My Person to RP with(Not first ever but first on this site

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NAME: Jessie to his friends and family shipmates etc, but to others it's The dragon
FACTION: He does not have a faction for he is just a wanderer looking for a side
RANK: Outlaw/Assassin
SPECIES: Human
AGE: 29
GENDER: Male
FORCE SENSITIVE: Trained

APPEARANCE:
He has White hair, Sky blue eyes and a Muscular body. He has a triple scar over his right eye which is fogged over and a single Red Light saber

ATTRIBUTES:
First off His right eye is fogged so he can not see out of it but sense he is trained in the force he can see via force. Due to his morals he will never hurt or kill women or children no matter what. He cares to much and despite being Sith he will help people in need when he can do to his morals. He loves to fight but he and will be the first with his Light Saber out in hand. In his early Life he was exposed to Dangers chems and due to this he has a slight Breathing problem. His friends are only there for his gain as he has learned to never trust or grow a connection with Love or not with anyone.

PERSONALITY:
He has two sides a good and bad. His good Side Is him being Thoughtful and caring and he helps who he can when he can. But on his bad side is a rage-inducing who will do everything he can to kill and at this point very heard to calm not but not impossible. He is willing to do what he can to help friends and save them if the need is that great But he will kill them if they serve him no use.

BIOGRAPHY:
He was a simple farm boy born on the lower end of Ryloth being only of the only humans on the Planet which in this He learned His first Tongue Huttees (I think that's how you spell it) At the age of five a strange man in dark robes which covered his face came in peace and wanted a place for the night and got to know the family well, But late in the night two Jedi in there brown robes came to take away the man in the Black robes away for Justice.Soon the Man in dark pulled out a red Lightsaber and fought the two Jedi killing them...The Dad died due to a piller of the house Falling down and the mother was so scared she hid not to be seen the Boy however looked at the two dead jedi and then the man in dark. The man in dark then said he was a sith and the Jedi were tracking him for doing what he thought was right and after a short talk and a big choice The Boy named Jessie went with him and spent years training on many different planets learning many things from the man who he never really got the name of. He is sent on a mission as his final test which was to kill a Jedi master he passes this test after a long fight but comes back to a destroyed home and his dead master along with three dead Jedi masters and eight troopers. He travels to this day teaching himself new things and finds many things to help him along his way only taking what he needs.

SKILLS:
He is skilled in LightSaber Combat using his own style made of a mix of brute force and mobility, and due to many different friends and places in training he is Multilingual and is a tech expert and is one of the better Pilots but can be bested but some. He has years of Lightsaber and force training but he always liked fired the best so he tends to use a lot of Fire force ability. He can create fire in the palm of his hands and use it at will.

GEAR:
Two Red lightsabers one smaller then the other but he only uses one for a fight and the other for anything else he needs something cut and a mix of Sith robes and mandalorian armor

ROLE-PLAYS:
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SHIP:

He has a repainted Old Acclamator class star destroyer named "Trident" most of It is outdated and due to always being on the move he uses more as a command center more then a support ship and as a Personal Fighter He has a modified ARC-170 which he uses manly and a way to get away but the fighter does have Hyperdrive and shielded which can stand some fire for other fighters and up to a few good blast from capital ships which is named "Tomahawk"

DROIDS:
An old Rusted HK-50 Assassin droid which can do many other things then kill he can do labor make simple but effective strategies and is One of the Only things Jessie Truly Trusts
 

Stratus

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Hi @Cdestroyer

Just from a quick skim read of your Character Profile, I have noticed a couple of things:

You listed an Old Acclamator Assault Ship and a modified ARC-170. Both of these ships were not developed until the Clone Wars in 22-19 BBY and the current timeline on this site takes place roughly a millennia (1000 years) before the events of The Phantom Menace. I would recommend taking a look at the Tech Compendium to find a ship that would suit your needs.

SHIP:
He has a repainted Old Acclamator class star destroyer named "Trident" most of It is outdated and due to always being on the move he uses more as a command center more then a support ship and as a Personal Fighter He has a modified ARC-170 which he uses manly and a way to get away but the fighter does have Hyperdrive and shielded which can stand some fire for other fighters and up to a few good blast from capital ships which is named "Tomahawk"

The fire force thing (Pyrokinesis), while it is allowed, "Might be risky in a pvp setting but should be viable". I would say to check with the Guide to Force Powers first, though, just to be sure on other aspects of the force he may use.

he always liked fired the best so he tends to use a lot of Fire force ability. He can create fire in the palm of his hands and use it at will.

You might want to consult with the Sith FL @Malon or the AFL @Vinny on that backstory, and then once they're OK with it you can go ahead and apply for the Sith Faction.

Those are just a couple of things I noticed after a quick skim, though. I'm sure others (@Zenya) will pick up on other things.

~SG
 
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Sscorpiun

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That's a lot of dead Jedi masters in this character's biography... I feel like if this character was linked to that many master's deaths he'd be a main priority target for the Jedi. Also, why does Jessie have Mandalorian armour? Just wondering. And yeah the ships are out of sync with the timeline.
 

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Force Pyrokinesis is also exclusive to Sith Inquisitors, Priestesses and Templars.
 

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Hey @Cdestroyer!

I am going to let our fantastic Sith Leadership team (@Malon, @Vinny, and @Intratec) and lovely character profile mod (@Zenya) handle most of the review. However, this is one part for the Jedi side that needs to be changed. You need to take out the deaths of 4 Jedi Masters. The two Jedi at the beginning are fine, and the 8 troopers. Killing 4 Jedi Masters is excessive. Those are my only comments regarding the Jedi.
 

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Is it? I thought it was limited to the Sith of those ranks, my bad.
 

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That's a lot of dead Jedi masters in this character's biography... I feel like if this character was linked to that many master's deaths he'd be a main priority target for the Jedi. Also, why does Jessie have Mandalorian armour? Just wondering. And yeah the ships are out of sync with the timeline.
First off when I made the Bio I did not realize the RP was in the Old republic era
Next He is a target there why he is always on the move and the reason he has mandalorian armor is because he went to mandalore for a time during his training
 

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If I remember star wars Lore right Mandalore is corrupted and could be a good source of combat training due to the sith having mandalorion friends

Actually, in this timeline, Mandalorians have usually been enemies of the Sith, now especially after the Sith Attacks and the growing border feuds between them and the Mandalorian Dominion. @Prudence or @Kori Buor would probably know better though.
 

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Mandalorians are definitely not allies with the Sith right now. They have been in the past, but that has been many many years. You would be shot on sight if you came to Mandalore—it is also not a barren wasteland, it's quite luscious and alive.

--also since no one has commented on it, typically people name the title of their thread with the name of their character (as opposed to "My Person to RP with"). Not saying you have to change it, but just stating what's the common practice here :)
 

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Mandalorians are definitely not allies with the Sith right now. They have been in the past, but that has been many many years. You would be shot on sight if you came to Mandalore—it is also not a barren wasteland, it's quite luscious and alive.

--also since no one has commented on it, typically people name the title of their thread with the name of their character (as opposed to "My Person to RP with"). Not saying you have to change it, but just stating what's the common practice here :)
We're all a bunch of people that have issues adapting to new ways of making profiles JK.
 
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