rim"
um....can you tell us where?

also the open post you made. can you put details in it so if people want to reply they can. there isn't a lot of information on the first post and i didn't want to post OOC on that thread.
Yea I didn't do it would leave it open for lots of ideas
 

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Yea I didn't do it would leave it open for lots of ideas
that's nice and all but being vague makes it seem like you haven't developed the character or thought it out. The moment that you define it in a single place then you have to set it up everywhere else as being fact. so like in your open thread. if i pop into it and because you didn't say what planet it was and i make the decision for you that makes that the planet he has been on whether you like it or not.

People will adapt to your character's circumstances and backstory to rp with you. go ahead and define where and when things are. don't be afraid to go into detail. otherwise people will also go in the opposite direction and not want to rp with a character that lacks defining information. My character Donar for instance could have gone to any university in the galaxy to become a doctor. but after looking at some related characters i saw that other doctor charas went to university of Coruscant and so picked there. did it limit my roleplaying ability? no in fact i feel it helped even more.
 

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that's nice and all but being vague makes it seem like you haven't developed the character or thought it out. The moment that you define it in a single place then you have to set it up everywhere else as being fact. so like in your open thread. if i pop into it and because you didn't say what planet it was and i make the decision for you that makes that the planet he has been on whether you like it or not.

People will adapt to your character's circumstances and backstory to rp with you. go ahead and define where and when things are. don't be afraid to go into detail. otherwise people will also go in the opposite direction and not want to rp with a character that lacks defining information. My character Donar for instance could have gone to any university in the galaxy to become a doctor. but after looking at some related characters i saw that other doctor charas went to university of Coruscant and so picked there. did it limit my roleplaying ability? no in fact i feel it helped even more.
Oh wow! You know that does make a lot of sense I can see the advantage of this
 

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that's nice and all but being vague makes it seem like you haven't developed the character or thought it out. The moment that you define it in a single place then you have to set it up everywhere else as being fact. so like in your open thread. if i pop into it and because you didn't say what planet it was and i make the decision for you that makes that the planet he has been on whether you like it or not.

People will adapt to your character's circumstances and backstory to rp with you. go ahead and define where and when things are. don't be afraid to go into detail. otherwise people will also go in the opposite direction and not want to rp with a character that lacks defining information. My character Donar for instance could have gone to any university in the galaxy to become a doctor. but after looking at some related characters i saw that other doctor charas went to university of Coruscant and so picked there. did it limit my roleplaying ability? no in fact i feel it helped even more.
You're assuming people even read the character sheets of people they RP with.
 

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You're assuming people even read the character sheets of people they RP with.
I can dream can't I

<<< this skilled-scrub has lucid dreams so it's not really fair.

I also know i always sometimes usually do.
 
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