Sylvaron Leonard

[Dread]

"You must remember that though you defeat your opponents, not always will you learn from it. You must spend less focus upon the inner workings of your victims and more time exploring your inner darkness!" - Ledo

Sylvaron - "Exploring my own darkness, father? What can I do to find such darkness inside me and exploit it further?"​

"You must look to those places empty and void of substance within. It is there that you will find these propelling hatreds of lacking, of pain and severing." -Ledo

"Belladonna, the Deadly Nightshade, was the Devil's favorite plant. Like many other busy persons, the Devil found relaxation in the hobby of gardening ..."​

Spoiler: Theme

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Leo, Leo, Leo...​

Something was behind that door, all the murders you had been investigating lead back to this mans, known only by "Leo", basement suite. Your hands clam up before you indelibly reach out and grasp the door handle. When you turn it, it will not open, so you're forced to smash the door open. As your muscles tense and you bash the door in, breaking the hinges in one loud snap, the first thing that hits you is a nefarious smell. Noxious gases that reek and fill the inside of your nose. Instinctively you use your dominate hand to cover your nose to fend off the smell, then after breathing in a moment of shock you use your other hand to cover your mouth. When it all settles over you, you move backwards away from the smells line of fire. You take a deep breath of fresh air to fill up your lungs before letting your hands fall from clutching your face. You would need your gun for going down there, so you take it out.

Holding your gun in your sweaty right hand, you take your first step in the doorway. Down onto stairwells. You twist down in at lest four cases. Each step seems to creek louder then the last and each step brings you closer to the foul smell.

A noise hits you of buzzing flys, and lots of them. Your heart sinks to the bottom of your stomach as your eyes glance down to the basement room from the second last case of stairs. A mans decapitated body lay cast halfway over a bloodstained couch. His legs are sprawled on the ground well his back and hands on the couch itself. Thousands of flys swarm around him as maggots crawl from all his cavities. All around the room, from the table tops and the shelve dried blood is everywhere. You start to notice that not only is there blood but body parts, such as the mans head, and rotten food. This place looked abandoned but then your eyes catch one thing out of place, a single desk in the left corner of the room with a lit lamp and piles and piles of paper. Someone still lived here in all this mess, and they either are around now or had just left when they heard the door being broken down.

You run down the last staircase in a hurry to stop "Leo" from thinking he could hide or escape you, "STOP! I KNOW YOU'RE HERE, SHOW YOURSELF!" Then, your body feels warm, as if a hot hand touched you from your back then reached all the way through to your chest. All you can hear is a humming. A silver light fills the bottom of your eyes and in reaction you look down to see a stream of silver light sticking out of your chest. A lightsaber. With all the strength you have left you look over your shoulder and see a man with emerald glowing eyes and platinum hair staring back at you. He seems to be fading into reality from the darkness of the windowless basement. Soon your body feels heavy and your eyes go black.

PeronaL Logs​

Entry 0001_____________

SHE, she...my sweet pristine doll. She hates me. She hates me. She hate

s me

Father is dead, that's fine. I've found his boy and that'll make a fine replacement

[indubitable noises follow for the next two minutes]​

The cult is a fine place...perfect for my needs. People tend to stare, like they know me. Even today a person used the name 'Sylvaron' to address me rather then LEO. Granted...it was HIS son. I'll get over it

Entry 0001 End_____________

NOTEWORTHY FORCE POWERS:​

Telekinesis
Force Sense
Force Concealment
Force Absorption
Force Deflection
Force Suppression
Force Speed
Force Bubble
Force Lightning
Force Crush
Kinetite​

LIGHTSABER/SWORD FORMS:

Form VI: Niman
Form II: Makashi

LIGHTSABER(s) INFORMATION:​

Two Curve-hilt Lightsabers, Silver​

GEAR:​

Various types of Knives
Two Pistols
Custom cloak designed for stealth​

Spoiler: PERSONAL DATA FILE

NAME:​

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Sylvaron Leonard
FACTION:
Labous an Ankou
RANK:
Collector
SPECIES:
Human
AGE:
33
GENDER:
Male
HEIGHT:
5'10
WEIGHT:
150 Pounds
EYES:
Emerald
HAIR:
Platinum Blonde
SKIN:
White
APPRENTICE:
Saze Shimagura
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[Dread]

I hope the gear I choose is ok Jiang. I'll apply him to CARD if no one has any big objections with this character.

 

[Jiang Winters]

Kit's fine; might want to link it to the CARD gear list so people know where it's from. ^^

Anywho, I like him. *thumbs up*

 

[Dread]

Kit's fine; might want to link it to the CARD gear list so people know where it's from. ^^

Anywho, I like him. *thumbs up*

Will do.

*Goes to link to the CARD gear list*

 

[Sreeya]

Smexy : D

 

[Dread]

Smexy : D

Thanks.

:CHappy

 

[Denzein]

I like him, nice work. If yoy wanted to improve him I'd be looking at going into more detail in the skills section, for example if he has any little quirks such as he happens to be good at hacking computers, or is handy in a firefight, that these things will not cause potential upset when they are seemingly "pulled outta yo' ass".

This would also expand the character's educational detail. By that I mean that you said that he's very intelligent in some subjects but defficient in others. It would be a good idea to expand upon this, so that it's out in the open what your character is learned in. Again, the main advantage of this is to stop people whining when you put the smackdown on them ;3

But yeah. Spiffy. :CHappy

 

[Dread]

I like him, nice work. If yoy wanted to improve him I'd be looking at going into more detail in the skills section, for example if he has any little quirks such as he happens to be good at hacking computers, or is handy in a firefight, that these things will not cause potential upset when they are seemingly "pulled outta yo' ass".

This would also expand the character's educational detail. By that I mean that you said that he's very intelligent in some subjects but defficient in others. It would be a good idea to expand upon this, so that it's out in the open what your character is learned in. Again, the main advantage of this is to stop people whining when you put the smackdown on them ;3

But yeah. Spiffy. :CHappy

Thanks for pointing that out to me. I shall expand on his skills so they're a bit clearer.

I did enjoy creating him so adding more would be no trouble at all.

 

[Dread]

I added to his skills and I will expand his history in regards to them in awhile.

Hope they're alright.

 

[Lucid]

I have a problem with this character's dexterity. The majority of your discription is deicated to illustrating the fact that he's not co-ordinated or spacially aware at all. Yet in your last line you allow him to go to the other extreme. It's doing that sort of thing that will make your character stale and uninteresting; he'll be able to do anything in any situation without much problem at all. If you build him with flaws then that will challenge you in your RPing then you will actually be writing a distinct character.

As he is now, he sounds like he's either had an utterly botched white matter brain biopsy or he has a brain tumour yet he is still able to dash about DESPITE the handicaps you've built in.

Personally I would go for playing up the spacial problems as that would be a truly interesting thing to write.

 

[Dread]

I have a problem with this character's dexterity. The majority of your discription is deicated to illustrating the fact that he's not co-ordinated or spacially aware at all. Yet in your last line you allow him to go to the other extreme. It's doing that sort of thing that will make your character stale and uninteresting; he'll be able to do anything in any situation without much problem at all. If you build him with flaws then that will challenge you in your RPing then you will actually be writing a distinct character.

As he is now, he sounds like he's either had an utterly botched white matter brain biopsy or he has a brain tumour yet he is still able to dash about DESPITE the handicaps you've built in.

Personally I would go for playing up the spacial problems as that would be a truly interesting thing to write.

Hmm...explain that to me a little more clear? I'll gladly change it around once I fully understand.

I based his "getting lost in his thoughts" on myself. I can get so unfocused I become clumsy and sometimes have a hard time talking - it takes me a moment to return to reality. I don't have any medical condition that would explain that, I just loose complete focus, unless it has something to do with my plausible ADHA that my psychiatrist didn't bother looking into when he noticed I might have it. Some ADHA traits are found in people with Autism spectrum disorders such as myself(I'm a aspie). This is something that happens to me daily. Putting it on him didn't seem fare fetched to me.


But... If it doesn't suit the character I can remove it.

 

[Samara]

Hmm...explain that to me a little more clear? I'll gladly change it around once I fully understand.

I based his "getting lost in his thoughts" on myself. I can get so unfocused I become clumsy and sometimes have a hard time talking - it takes me a moment to return to reality. I don't have any medical condition that would explain that, I just loose complete focus, unless it has something to do with my plausible ADHA that my psychiatrist didn't bother looking into when he noticed I might have it. Some ADHA traits are found in people with Autism spectrum disorders such as myself(I'm a aspie). This is something that happens to me daily. Putting it on him didn't seem fare fetched to me.


But... If it doesn't suit the character I can remove it.

I know whats it like, but what Lucid means is that by general rule, character without weaknesses/flaws, or simple plain god modded (wich is not your case) are boring to other players. Example Anner; He IS smart and good with stuff like computers, possesses a gifted mind BUT he is not strong, or has much dexterity, or much physical build anyways. This is because if he spends a lot of time with computers, he does not expend the time exercising his body, or practicing with weapons, wich he does not know how to use, etcétera. Makes sense, doesn't it?

Your character excells at Strength, excells at Dexterity normally, excells at Constitution (or at least have a very good one not to have died so far if he doesn't care about illnesses or wounds) Has a very good wisdom and good charisma. His "flaw" is being free from bonds, if that could be called a flaw.

You forgot to tell, does your character has any experience with weapons? He likes to infiltrate, is good at it but its an amateur, or actually has worked like that, learned, etc. etc.?

Its neither about addding random flaws, but i think you are doing good on this so far

 

[Lucid]

However, once he's back in the real world he can become extremely fixated on his target in order to strike fast.

In terms of a literary character, particualrly an RP character, this doesn't really work with what you said about his dexterity and physical klutzyness. Remember, these people aren't real, so it's best to pic one side and stay to it like this:

Klutzy or Graceful
Disoriented or Lucid
Spacey or Attentive.

you see what i'm getting at? Either side gives a very clear idea of character, however when you start to mix them, things get weird and you might become lost in your portrayal.

 

[Dread]

Oh, I thought his con sucked because he doesn't pay attention to his heal, his wisdom sucked because you wouldn't want go to him for wisdom, his dex sucked sometimes, he doesn't have that much charisma and I never stated he was super strong, only that he was strong enough to hurt someone by mistake. I can try to reword it all though. I thought it had more flaws then he had good things. I guess people misunderstood?

 

[Samara]

Oh, I thought his con sucked because he doesn't pay attention to his heal, his wisdom sucked because you wouldn't want go to him for wisdom, his dex sucked sometimes, he doesn't have that much charisma and I never stated he was super strong, only that he was strong enough to hurt someone by mistake. I can try to reword it all though. I thought it had more flaws then he had good things. I guess people misunderstood?

There is a good chance.

Wisdom is not about what others think of him, rather is about his own Wisdom, so it doesn't really matter for that field if people will want or not to go for him. That would be most likely in charisma i believe. Humans most likely can't be super strong, but they can still be very strong, or plain weak, there is a vast spectrum to be covered.

 

[Dread]

In terms of a literary character, particualrly an RP character, this doesn't really work with what you said about his dexterity and physical klutzyness. Remember, these people aren't real, so it's best to pic one side and stay to it like this:

Klutzy or Graceful
Disoriented or Lucid
Spacey or Attentive.

you see what i'm getting at? Either side gives a very clear idea of character, however when you start to mix them, things get weird and you might become lost in your portrayal.

Ok, I wont make him good with guns then. I'm not sure what weapon he could be good with then? He needs something to be able to do in CARD. Or maybe I should get rid of his bad dex...although Anner seems to think he's good at everything? Which I have reworded. Is it ok now?

 

[Dread]

There is a good chance.

Wisdom is not about what others think of him, rather is about his own Wisdom, so it doesn't really matter for that field if people will want or not to go for him. That would be most likely in charisma i believe. Humans most likely can't be super strong, but they can still be very strong, or plain weak, there is a vast spectrum

But you assumed he had high wisdom from what I wrote about not being a good person to go to? How can I word it to show you *don't* go to him for it because he's not good at wisdom?

 

[Samara]

Ok, I wont make him good with guns then. I'm not sure what weapon he could be good with then? He needs something to be able to do in CARD. Or maybe I should get rid of his bad dex...although Anner seems to think he's good at everything? Which I have reworded. Is it ok now?

I think it fits more what you tried to mean earlier now

But you assumed he had high wisdom from what I wrote about not being a good person to go to? How can I word it to show you *don't* go to him for it because he's not good at wisdom?

"Sylvaron is not someone you want to seek wisdom from unless you want to justify something most people can't. "

"Sylvaron is not someone you want to seek wisdom from because he is not very wise"

Would be a good example.

I thought you were trying to make a scientist

Déjà vu

 

[Dread]

I think it fits more what you tried to mean earlier now




"Sylvaron is not someone you want to seek wisdom from unless you want to justify something most people can't. "

"Sylvaron is not someone you want to seek wisdom from because he is not very wise"

Would be a good example.

I thought you were trying to make a scientist

Déjà vu

Ok, I'll change that but I still have the problem with being able to use any type of weapon now.

:CRawr

 

[Samara]

Ok, I'll change that but I still have the problem with being able to use any type of weapon now.

:CRawr

Hence why i said i thought you were going to make a Scientist, the profile looks more like a scientist/developer/researcher than the one of a trained soldier :bitchez