Wrel Halkuun

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Wrel Halkuun
[fancybox4=https://s-media-cache-ak0.pinimg.com/564x/92/26/61/922661b1d0c7951ff73ba09e4f1ae409.jpg] FACTION: Mandalorian Dominion
HOMEWORLD: Concord Dawn
RANK: SuperCommando
SPECIES: Human
AGE: 28
GENDER: Male
HEIGHT: 6'10"
WEIGHT: 280lbs

APPEARENCE: Wrel is an imposing sight. He is very tall for a human. Wrel is also incredibly muscular. Wrel posses a strong square jaw line. A couple days black stubble can usually be found on his face. His hazel eyes and bald crown complete his features. [/fancybox4]

PERSONALITY
[fancybox4=https://s-media-cache-ak0.pinimg.com/originals/98/08/2b/98082b0ef2144274bb769be249352e14.jpg]Wrel Halkuun is not the sharpest Vibrosword in the armory and he knows it. Wrel doesn’t try to act as someone he is not. Which leads to him being quite frank in his conversations. Where he lacks in book smarts he makes up in street smarts. Wrel is fairly perceptive and has good situational awareness, at least when it doesn’t involve social settings.

Wrel's size keeps him from being very dexterous, although he is surprisingly agile for his size in combat. Wrel tends to take issues head on and prefers using brute force. In fact, it takes considerable effort on his part, and often the persuading of others, for him not to use force when another method would serve better. Wrel is very slow to trust. However, he is fiercely loyal to and protective of those he does. Wrel has a fowl mouth and a perverse sense of humor. Some would say he lacks a censor.[/fancybox4]

VERD ORI'SHYA BESKAR'GAM
[fancybox4=http://orig13.deviantart.net/7ea5/f/2013/311/0/f/valley_by_donmalo-d6tcozq.jpg]The cold mountain winds blew fiercely as I looked down from the high peaks onto the Kayanajin Valley.

These harsh lands shaped me. Since I was a very young boy my buir taught me the way of the Mando’ade. While those of other houses may have been taught at schools or in groups; in the villages of the Kayanajin Valley it was always our tradition to be taught from father to ad. I learned first how to fight with my bare hands for my father said “for only then can you fight with the kad.” It was only after I had become proficient with the sword that I was allowed to handle a blaster.

When I was old enough it was time for me to take the trial, Yaim’ol be Verd. In less honorable tongues it is the Homecoming of the Warrior. I was placed in the mountains unknown kilometers from my village and given only a single dull kal. The only way to pass was to return home. Failure would mean my kyr’am. Completing my trial took weeks beyond my count. But I had survived. I finally earned my own sword and Beskar’gam.

These harsh lands shaped me. All of the men in my family have been verd. But like the rest of the men in the Kayanajin Valley we are also vhett. We go to war only when we must. However, we do not sit idly. For five years after my trial I worked the lands of my ancestors. The work kept me strong. While I wasn't working the land I was training with my fellow verd throughout the valley, sharpening my own skills.

After five years I was the first of my family to be given the great honor of being chosen as a member of Ha'rangir's Chosen. For two years I served a dishonorable organization as honorably as I could. I soon realized that the Chosen were corrupt. They served only themselves. So I left. I went back to my home and chose not to join Kyr'stad. They too were dishonored themselves by bringing the Sith into our fold. Now we have a new Mandalore. One who I am honored to fight alongside. One who has our people in their best interest.

These harsh lands shaped me. I would not be who I am today without their lessons. This is my home. The home of my people. We shape it as it shaped us. Over recent years others, the Jetii and Sith, have tried to shape my home. They have tried to tell my fellow Mando’ade how to shape their lives. There is no greater crime than that. It must not be allowed. Now we finally have the freedom to shape our own fates. We must not let that freedom be taken again. At all costs.[/fancybox4]

PERSONAL EFFECTS
[fancybox4=http://gearnuke.com/wp-content/uploads/2014/11/bal-aw-best-gun.png]Primary Firearm: XPC-71 Custom Attachments, Holographic sight.
Secondary Firearm: Heavy Blaster Pistol
Melee Weapons: A pair of Phrik weave Vibroswords kept across his back. A short knife kept in a sheath in the small of his back.
Heavy Weapon: CZ- 6100 Handheld Rocket Launcher
Armor: Mandalorian MK II Armor Wrel's armor has no Jet-pack and no wrist mounted weapons. The HUD has custom software and hardware which provides nightvision.
SHIP: Clawcraft-3 Interceptor
OTHER GEAR: Macro Binoculars and a spare commlink.
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ROLE-PLAYS[fancybox4=http://vignette4.wikia.nocookie.net/starwars/images/8/84/Concord_Dawn_system.png/revision/latest?cb=20160128214904] Coming Soon...!











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Hey mix masterty!

Two main things. First, please please please please please change that face claim. An actual face is preferable (we do take our armor off sometime) but mostly that pic of jacked up fett armor is so overused at this point I actually scream out loud when I see it. Not your fault, it is totally bad ass, but it's already in use/overuse, so I gotta ask for something else.

Second, the bio is stylistically great, but it feels a bit scant. While you meet the site's criteria, the Mandalorians have such an involved story on the site cannon, it seems a shame not to see some of that. What did he do between training and now? Did he serve in the BA when we did that? If not was he opposed? did he serve in the Chosen or Deathwatch? has he just lived at home with his clan protecting the mountians (from what)? I would love some more meat to chew on about this guy.


Let me know if their are questions or edits. Thanks!
 

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Changed the picture. Had no idea it was that over used. Too bad since it actually fit how I visualized by character body type wise. Anyways I won't be adding a photo with the helmet off unless I can find one that fits how I visualize my character looking. I make my characters and then find pictures to fit that, not the other way around. If I don't find a picture to fit then I don't use one.

As far as the "bio" thing goes... I was hoping to keep it literary like this. However I'll consider/and work on adding something that's more like a traditional bio. @Nalu Fibuna
 

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Please keep it literary. I love it. I just want another paragraph or two to hint at what happened/changed between age 18-28.
 

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Please keep it literary. I love it. I just want another paragraph or two to hint at what happened/changed between age 18-28.
I don't particularly want to change the way the literary part of the profile is done. Most likely I'll just add a short few paragraph "History" section explaining those years.
 

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You could also shoe-horn some stuff about his involvement or perspectives in/on the last several years and independence into personality honestly.
 

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You could also shoe-horn some stuff about his involvement or perspectives in/on the last several years and independence into personality honestly.

I could... I think what I have decided to do is to put it in the "Verd" section and make it literary like the rest of it. I just didn't what to have more than three "These harsh lands shaped me" but I've worked out a way to keep it at three. So now all I have to do is write something.
 

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I already see what you've done here and I like it, just looks like you might have a slight formatting mistake. Just let me know if this is ready and I'll approve
 

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I already see what you've done here and I like it, just looks like you might have a slight formatting mistake. Just let me know if this is ready and I'll approve

Nope not a formatting mistake, haha. Just started writing the history part you requested and hit a block. Got it written. All is ready for approval!
 
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