Kif Misko

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NAME: Kif Misko
FACTION: - none yet
RANK: - none yet
SPECIES: Nautolan
AGE: 26
GENDER: Male
HEIGHT: 1.88 metres
WEIGHT: 89.5 Kg
EYES: Black
HAIR: -
SKIN: Blue
CREDITS: 1,000
DISTINGUISHING MARKS: A scar 5 cm long going over his left eye from top to bottom
DOMINATE HAND: Left-handed
FORCE SENSITIVE: Yes

STRENGTH: Determined to his cause of revenge, he trained a lot, which bringed it's sweet fruits of strong muscular body. 8/10
DEXTERITY: Kif, as a strong will-powered nautolan used to swim in the seas of his homeland, causing him to be agile and quick. 9/10
CONSTITUTION: From his young age, Kif had one great weakness, he was very sensitive to any sudden climate changes, otherwise he has a very strong immunity system. 7/10
INTELLIGENCE: Kif didn't spent a lot of his time studying as he was training to increase his agility and strength, but that doesn't mean he didn't read a book sometimes. 6/10
WISDOM: Book-reading made him wise, but still not capable of teaching small nautolans about life. 6/10
CHARISMA: Spending many days training, swimming and reading books cut him off from any contact with others, except his old grandmother and his training partner, causing him to be weak at communication with others. 5/10

FORCE POWERS:
Force Push
Force Jump
Force Sense

SKILLS:
Good melee combat skills
Land-vehicle driving training
Underwater breathing

LIGHTSABER/SWORD FORMS:
- none yet

STRENGTHS AND WEAKNESSES:
Easily weakened by sudden changes in climate

GEAR:
Dark brown slim pants
Dark brown shirt without sleeves and hood attached to it
Black ankle boots
Light black titanium chest armor without sleeves
Light black titanium protectors put over shoulder, arm and forearm
Light black titanium protectors put over thigh, knee and calf

SHIP:
- none yet

VEHICLE:
- none yet

PETS:
At the age of 9, Kif's father brought him a small baby Anooba from his visit to Tatooine, where he bought it from a local pet-keeper. He named her Anu.

PERSONALITY:
From a very young age, Kif was a great helper. He helped his parents with any work they asked him to do, he helped his brothers and sisters and always was ready to help if needed. This habbit survived in Kif until now and he is still willing to help others anyway possible.
As he grew up he gained courage, endurance and even will-power. He became strong physically and mentally. He was ready to take any problem head-to-head. He never backed up and if someone disgraced him or his family, he was always ready to fight to prove him or her wrong. He also sometimes goes too deep in his thoughts and pays no attention to what is happening in his surroundings.

HISTORY:
Born in a small village in Sabilon on Glee Anselm, he always loved his race. Peace and comfort made him feel alive and happy. He and all his brothers and sisters were helping their mother with any work she had given them. His father was a traveling salesman and was always away from house. Some time in year he came for one day to kiss his wife, pat his children and leave again.
One day, after Kif turned 9, he brought a small baby Anooba. It grew in their family loved and liked. Kif loved Anooba the most and always played with it outside the house. The bond between them became very strong.
When Kif turned 12, events of great changes took place. One day, when his father was supposted to come, he didn't. He waited for him to come until the very late night, but he didn't come. Next day, depressed, he saw the news about space pirates on loose destroying any ships in sight. He knew now. In tears, he ran to his room and cried for the whole day. He loved his father, but there was no way of telling him now.
Kif grew on. After weeks of depressions, he managed to cope with it and live his life.
Years passed, and family reserves were all gone. No money for food was left. Family started to starve. Desperate and hungry, his mother and Kif went to town hall and asked Government to give them money for food. They rejected. She explained, that her husband was killed by the Pirates. This response made them laugh. They explained how the ship was shot down, but not by pirates, but by republic. Her husband was suspected for black market dealership and was sentenced to death. Despair and shock were seen in his mothers' eyes. She slowly walked to the main door and left. Kif still stood there, not able to move. He was taken out by security.
For the next year, he and his whole family suffered. Mother had to beg on the streets, children had to stay at house and Kif had to work as a waiter. They had to leave thir home and live on the streets. Horrible weather caused children to become sick. First two brothers died of sickness. Family mourned.
After few months, his now old and weak mother was beaten up to death by drunk human tourists.
In next year, almost every of Kif's relatives died, except one last brother and Anu. After kif lost his job, he had no food to feed themselves. His little brother died in his lap.
Kif was now 17. All his family died because of Republic. His only friend left was Anu. He started to train. For whole 9 years, he trained and trained. To keep himself alive, he strated stealing. He sometimes stealed a book and read it for entertainment. During his training he also managed to discover just a small fraction of what Force is and use it to his own benefits. When 9 years passed, he was fed up with this planet. He hated his homeland, his government, his race and even Republic. He now seeks connections with other anti-republic leagues and factions.
KILLS:
- none yet

DUELING RING MATCHES:
- none yet

GRAND TOURNAMENT MATCHES:
- none yet

ROLE-PLAYS:
Kif Misko - http://www.thestarwarsrp.com/forum/showthread.php?p=641744#post641744
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Ru the Boatswain

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This needs soem major reworking. And I do see what you did with Kit Fisto's name.
 

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In all sections?
 
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It's nice to see someone stray from using a human character.

Your writing is alright. There are a few spelling/grammatical errors strewn throughout, but nothing to worry about as they're mostly typos. Your history is a little cliche, but it's actually somewhat unique here as most people don't play as aliens, much less ones that aren't the typical rehash of Twi'lek, Zeltron, Kiffar, etc.

I only caught one reference, but you should phase out all mention of the Sith. They don't exist yet here - we're around 13,000 BBY (before the battle of Yavin) here, so it's ancient times. If you read up on the timeline, the equivalent to the Sith is the Bogan, who are a group of Dark Jedi.

Hope you stick around the site. Nice flow of newbies lately that don't make a stereotypical Jedi Padawan and then bail out.
 

Ru the Boatswain

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First, I just don't like the name, but I can just leave that alone. It just feels unoriginal. That's a personal problem- so I won't touch on it anymore.

He's also not force sensitive yet has
Force Push
Force Jump
Force Sense(Corrected from sence)

Go over your bio again and read it out loud. You'll feel how you don't flow very well. Read each paragraph a few times in different tones. Try to make it so that there is a constant emotion conveyed. This will give your profile a feeling that matches your character. The better you do this, the better a profile you will have and then people will like you or something.
 

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Join the Hutts and kill those Republic scum. :CHappy

Also, I agree with Nevermore. Very nice change to get a non-Human/non-furry (why are there so many?)
 

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If you read up on the timeline, the equivalent to the Sith is the Bogan, who are a group of Dark Jedi.

Just be careful not to just replace Sith with Bogan, because that can be tricky due to the history of the Bogan. If you have any questions about the Bogan, I'm the faction leader so feel free to ask me. :)
 

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Ok guys thanks a lot....I did some slight improvements just now and will redo the history part when i have more time.
 
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