Scouts Wen Cofoer

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Scouts Wen Cofoer



NAME: Scouts Wen Cofoer
FACTION: Jedi
RANK: Jedi Padawan
SPECIES: Human
AGE: 14
GENDER: Male
HEIGHT: 170 cm
WEIGHT: 65kg
EYES: Very light hazel
HAIR: Jet black
SKIN: Light olive skin
CREDITS: 1,000
DISTINGUISHING MARKS: He has several bruces on his face, caused by bullies or by his own clumsiness
FORCE SENSITIVE: Yes

STRENGTH: He can give strong hits and blocks. He has the potential to be a good Jedi, he only lacks the dexterity.
DEXTERITY: He is very clumsy. He often trips on his own feet. The only thing he is really good at is dodging.
CONSTITUTION: Scouts is a slow. He also breathing problems which get worse in sandy places
INTELLIGENCE: He is quite smart. He can generate reasonable strategies, but he cannot execute them.
WISDOM: He is not familiar with things that happened before his birth. Perhaps a couple stories.
CHARISMA: He is very funny and nice. He has always been kind and forgiving. He can become a friend of anyone.

PERSONALITY:
Scouts's childhood issues were caused by obedient and kind personality. But he couldn't help it. He was raised that way, to be good and to treat people like you want to be treated. From time to time, he would get really angry to a kid for hitting him too much, and he would try to get revenge. But he always stopped to reconsider before doing something he would later regret.​
BIOGRAPHY:
Son of Ebon and Ashla Cofoer. He had two brothers, both younger than him. All of them were born and raised in Naboo. Childhood was tough for him, as kids would often bully him. He did not knew why. His mother told him about Jedi knights, and how they protected the Galaxy. She told him how the were incredible warriors, and how honorable it was to become one of them. Since he was 8 years old, he practiced to become a Jedi. He used to play with sticks, pretending they were light sabers. One day, a bunch of kids mocked at him for playing around. This time, he hit a kids head with his stick. The other kids went after him. Just before they could catch his, he pushed the kid without even touching him. That is when he knew he could become a Jedi.

He embarked on a journey to become a Jedi. Even though his parents gave him support, he decided he wanted to do it alone. He did not wanted his parents to mourn the death of a son, if something went wrong. it was better if he just disappeared. He did not knew what to do to join the Order, but he was willing to do anything. He sneaked into a ship that took him to Mimban. He spent 3 months living in the street, living off charity from people. Until one day, he met a Jedi Master, whose name slipped away from his mind. He said he sensed something in Scouts. All he remembers is being initiated into the Order, and now he is looking a Master to teach him.​
FORCE POWERS:
He can push and pull. He can also levitate small objects .​
SKILLS:
He knows basic phrases in various languages, learnt from the streets of Mimban​
LIGHTSABER/SWORD FORMS:
Makashi is the only form he knows.


STRENGTHS AND WEAKNESSES:
Strengths: Strong, fast learner, and devout to the order.
Weaknesses: Not agile and clumsy.

GEAR:
He only carries his yellow lightsaber.
 
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Delete the [noparse] and [/noparse] from the beginning and end of your profile
 

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Haidere!

As I understand you are looking for a Jedi master, which is of course something catching my interest.
Looking at your Char sheet, I see there's some things to consider first, tho.

I'm not sure you already applied as padawan, since that would have brought you to the attention of one of our very friendly Faction leaders (@Ben) or their right hands (@Ral Aran and @Raydo).

There's a small weakness in your story, since Coruscant is the Centre of the Sith/Imperial Empire right for a while now, and thus your Character would most probably have ended up as either a Sith or prisoner. Meeting a Jedi Master would be quite a feat, as those most probably would be a little busy not being found and killed.

I also think you can improve a little on the personality section. It is as it is now "biography" and "personality" at a mixed rate. It would be easiest to describe him as if someone else would describe him, this way you quickly get a good result.

The biography is not really a bad one, and I am not one to tell others what to do, but if you can give a little more detail so I can see more about what kind of character he is that would be much appreciated. (Having a clumsy overweight char would be hard to explain if he had to life from charity for 3 months, for example)

If you have any question and/or wish some inspiration about your char (again, it's completely your prerogative to leave the char as he is or change it) please toss me a PM. But please be aware that I right now am -very- slow in responding, as I have my hands full with RL-Stuff and only can peek into the forums here and then.

May the Force be with you,

Jedi Master Taruna Eskarian
 

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Haidere!

As I understand you are looking for a Jedi master, which is of course something catching my interest.
Looking at your Char sheet, I see there's some things to consider first, tho.

I'm not sure you already applied as padawan, since that would have brought you to the attention of one of our very friendly Faction leaders (@Ben) or their right hands (@Ral Aran and @Raydo).

There's a small weakness in your story, since Coruscant is the Centre of the Sith/Imperial Empire right for a while now, and thus your Character would most probably have ended up as either a Sith or prisoner. Meeting a Jedi Master would be quite a feat, as those most probably would be a little busy not being found and killed.

I also think you can improve a little on the personality section. It is as it is now "biography" and "personality" at a mixed rate. It would be easiest to describe him as if someone else would describe him, this way you quickly get a good result.

The biography is not really a bad one, and I am not one to tell others what to do, but if you can give a little more detail so I can see more about what kind of character he is that would be much appreciated. (Having a clumsy overweight char would be hard to explain if he had to life from charity for 3 months, for example)

If you have any question and/or wish some inspiration about your char (again, it's completely your prerogative to leave the char as he is or change it) please toss me a PM. But please be aware that I right now am -very- slow in responding, as I have my hands full with RL-Stuff and only can peek into the forums here and then.

May the Force be with you,

Jedi Master Taruna Eskarian
@Necket ^This. Please see to the points Taruna brought up and let me know when you've made the edits she suggested.
 

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I am aware of that, i am know checking the pm for the final corrections :)
 

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Well, while his bio isn't too bad, I still feel like a 14 year old would have had a much better chance at finding a Jedi on Naboo than Mimban. Just something to think about.
 
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