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View attachment 5169 STANDARD TALES OF JEDI AND EXILES WOULD DICTATE THAT THEY ARE TAKEN AS CHILDREN. SOME WERE ONCE SLAVES LIBERATED BY A JEDI KNIGHT OR MASTER SENSING THEIR INTENSE, RAW POWER THAT COULD BE HONED INTO SOMETHING GREAT. SOME RECEIVED EXTRAORDINARY TALES OF LOST PASTS OR EPIC BEGINNINGS, AND SOME WOULD RECEIVE FROM LIFE A SORT OF STANDARD-ISSUE TALE OF UPBRINGING. FOR OSYNA, HER STORY IS WITH THOSE WHO WERE ONCE SLAVES, AND WAS FOUND WITH POWER THAT WOULD QUALIFY HER FOR THE RANKS OF THE JEDI - AT LEAST FOR A SMALL WHILE.
THIS SPECIFIC INSTANCE IS ONE OF INTRIGUE, AND DEMANDS ATTENTION BE PAID TO IT. SHE PICKED HER LIGHTSABER CRYSTAL AS ANY OTHER WOULD, AND WAS EXCITED ABOUT IT. THERE WAS AN IMMEDIATE CONNECTION. BUT, ALMOST IN AN IRONIC FASHION, SHE SLIPPED AN FELL IN THE CAVE UPON HER ASCENT FROM IT, AND THE CRYSTAL FELL DOWN A SHORT SHAFT LEADING A LEVEL DOWN. DISTRAUGHT, SHE REACHED OUT WITH THE FORCE AND MANAGED TO PULL IT THROUGH THE OPENING IT WENT IN, AND KEPT IT WITH HER. THE RESULT; A CRACKED CRYSTAL, THOUGH UNINTENTIONAL.
HER STRENGTHS ARE MENTAL; A STRONG INTELLECT AND A NEWFOUND WISDOM GIVEN BY EXPERIENCE. SHE HAS A STRONG SPIRIT AND A DEEP CONNECTION TO THE FORCE THAT MOVES HER PASSIONATELY. IF SHE LETS ANYONE IN HER LIFE, SHE HAS STRONG COMPASSION FOR THEM. SHE IS NOT EMOTIONAL, HOWEVER, AND CAN BE SEEN AS COLD AND HEARTLESS.
SHE IS QUICK, BUT THAT IS PROBABLY ONE OF HER ONLY ADVANTAGES PHYSICALLY, BUT THAT DOESN'T MEAN TOO MUCH SINCE SHE IS NOT NATURALLY MARTIAL OR STRONG. HER ATHLETICISM ONLY EXISTS BECAUSE IT HELPS HER STAY IN SHAPE, DISCIPLINES HER, AND SHARPENS HER MIND. WHEN SHE OPENS UP TO SOMEONE AND EXPOSES HER EMOTIONS, SHE IS ATTACHED TO THAT PERSON FOR LIFE UNLESS DEEPLY WOUNDED BY THEM, AND EVEN THEN, SHE STILL GRAVITATES TOWARD THEM. ALL-IN-ALL, SHE IS AN IDEAL SAGE AND FORCE ADEPT, AN AVERAGE COMBATANT, AND A HORRIBLE PEOPLE-PERSON.
Osyna
Human
24
Female
Jedi (hopeful)
Consular (hopeful)
Force adept
Gear;
Armor, crossguard lightsaber (green)
Lightsaber Form;
Form II; Makashi
So, this is the character I'm thinking of making. She's a Jedi knight whom I have high hopes for, and I would like feedback on her; yes or now or maybe so. I also want to have the first image float to the left and have the text just start at the top to the right of it, and I kinda want the same for the character info with the picture above that one too, but alas I do not know how to code that in :/
So help would be appreciated, and what do you guys think?
CONSIDER THIS CASE AND DETERMINE FOR YOURSELVES IF SHE SHOULD BE TREATED AS THE EXILES ARE; OSYNA HAS NO LAST NAME. FROM OUR FINDINGS, HER NAME IS A ROUGH TRANSLATION OF AN OBSCURE LANGUAGE, AND IT MEANS "LITTLE ONE." DON'T BE MISTAKEN; THIS WAS NOT A TITLE OF ENDEARMENT. SHE WAS CONSIDERED SMALL IN STATURE, AND WAS TREATED EVEN AS IF SHE WERE SUB-HUMAN BY MANY OF THE FRIENDS OF HER SLAVE MASTERS. OF COURSE, AS ONE COULD PREDICT, THIS WAS A DIFFICULT CHILDHOOD, AND LED TO TRUST ISSUES WITH PEOPLE IN AUTHORITY OVER HER AS SHE GREW UP AFTER BEING FOUND BY THE JEDI.
BUT LET US VISIT THAT {PARTICULAR} INSTANCE OF WHEN SHE WAS DISCOVERED - SHE WAS A YOUNG HUMAN GIRL, ABLE TO TALK AND WORK. THIS ROUGHLY PUT HER AT SEVEN OR EIGHT YEARS OF AGE. SHE HAD BEEN BORN INTO SLAVERY TO A MOTHER TAKEN ADVANTAGE OF BY HER SLAVE OWNER, WHO ALSO HAD NOT SURVIVED BIRTH. SHE WAS THEN SOLD AT A YOUNG PRICE TO ANOTHER SLAVE OWNER FOR A DECENT SUM, BUT LEFT HER WITH THE NAME "OSYNA." SHE GREW UP WITH A HANDFUL OF OTHER SLAVES THAT SHE RARELY INTERACTED WITH, AND WAS MISTREATED AT THE HANDS OF HER OWNER AND HIS FRIENDS.
OF COURSE, SHE DIDN'T UNDERSTAND THAT SHE WAS MISTREATED. SHE ASSUMED HER LIFE WAS AS NORMAL AS IT COULD GET FOR A SLAVE GIRL. SHE KNEW OF OTHER WORLDS, BUT WAS BARELY TAUGHT TO SPEAK AND READ BASIC. HER PHYSICAL APPEARANCE WAS THIN AND FRAIL, BARELY ABLE TO PERFORM THE TASKS DEMANDED OF HER. SHE HAD DARK HAIR AND DARK EYES, BUT PALE SKIN.
NOW, HER FORCE SIGNATURE WASN'T THAT UNLIKE MANY OTHERS, AND IN ALL HONESTY, THERE WAS HESITATION IN TAKING HER BECAUSE OF HER PHYSICAL APPEARANCE - IT WASN'T CERTAIN IF SHE WOULD SURVIVE FOR LONG. THE MASTER SENT TO INVESTIGATE, HOWEVER, BELIEVED CORRECTLY SHE WOULD BE DO WELL IN THE ORDER AND WOULD NURSE THE THE FULL HEALTH SHE WAS NEVER ABLE TO EXPERIENCE. THIS WAS ALL CORRECT, AS WAS THEIR PREDICTION THAT SHE WOULD TRAIN WELL WITH THE JEDI.
SO HER TRAINING BEGAN. SHE STUDIED THE FORCE IN ITS DEEPEST LORE AND HER EVER CURIOUS MIND CONSUMED EVERY PIECE OF KNOWLEDGE GIVEN TO HER IN RETAINED IT. SHE WAS BRILLIANT, AND THAT MADE UP FOR HER LACKING IN PHYSICAL PROWESS. SHE WAS NEVER VERY STRONG. SHE WAS ATHLETIC, AND WAS QUICK, BUT HER STRENGTHS WERE MENTAL MORE THAN PHYSICAL. REMOVE HER LIGHTSABER AND HER ACCESS TO THE FORCE, AND SHE COULD BE OVERPOWERED IF ONE WERE PROFICIENT IN MARTIAL ARTS. SHE RELIED ON HER WIT TO THRIVE.
AS SHE PROGRESSED IN HER TRAINING AND RELATIONSHIPS, SHE FELT THE FORCE DIRECTING HER TO INCREASE IN HER KNOWLEDGE AND POWER IN THE FORCE, LEAVING HER PHYSICAL AND MARTIAL CAPABILITIES AS SECONDARY. THIS ISN'T TO SAY THAT SHE CAN'T DEFEND HERSELF OR HANDLE HER LIGHTSABER, BUT THAT SHE IS LESS INCLINED TO DO SO AND FOCUSES MUCH LESS ON FIGHTING AND MORE ON HER STUDIES. SHE QUICKLY ENTERED THE CLASS ROLE OF JEDI CONSULAR, AND CONSTRUCTED HER OWN LIGHTSABER.SO HER TRAINING BEGAN. SHE STUDIED THE FORCE IN ITS DEEPEST LORE AND HER EVER CURIOUS MIND CONSUMED EVERY PIECE OF KNOWLEDGE GIVEN TO HER IN RETAINED IT. SHE WAS BRILLIANT, AND THAT MADE UP FOR HER LACKING IN PHYSICAL PROWESS. SHE WAS NEVER VERY STRONG. SHE WAS ATHLETIC, AND WAS QUICK, BUT HER STRENGTHS WERE MENTAL MORE THAN PHYSICAL. REMOVE HER LIGHTSABER AND HER ACCESS TO THE FORCE, AND SHE COULD BE OVERPOWERED IF ONE WERE PROFICIENT IN MARTIAL ARTS. SHE RELIED ON HER WIT TO THRIVE.
THIS SPECIFIC INSTANCE IS ONE OF INTRIGUE, AND DEMANDS ATTENTION BE PAID TO IT. SHE PICKED HER LIGHTSABER CRYSTAL AS ANY OTHER WOULD, AND WAS EXCITED ABOUT IT. THERE WAS AN IMMEDIATE CONNECTION. BUT, ALMOST IN AN IRONIC FASHION, SHE SLIPPED AN FELL IN THE CAVE UPON HER ASCENT FROM IT, AND THE CRYSTAL FELL DOWN A SHORT SHAFT LEADING A LEVEL DOWN. DISTRAUGHT, SHE REACHED OUT WITH THE FORCE AND MANAGED TO PULL IT THROUGH THE OPENING IT WENT IN, AND KEPT IT WITH HER. THE RESULT; A CRACKED CRYSTAL, THOUGH UNINTENTIONAL.
SHE WOULD USE IT, HOWEVER, AND CONSTRUCT A UNIQUE LIGHTSABER AROUND IT; A CROSSGUARD LIGHTSABER. IT EMITTED A CRACKLING UNSTABLE BLADE EXTENDING AROUND THREE-AND-A-HALF TO FOUR FEET, AND TWO QUILLONS PROTRUDING FROM THE SIDES WHERE THE PRIMARY BLADE WAS. THE BEAM THAT WAS DISPLAYED WAS A BRIGHT GREEN COLOR, FITTING FOR HER THIRST FOR KNOWLEDGE AND PROFOUND WISDOM. SHE CHERISHED THE CRYSTAL AND THE SABER.
HER KNIGHTING WOULD PROCEED AS NORMAL, BUT WHAT WOULDN'T WAS HER LIFE AFTERWARDS AS A JEDI KNIGHT. SHE SOUGHT KNOWLEDGE, TYPICAL OF CONSULARS, BUT WOULD ALSO ATTEMPT TO DISCERN THE THOUGHTS AND MOTIVATIONS OF THE EXILES FROM THE CIVIL WAR AND THEIR DESIRE FOR THE DARK SIDE. THIS WOULD TEMPT HER AND TWIST HER THINKING THE MORE SHE INDULGED, DESPITE THE WARNINGS OF HER MASTERS. EVENTUALLY, SHE ABANDONED THE ORDER IN SEARCH OF POWER AND KNOWLEDGE BEYOND THAT WHICH THE JEDI OFFERED. THIS WAS A CHOICE SHE WOULD, AS I PRESENT TO YOU NOW, REGRET THE REST OF HER LIFE.
SHE ASSUMED A MANTLE OF BOTH DARK AND LIGHT IN HER TIME AWAY FROM THE ORDER IN THE PURSUIT OF KNOWLEDGE, BUT WOULD BE CONSUMED BY DARKNESS. SHE WAS FORTUNATE ENOUGH TO HAVE BEEN SPARED FROM THE HERESIES OF THE EXILES, BUT SHE DID PERFORM DEEDS IN RESEARCH OF THE DARK SIDE AND THE POWERS IT HELD. SHE DISCOVERED TWISTED FORMS OF POWER THAT OFFERED HER DOMINANCE OVER HER MASTERS, AND IMMEDIATELY SPOKE TO HER STOLEN CHILDHOOD, WHICH SHE HAD UNRESOLVED BITTERNESS ABOUT. IT MANIPULATED THIS WEAKNESS AND TURNED IT INTO A MAJOR DISADVANTAGE.
SHE BECAME ANGRY TOO FAST, AND ALLOWED HER PAST TO TURN HER VIOLENT. SHE WOULD PREY ON THE WEAK, AND DURING THOSE DARK TIMES, SHE WOULD FEED OFF THE FEAR SHE CAUSED THEM. THIS DIDN'T ALWAYS WORK, THOUGH. SOMETIMES SHE WOULD ENCOUNTER SOME WHO WEREN'T AFRAID OF HER, AND COULD DEFEND AGAINST HER. IN RESPONSE, SHE OFTEN FLED FROM THEM.
SHE BECAME ANGRY TOO FAST, AND ALLOWED HER PAST TO TURN HER VIOLENT. SHE WOULD PREY ON THE WEAK, AND DURING THOSE DARK TIMES, SHE WOULD FEED OFF THE FEAR SHE CAUSED THEM. THIS DIDN'T ALWAYS WORK, THOUGH. SOMETIMES SHE WOULD ENCOUNTER SOME WHO WEREN'T AFRAID OF HER, AND COULD DEFEND AGAINST HER. IN RESPONSE, SHE OFTEN FLED FROM THEM.
THE POINT THAT BROUGHT HER BACK TO HER SENSES WAS WHEN SHE FOUND HER SLAVE MASTER. IT WAS AT ONE POINT IN TIME, A YEAR AFTER HER DEPARTURE FROM THE ORDER, THAT SHE LET HER BITTERNESS OVERTAKE HER AND GIVE HER A DESIRE TO KILL HER FORMER SLAVE MASTER. IT WENT AGAINST EVERYTHING THE KNEW AND BELIEVED AS A JEDI, BUT SHE HAD NOTHING BUT HATRED IN HER HEART FOR HIM AND HIS FRIENDS, SO SHE SET OUT TO FIND HIM. FIND HIM, SHE DID. NOT JUST HIM, BUT HIS FRIENDS AS WELL.
THEY DIDN'T RECOGNIZE HER AT FIRST, BUT WHEN HER MASTER DID, SHE CHOKED HIM WITH THE FORCE, AND CUT DOWN HIS FRIENDS WITH HER LIGHTSABER, WHICH WAS YELLOW AT THE TIME. THE COLOR IS IMPORTANT; ITS THE LAST STEP BEFORE IT BECOMES RED FROM GREEN. THANKFULLY, THOUGH, SHE WAS RESCUED BEFORE THEN. IN THIS INSTANCE, HOWEVER, SHE WAS CONSUMED WITH THE DARK SIDE OF THE FORCE, AND WHEN SHE REALIZED IT, SHE STOPPED HERSELF.
NOW, AS I PRESENT YOU WITH THIS PARTICULAR CASE, I EMPLOY YOU TO EXAMINE THE EVIDENCE AND SEE FOR YOURSELF THE RETURN OF HER DEEP CONVICTION. HER LIGHTSABER HAS EVEN RETURNED TO GREEN, AND SHE HAS WEPT IN THE INTERVIEW I HAD WITH HER AS SHE DESCRIBED THE EVENTS HERSELF. SHE'LL NEED COUNSELING FROM A MASTER IN THE DANGERS OF THE DARK SIDE AND HER EVER-CURIOUS MIND, BUT I PROPOSE THAT SHE BE ACCEPTED BACK, NOT REJECTED LIKE THE EXILES. SHE IS A REPENTANT SOUL, AND HER MENTAL CAPABILITIES COULD PROVE QUITE USEFUL ONCE FULLY TRAINED AND COUNSELED.
ALSO FOR CONSIDERATION, I WOULD PRESENT YOU WITH THESE FEW DETAILS ABOUT HER THAT WE SHOULD BE AWARE OF; SHE IS VERY INTROVERTED AND TIMID, AND DOE NOT ENGAGE MUCH SOCIALLY. SHE KEEPS TO HER STUDIES AS A PROPER SAGE, BUT HAS BEEN KNOWN OFTEN TO REFUSE INTERACTION AND SOCIAL SETTINGS. SHE IS NOT A FIGHTER, THOUGH SHE IS SKILLED IN FORM II; MAKASHI, AS PER HER LIGHTSABER TYPE. SHE ALSO IS NOT THE STRONGEST PHYSICALLY.
HER STRENGTHS ARE MENTAL; A STRONG INTELLECT AND A NEWFOUND WISDOM GIVEN BY EXPERIENCE. SHE HAS A STRONG SPIRIT AND A DEEP CONNECTION TO THE FORCE THAT MOVES HER PASSIONATELY. IF SHE LETS ANYONE IN HER LIFE, SHE HAS STRONG COMPASSION FOR THEM. SHE IS NOT EMOTIONAL, HOWEVER, AND CAN BE SEEN AS COLD AND HEARTLESS.
SHE IS QUICK, BUT THAT IS PROBABLY ONE OF HER ONLY ADVANTAGES PHYSICALLY, BUT THAT DOESN'T MEAN TOO MUCH SINCE SHE IS NOT NATURALLY MARTIAL OR STRONG. HER ATHLETICISM ONLY EXISTS BECAUSE IT HELPS HER STAY IN SHAPE, DISCIPLINES HER, AND SHARPENS HER MIND. WHEN SHE OPENS UP TO SOMEONE AND EXPOSES HER EMOTIONS, SHE IS ATTACHED TO THAT PERSON FOR LIFE UNLESS DEEPLY WOUNDED BY THEM, AND EVEN THEN, SHE STILL GRAVITATES TOWARD THEM. ALL-IN-ALL, SHE IS AN IDEAL SAGE AND FORCE ADEPT, AN AVERAGE COMBATANT, AND A HORRIBLE PEOPLE-PERSON.
Osyna
Human
24
Female
Jedi (hopeful)
Consular (hopeful)
Force adept
Gear;
Armor, crossguard lightsaber (green)
Lightsaber Form;
Form II; Makashi
So help would be appreciated, and what do you guys think?