Lotus Lei Wilson

[dblue095]

Lotus Lei Wilson

AGE

► 20​

SPECIES

► Human​

HEIGHT

► 5 Feet 4 Inches​

WEIGHT

► 110 Pounds​

EYE COLOR

► Blue​

HAIR COLOR

► Blonde​

HOMEWORLD

► Alderaan​

GENDER

► Female​

FACTION

► Hutt Cartel​

RANK

► Basadi​

FORCE SENSITIVITY

► Unknown, It runs in her blood, but she never found herself using it besides force push, which is all she know. ​

BIOGRAPHY

Lotus grew up as a normal child along her brother Lou. She would be found using boys into giving her stuff that she wanted. If they had a issue with it, then they would have to deal with Lou Wilson. She like to hear the about bounty hunters and smuggling. This led her dream of becoming the leader of one of the deadliest troop of bounty hunters ever. Once she turned 17 she went to join the Hutt Cartel.

Within the Cartel she would work as a pilot for a group of hunters. The group helped her gain some skills with a blaster and vibroblade for a period of 8 months. The last time she seen her group was on the hunt for a Jedi. Lotus was on the ship preparing for the worst when suddenly the ship the were aboard began to explode. She had to leave her team. She regrets this to this day, but she had to move on with life.

Alongside David, her cousin, and Lou, her brother, Lotus travels through the galaxy doing work for various employers.
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Personality

Lotus is a troublemaker. Having a loud mouth, she seemed to always find herself in some sort of action. Lotus isn`t dumb however, she likes to set people up for failure; it`s that or her tricks will be seen as obvious. Some would say she`s crazy, but are any of us really sane.

Cocky, most would say. Lotus has a strong will determined never to give up. Being bold and brave just like her family members before her courage would become part of her trademark, although she knew when it was time to run, or time to fight.

Gear

2 VZ-1 Steadyshot Pistol
One Collapsible Vibro-Sword
[ http://www.thestarwarsrp.com/forum/index.php?threads/collapsible-vibro-sword.77647/ ]
helmet
PB-Series Protocol Droid
[ http://www.thestarwarsrp.com/forum/index.php?threads/pb-series-protocol-droid.76759/ ]
Corellian Armor
Nerf Herder Lightfreight shared with her cousin David and brother Lou

( http://www.thestarwarsrp.com/forum/index.php?forums/technology.598/page-7 )

Prisoners/Vauables Owned

The Rickety Cricket[Ship] (Not for sell yet)
Iirra Ceerrirk[Prisoner] (Negotiable)

Stories

1. http://www.thestarwarsrp.com/forum/index.php?threads/fight-club.77999/page-2#post-1400087
   
2. http://www.thestarwarsrp.com/forum/index.php?threads/aboard-the-rickety-cricket.78742/#post-1402912
3. http://www.thestarwarsrp.com/forum/index.php?threads/rush-ii.78847/#post-1403042

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[Soup]

There are a few problems that I'll try to help you fix here before Mods get to it.

1. Biography needs to be 2+ paragraphs (minimum 6 sentences each). This is stated in the site's rules.
2. You don't have any sort of skills listed, which can cause much confusion in RP because no one knows what your character can and can't do.
3. You have multiple issues with your gear. All gear needs to be specific tech that is approved here on the site. This is the where you can find the tech that has been approved on the site as of now. You can also make quick tech write ups using the template provided (YOU HAVE TO USE THE TEMPLATE) for stuff like a lone helmet that provides nothing but say 1 shot of standard blaster protection.
4. The C2-N2 has not been invented yet. This TL (timeline) is set ~6-7K years BBY (Before Battle of Yavin), so all technology (including droids) needs to accomadate this. The C2-N2 is too advanced for this TL, but there is at least one protocol droid that I know of that is approved as of now.
5. If you plan on using the other characters mentioned, you would need to either make other PC profiles for them seperately, or make NPC profiles for them to have them a side characters and crew for your character's ship; which you do not have listed by the way. Characters should usually have ships, unless that isn't your thing.

 

[dblue095]

noted

 

[TWD26]

He doesn't need to list skills, and people don't need to own ships. Also listing gear isn't necessary, only if you want to pvp.

 

[Zach]

He doesn't need to list skills, and people don't need to own ships. Also listing gear isn't necessary, only if you want to pvp.

I think you may have misunderstood Soup's feedback. A general description of a character's capabilities and realistic technical specs for this timeline is required however, whether it's in a listed gear section or described in other parts of a character profile. It can be accurately portrayed/narrated as a part of the character's background no problem, but if it's not, in most case (that I've seen), a lot of players will just list it for simplicity's sake.

It also wasn't said that he needs to own a ship. His character profiles all list the same one though, and if he's going to use one, some specifics would need to be mentioned, unless I'm mistaken. I do know there's been a lot of references to the approved technology page for the timeline though. I would recommend reviewing it if you haven't already. Note, there's a format to submit your own approved technology, if you wish to do so.

 

[dblue095]

@Zach I had put his abilities in his bio just in case you didn't notice it. I try to keep all my characters connected and with that I try to write the background to fit why they have unique things about them but nothing to big just story elements.

 

[TWD26]

I think you may have misunderstood Soup's feedback. A general description of a character's capabilities and realistic technical specs for this timeline is required however, whether it's in a listed gear section or described in other parts of a character profile. It can be accurately portrayed/narrated as a part of the character's background no problem, but if it's not, in most case (that I've seen), a lot of players will just list it for simplicity's sake.

It also wasn't said that he needs to own a ship. His character profiles all list the same one though, and if he's going to use one, some specifics would need to be mentioned, unless I'm mistaken. I do know there's been a lot of references to the approved technology page for the timeline though. I would recommend reviewing it if you haven't already. Note, there's a format to submit your own approved technology, if you wish to do so.

I've had characters approved with a simple bio and personality section, so I would say that isn't a set rule. So I'm just giving my own opinion. If you focus on pvp then I would include that stuff.

 

[The Good Doctor]

Hey there. Looking good. So the Farsight Scout Ship is classed as advanced tech thus that needs to be earned in the roleplay with a tech plot. However the Nerf Herder Lightfreight is a good starting ship.

 

[dblue095]

Hey there. Looking good. So the Farsight Scout Ship is classed as advanced tech thus that needs to be earned in the roleplay with a tech plot. However the Nerf Herder Lightfreight is a good starting ship.

noted

 

[dblue095]

fixed

 

[Raydo]

The gear needs to actually be linked to their approved tech pages. Also, you have listed that your character is a Force Sensitive, A FS character cannot use any armor functions so that is something to keep in mind.

As others have pointed out, the character is lacking in information. While you meet the minimum requirement for words in the bio, I would like to see this added to more. You will need to have a personality section to the profile that contains at least two paragraphs (50 word minimum total)

While it is fine to have several characters belong to the family, you can only RP with one character per thread and we don't really do much solo writing. The main point of the site is to RP with other people.

I will take a look at your other profiles, but I might suggest starting out with just one/two and add more after getting them fully fleshed out. Let me know if you have any questions.

 

[dblue095]

The gear needs to actually be linked to their approved tech pages. Also, you have listed that your character is a Force Sensitive, A FS character cannot use any armor functions so that is something to keep in mind.

As others have pointed out, the character is lacking in information. While you meet the minimum requirement for words in the bio, I would like to see this added to more. You will need to have a personality section to the profile that contains at least two paragraphs (50 word minimum total)

While it is fine to have several characters belong to the family, you can only RP with one character per thread and we don't really do much solo writing. The main point of the site is to RP with other people.

I will take a look at your other profiles, but I might suggest starting out with just one/two and add more after getting them fully fleshed out. Let me know if you have any questions.

I already knew about armor thing, It just the fact that the armor looks cool.

but i will expand on the personality

Besides that I like to use all my characters because they play a different role in the galaxy. Whos to say a Wilson wont come back as a family member of my character of the next timeline. Plus you never know who will die on this thing

 

[dblue095]

@Raydo

 

[Raydo]

Link your gear. While I am letting it slide to go ahead and approve the characters, I will be checking back to make sure these corrections are done.

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