Sirvious "The Angel of Death"

[Crosby]

Nobody alive but him knows were he came from, the only thing the only thing they do know is he has a perfect track record, over 100 jobs, zero failures. Those who did know in the first place have been murdered. He dubbed himself Sirvious, a name from his past, his employers dubbed him the Angel of Death, a chilling figure from Corellian legends. He's an assassin because that's what he was bred to do, that's what he was trained all his life to do, that is the only thing he can do.

Once he has the money, within a weak his target is no longer alive. He is surrounded in mystery, but nobody would dare to ask him about his past, some would rather not even know. That's how scary he is, his employers even try to avoid prolonged meetings with him. He caries an aura of death; and has a distinct cold, hard, emotionless face, one wouldn't even dare to look him in the eyes.The ones who employ him, know the outcome if they cross him, and the to anyone willing to cross him.


When it comes to the job itself, he leaves little mess, only a dead guard or two other than his target. Not a single job has he been caught in the act. He would enter a party as a guest, within 10 minutes he is out of sight completely, maybe he has a new disguise or maybe he has already completed his task. He is known to have used a variety of weapons, he prefers to use stealthier weapons rather than firearms, but he does what ever he can to get the job done. He uses tricks distractions and deception to get to his target and from there on is the easy part.

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[Rev]

Think you need to expand on the character a bit. Not a whole lot there, though I do like the Hitman character. If it's a 100% copy then I'd say scrap it, because that's no fun and just copying anyways..

 

[Crosby]

Think you need to expand on the character a bit. Not a whole lot there, though I do like the Hitman character. If it's a 100% copy then I'd say scrap it, because that's no fun and just copying anyways..

Its pretty much just the style of how he kills his targets I copied, back story is 100% non-existent, lol. What do you suggest, I put the stats and gear in or something?

 

[Rev]

Well a general biography for the reader to know, not necessarily your character or other player character know. Maybe write up how he came to be, some of his training/purpose, and how he got to where he is today.

I can understand if you dont want to let his backstory/history be know, but leave gaps in the writing so we as the reader get some depth on the character. Right now I just have the idea he's an assassin and that's it. Only reason I know what he looks like is due to picture and his personality I assume will be like Agent 47's, cold, dark, and distanced.

Can put stuff like that in a profile without giving away too much. It's a good idea thus far I think you just need to figure out the fine details about the character, even if that's done through RP. Give the guy a purpose outside of "He's an assassin" why is he one? If he was raised in a tube why did he still want to do what he was bred for despite escaping/being let out from his captors. You can write it in his history without much knowledge on it or details, then go back and RP those aspects. Can have him think back to when he broke out of enslavement or one of his first hits or whatever it is you want it to be.

Character has lots of potential, just have to make me believe it first =p

 

[Crosby]

Im leaning towards almost a complete rewrite, same character, but different style of writing.

 

[Rev]

That's up to you. You could use this in the other character you create. This is kind of like a 1st person narrative so you could use that for the personality or just as a reference.

I do think starting over might help with figuring out more about the character for you, especially the personality, characteristic, and what his inspirations are.

 

[Crosby]

That's up to you. You could use this in the other character you create. This is kind of like a 1st person narrative so you could use that for the personality or just as a reference.

I do think starting over might help with figuring out more about the character for you, especially the personality, characteristic, and what his inspirations are.

I had written an entirely different story with one of the guys who held him captive explaining his escape. But in the end it seemed to drawn out and decided to just alter my first draft. I still don't like it though, there's not alot of detail.

Edit: Now that ive though about it, for now I just want to the details of his past to be miniscule, but i will reveal them in Rp's. Im thinking about signing this guy up with Merkatua, not sure yet though.