Saras Valga

[TotallyMe]

NAME: Saras Valga
FACTION: None
RANK: None
SPECIES: Human
AGE: 19
GENDER: Female
HEIGHT: About Average to her Age
WEIGHT: Average
FORCE SENSITIVE: Yes

APPEARANCE:
She has long black hair, dripping down her back to her waist. She has white skin with sharp green eyes. She appears quite young and alive. Her nails on her fingertips are larger than usual. She is average in height and average in weight.

ATTRIBUTES:
Strength: Low. She can't throw a punch that would hurt someone. She is weak in raw strength.
Dexterity: Low. She cannot run for her life. Her ability to move, slide and jump is scoffed at.
Constitution: Average: She is as average as anyone can get when it comes to health. She isn't good or bad in terms of health.
Intelligence: Average: She can read and apply logic, but she is no better than the Average person.
Wisdom: Average: She knows as much about someone as the average man knows about her.
Charisma: High: Her ability to influence the actions of others is great, But words can only do so much.

Traits: P=Positive N=Negative

Charismatic: (P): Words from this woman can turn the tide in many arguements, and many are influenced by her.

Inferior in Melee Combat: (N) In Melee she suffers from being absolutely terrible in defending herself in close quarters, let alone landing a punch. This is a major Negative as anyone who comes close can decimate her.

PERSONALITY:
She is quite impulsive and demanding, but determined. She also sees people as 'Tools' Rather than people and dosn't care for loss of life. She is also on a short fuse, and unforgiving, but she can hide her emotions really well with her charisma, and seem beautiful. She is ambitious and disloyal to most people. She believes that aliens are bellow her and that she is the greatest living thing in the universe, but she does intend to use opportunity. She enjoys blood and learning and is quite inquisitive.

She loves to make people suffer and to betray people. She treats people who follow her with respect and respects people who's power is greater than hers. She is strong in her opinions and she always thinks before she speaks. She is crafty and tries to mold words. She is weak (Physically) but never admits it. She is also quite slippery and is sometimes described by those who know who she really is as a snake. But she does respect those who have helped her thoroughly for what she needed and is quite loyal to them.

BIOGRAPHY:
Saras was born on Coruscant to a very wealthy family and lived a life spoilt and always wanting more. Her parents seemed to always obey her commands as if 'put in a trance' She was given what she wanted and always had her way. She was an only child when her dad passed away from a shooting by terrorists. Her mother was very anti alien and approved of Slavery practices and Saras did to. When she was 16 she discovered what was happening in her body when she was enraged at her mom and killed her. There were police sent to investigate but she ran for her life.

There is only one place where someone on the run could go, the Coruscant underground. She fled there and settled in a bar. A man came up to her and started trying to aggravate her. It worked and she let out a burst of the force damaging everyone around her. Her anger got the better of her and she was now on the run from criminals as well as Law enforcement. When she fled the bar Law Enforcement cuffed her hands. She tried releasing her power but it didn't work. She was sent on a prison ship to be transported to a prison.

On that ship a crash could be heard 36 minutes into the flight, followed by alarms. The ship was being border by someone, but Saras didn't care, somehow the doors opened and she fled to the escape pods, amidst the confusion she managed to make it to the pods and escaped. She now lurks in Coruscant's underground, hunted by the police.

Though in the slums of Coruscant, she searched for someone who could help her with her powers. A young man was found and not knowing who he was apart from the fact that he knew about her powers and how to control them. When she turned 19 she was told by him that there was nothing else he could teach her, she thanked him and set off. No one knows where she is now.

SKILLS:
Persuasion
Deception
Bargaining
Force Specialization: Mental Manipulation and influence.

GEAR:
Black Robes, Pouch, 100 Credits,

ROLE-PLAYS:
Of Shades of Grey: http://www.thestarwarsrp.com/forum/index.php?threads/shades-of-grey.87792/


RELATIONSHIPS:
None

SHIP:
None

DOIDS:
None

PETS:
None

KILLS:
None

COMBAT:
None

 

[The Good Doctor]

Hello there, welcome again to the boards! This isn't an official review and this is just player feedback.

Alright, so you might want to tone-down how charismatic your person is. While stats are mostly flavour and fluff in a character sheet, you might be in for a big surprise when either the dice doesn't go your way or a DMed-NPC doesn't find her enticing. But yeah, not a lot of people be enthralled "Into doing a task or convince them of nearly anything" unless they are extremely weak-minded and/or your character is more powerful. I can see maybe your person having some sort of charm to them, but she wouldn't be able to have that much control over people as described.

Also, keep in mind starting characters (Level 1s) have their powers gated by their levels. Once you level up, your character grows in power. Until then your character would be on par with other level 1s in terms of force usage.

I'm not seeing where in your bio where your character got trained on how to use the force, yet would know all the other stuff she is listed as knowing (lightning wouldn't be very easy to learn I'd imagine, would be harder to use than basic telekinesis). Can you shed some light on that

Also a friendly tip. we usually we recommend against listing specific force powers and/or putting them on a scale (it's sort of unneeded when we already have the level system.) Force powers are free-form (with-in reason and the rules of course) Here is the link to the Force rules as well.

And force powers that aren't in canon need a lore to be submitted and approved before it can be used. 'Force Corruption' as listed for example would fall under that.

Hope this helps!

 

[TotallyMe]

Alright, I have taken this advice on board, it's edited

 

[Dread]

You'll need to remove the "Major Sensitivity" part; on this site power is measured by level, with the caveat that a character attained proper training. Also please either remove the Notable Force Powers section or select canon powers or powers listed in our lore section.

While it's fine to write that your character is charismatic, the way it's worded seems a bit over the top. I would feel more comfortable if you tamed it down, a lot. Even if you do though I'm afraid that stating it will not do you any favors in the role-play. Most people will not let their character be swayed just because it's in your character's profile. Your character will actually have to be convincing and you may find that tougher than you think it is. However, personally, I'd leave in that she had sway over her parents. Maybe they're the type to spoil their kids too much, which lead to her poor behavior.

 

[TotallyMe]

Done @Dread

 

[Dread]

It looks like you missed the Notable Force Powers part of my above request.

There's no such thing as "Force Anger", and writing that it has "random affects" does not follow our protocol on fanon site powers. If you want to make a fanon power you're free to do so, but it needs to be done in the Lore section following the Lore Rules and has to be approved before you can add it to your characters profile. There is such thing as Force Rage, though technically it is neither a canon nor site ability and it has specific effects. It would also greatly drain a level 1 after each episode.

"Force Corruption" is also not a canon or site fanon Force power and even in legends it had nothing to do with physically eating or drinking. However, something or someone can be corrupted by the Dark Side of the Force. By using the Dark Side a person becomes corrupted. You cannot force it on other players here, but you can freely corrupt as many kyber crystals as you want by simply using them or preforming a ritual. Cataclysmic events, Dark Side relics, Sith temples, etc can corrupt people (if they succumb to the Dark Sides temptation) and land. Entire planets or sites can also be naturally attuned to the Dark Side.

Lastly, her ability to influence still needs to be tamed down. She wouldn't be on par with the best in the galaxy. You're suggesting her charisma is tied to her power in the Force and her natural skill, correct? Both of which should be on par with a level 1. If you're confused with how our level system works please read the Level System thread in the Rules & Guidelines forum.

 

[TotallyMe]

Thanks for sticking by @Dread being my first character I wasn’t sure how to put it or how to make it a fair character, thanks for the help!

 

[Dread]

One last thing, remove "healing" as a specialization. There's no Dark Side healing that I'm aware of in canon. But since that's a minor thing, and assuming you'll do that, I'll give you the stamp. APPROVED

 

[TotallyMe]

Done and done! Thanks @Dread