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Strength: Having spent most of his life in Republic military service Alcander is fairly strong, he is fully capable of holding his own in a fist fight or could (with some effort) carry his subordinates out of the line-of-fire.
Dexterity: The Republic military require a certain standard of physical fitness, leaving Alcander's physique rather lithe. Daily PT exercises are the normal and bi-annual physicals ensure troopers maintain this standard.
Constitution: Alcander's naval position has allowed him to maintain an impressive standard of health, he doesn't smoke and rarely drinks.
Intelligence: Though Alcander himself things his intellect as average, his record and experience may beg-to-differ. He has graduated from the Republic Naval Academy, has a mind for strategy and his prior military actions have only honed this.
Wisdom: Alcander has a great situational awareness and an, almost, sixth sense to understanding the current matter at hand. Life has trained him to read the battlefield, though experience can only take one so far. He has little understanding of the force and can, sometimes, be a poor judge of character.
Charisma: The weight of command has fallen upon Alcander's shoulders for sometime, leading him to have a outwardly calm disposition. He is not the greatest public speaker, but can improvise a speech if necessary.
So I thought I would point out a few things. that I personally noticed:
- Firstly the part I highlighted in the green. I really liked the fact that you have pointed out his strengths in a none combat situation rather than saying " He's strong so can batter people with his fists." (Like I always do haha.)
- The white part I highlighted there is nothing wrong with, I would just like to see at a glance what exactly that means. Is the fitness based on Max effort 2.4km runs + best effort push up, sit up and heaves in two minutes. I'm assuming due to this being in the "Dex" category it is in regards to running. Either way maybe an expansion on that?
- The bits in red, I felt it was kind of a repeat of itself. Maybe combine those two parts I highlighted.
These are only some suggestions mind. This section is likely going to be the one that people glance over quickly before doing a roleplay with you, they may ask you a boat load of questions if you are vague with things.
My only other points are to expand the personality section and that i'm not sure what the ruling on large ships is as im not a very techy guy.
Nevertheless seeing as it is only a work in progress good start!