Kiara Sunquest

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KIARA SUNQUEST
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[NAME]
__Kiara Sunquest
[FACTION]
__Jedi Order
[RANK]
__Padawan

[SPECIES]
__Sephi___________
[HOMEWORLD]
__Onderon________
[AGE:]
__25____
[GENDER]
__Female[color=#1a1a1]___________[/color]
[HEIGHT]
__5'10"
[WEIGHT]
__125 LB.
[HAIR COLOUR]
__Dark Blonde
[EYE COLOUR]
__Ice Blue
[FORCE SENSITIVITY]
__Yes
[STATUS]
__TRAINING
[ASSESSMENT]
__Absorbent


[BASICS]
AGE: 25

SKIN: Tan

DISTINGUISHING MARKS: No

FORCE SENSITIVE: Yes

STRENGTH: 4/10 Kiara lacks physical strength to lift heavy objects or push anything hard.]

DEXTERITY: 8/10 [She is extremely nimble and agile. What she lacks in physical strength she makes up with speed and quickness. Both physically and mentally.

CONSTITUTION: 6/10 [Her health is good but could be better due to her living in the lower levels.]

INTELLIGENCE: 7/10 [She is very intelligent. She is a whiz kid at computers and thinking logically.]

WISDOM: 5/10 [Her wisdom is average for her age. She does have street smarts that she learned through her living environment.]

CHARISMA: 3/10 [Kiara is very shy so her charisma is very low.She needs to know someone better before she can trust them. ]



[SUBJECT STRENGTHS AND WEAKNESES]
__ Kiara is rather good with fighting with swords. She practices all the time. She is also good at slicing in to computers. She is kind of a whiz kid when it comes to computers.

Kiara lacks physical strength. She also lacks self confidence and is often shy around people until she gets to know them better. She is used to doing things on her own instead of with others.
[PERSONALITY]
__Kiara is a very shy girl, who is used to being on her own. She has low self esteem which she tries to mask but it seeps through sometimes when she is up against something or someone. She can be very determined when she wants too. In fact she has no friends other than her astromech droid. so her social skills are lacking. Even though she is shy she still very nice. She is a little naive at times as well. But she has learned alot through her street smarts.
[FORCE ABILITIES]
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Force Leap [basic]
Force Push [basic]
Force Sense [untrained]
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[PERSONAL HISTORY]
__[1]

Kiara Sunquest was born to two Sephi named Arlo and Rein Sunquest on the planet of Onderon. Rein died in childbirth giving birth to Kiara. That left Arlo to raise Kiara by himself. It was a lonely time for Arlo who loved his daughter very much. He wished she knew her mother and would tell stories about her to Kiara. She was a daddy’s girl and learned about mechanics and slicing. Everything Kiara knew was from her father. She learned quickly at such a young age that Arlo could guess that she had to be force sensitive.Kiara’s best friend was her R9 Astromech droid named Gambit. Kiara and Gambit went everywhere together.

When Kiara was five her and her father along with Gambit went on a trip to Coruscant to visit a friend. The friend lived in one of the seedy parts of Coruscant in the lower levels. As they were getting close to his friend they were held up by an unknown assailant demanding credits. When Arlo could not grant the robber any credits the robber shot and killed Arlo. Kiara screamed so loud that glass shattered around her. Kiara ran as fast as she could to the friends apartment.

The friend took her in and there she lived a completely different life than on Onderon. The city-wide planet was enormous. It was exciting and scary for Kiara. She learned her way around. The lower levels toughened her up. Her skills of slicing came in handy for she made credits off of it. At fifteen she was close to being a master slicer working odd jobs for her guardian, Maks Mckoy.

One day a problem arose in the apartment that Kiara was in. Maks accused her of stealing credits from him She denied saying it was probably one of his seedy friends that stop by. Maks didn’t believe her and kicked Kiara out. Kiara took her Gambit and left the apartment. With nowhere to go and only a thousand credits in her name she walked the lower levels looking for a place to stay.

She was also hungry and saw a fruit stand with different kinds of fruit. Though she had credits Kiara wanted to save it for a place of her own. So she decided to steal the fruit. She took an a couple of exotic fruit and was about to get away when a Jedi stopped her. He sensed that Kiara was using the force to steal the fruit. He told her to give back the fruit and come with him to the Jedi Temple. There she could get a hot meal and learn the ways of the force. He also said that Gambit could help out in the hangar while she learning the force. Kiara agreed to go and gave back the fruit she stole.

Becoming a Jedi was something that never crossed her mind. If her parents can only see her now. Would they approve or disapprove. She wanted to make them proud. She guessed that they would approve of this calling. So now her life really begins this time as a Jedi.

Just as things were going right everything went wrong. Kiara was just getting started as a Jedi but catastrophe happened. She was in the lower levels visiting a friend when the Sith invaded the Jedi Temple on Coruscant. She heard the news on the Holonet. She knew she couldn't go back to the temple for the were taking over the entire planet. Scared and confused, Kiara ran and found a freighter that was leaving the planet. She had no idea where it was going but she didn't care. She stowed away on freighters going from planet to planet with other refugees. She knew she had to hide the fact that she was a Jedi. Though she didn't know enough to really count as one.

Using her street smarts Kiara began using her slicing skills for odd jobs. She had no idea where any Jedi were. Thinking that most were probably dead or scattered Kiara vowed to find them. She also didn't want to be discovered by the Sith. It wasn't easy to avoid detection but somehow Kiara made it through. She got a tip that the Jedi had a hidden enclave on Arbra. She hoped that the intel was correct. She took a freighter to Arbra searching for the Jedi. She didn't know what she would find once she landed there but she allowed the force to lead the way.




[SKILLS and EQUIPMENT]

Hand to hand combat
Piloting
Slicing
*******~*~*******~*~*****
Gambit-2.jpg

R-9 Astromech Droid named Gambit
Datapad, Vibrosword, Comlink, Backpack



Child's Play In Progress

Form III Soresu In Progress

Electric work what a shock! In Progress

No Manual Included In Progress

The Jedi Path Completed

Relaxing in the branches In Progress

A Social Scene Incomplete
 
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I want to start off by saying that the things you put into her profile in terms of skills and certain types of knowledge should be explained in the bio. This is more to cover your bases if you get into a PvP situation and have to refer back to something, because if your character hasn't actually trained and/or learned something, then you're probably not going to be able to bring it into the match. I mean, that is what RPing is for in the first place. :P

I'll go into more detail as I go through.

Strictly personal preference, and by no means mandatory, I think you should add a description to the statistics, just so we as readers can better understand what your character is capable of. 7/10 doesn't mean the same thing to you as it does me. That and it's ambiguous whether you mean in relation to her peers (people her age and build) or overall in terms of the galaxy (generally referring to sentient beings). Or you could mean something in between. 5/10 compared to a Trianii would be pretty strong, for instance.

If she has no friends and is incredibly shy, giving way to the lack of friends, then her charisma should be much lower, I think. It is the ability to influence others. If she can't do that well (the first of which is getting people to like/trust you), then her charisma is probably pretty low.

For the skills, I don't see anything relating to lightsaber combat in the bio. If she only just arrived then she'd know nothing about anything in terms of that. While more lax than the Old Jedi Order, a firm understanding of the Codes, Principles and Ways of the Jedi is required before a lightsaber is allowed, generally. Training blades are, of course, provided but any real proficiency isn't going to be possible for a while.
That, and if she just arrived then she wouldn't know any Force powers, never mind be 9/10 in Force Speed.

Personally I'd like to see a mention, and I mean just a passing note, of her piloting and hand-to-hand skills. Also, being practically a master at slicing at 15 is... a bit of a stretch. However, that goes with what I said above; is she that much better than people her age and background or all people in the galaxy. If you're comparing to the galaxy, then it would be quite a bit lower, I think. She can be naturally gifted, but you can improve that (however fast you want) though RP.

The stuff referring to anything martial (lightsaber/sword combat) should probably be explained in the bio in some way. I'm pretty sure she can't just pick up a sword for the first time and be awesome at it.

If you have empty categories then you can get rid of them altogether. It really just takes up space and distracts the reader. If/when she gets them, then you can, of course, add them back in.

That's pretty much it.

Wow, that was way longer than I wanted. Sorry! Hope it helped at least. :/
 

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Agreed with some of Mav's points, especially on the stats. If she is just joining the Order, her skills are obviously not refined due to her not having formal training. I would also divide lightsaber combat from regular sword skills, to show she's proficient in swords and not necessarily lightsabers yet. Otherwise, I don't have an issue with the profile.
 

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Ok I made the edits. Hope it's ok this time.
 

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There have been Master Slicers at younger ages in SW Mav, Mission from KOTOR was no older then 17 and she was canonically a master slicer, there were others too but their names escape me atm. It really has to do with her upbringing if she was a street urchin then it's plausible, if she was a spoiled rich kid then I would agree and say it is out of place.
 

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I also like the droid. Very neat. Great bio.
 
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