Tenhuff "Ten" Terrrak

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NAME: Tenhuff "Ten" Terrrak
FACTION: N/A
RANK: Treasure Hunter
SPECIES: Human
AGE:
28 standard years
32 Tarisian years
Dominate Hand: Right Handed
GENDER: Male
HEIGHT: 5'10"
WEIGHT: 151 lbs.
EYES: Brown
HAIR: Black
SKIN: Tanned
CREDITS: 1000
DISTINGUISHING MARKS: N/A

SKILLS:
N/A

LIGHTSABER/SWORD FORMS:
N/A

GEAR:
Datapad - A datapad that contains his missions, findings, and journal.

Blaster Pistol - A standard issue blaster pistol of a scout.

Scout's Outfit - An outfit that was created to endure strong winds, extreme temperatures, and provide moderate blaster protection.

(1) Medpac - Contains limited-utility diagnosis equipment. Medisensors, flexclamps, synthflesh, irrigation bulbs, bacta, kolto, spray-bandages, bacta patches, spray hypos, bone stabilizers, antiseptics, medical drugs, coagulants, stimulants, and other essential medicines for the treatment of wounds are included.

SHIP:
The Avian - A scout vessel that was designed for reliability, increased sensor ranges, and long trips. It's cockpit is in it's top section, cargo in the middle, and the private quarters at the bottom.
-Length: 48 meters
-Height: 25 meters
-Maximum speed: 850 kph
-Hyperdrive Rating: Class 3; Class 15 backup
-Shielding: Yes
-Sensor Systems: High quality
-Navigation system: Navicomputer
-Armament: (4) Small lasers cannons
-Crew: 3
-Minimum Crew: 1
-Passengers: 3
-Cargo Capacity: 150 tons
-Consumables: 1 year

PETS:
Avian - Avian is a Correlian Banshee bird that Ten is great friends with. This bird can scout out large areas when Terrrak calls upon it. His ship is also named after this companion.

PERSONALITY:
As a young boy, Tenhuff Terrrak had a rather adventurous and brave streak. That evolved to a rather wise explorer of a scout. Terrrak eventually developed the "everyman" persona. He has a dry sense of humor, quick to help others, but can also be temperamental. He is also very dedicated to his work, but is often more interested in money. Terrrak is very protective of friends or others he cares about, and quick to help those who cannot help themselves. Ten is also very quick-witted, finds humor in many of the dangerous situations he finds himself in, and makes mistakes and fumbles his way through situations. Terrrak is visually unscathed emotionally by the amount of danger endured throughout his adventures. Despite what Terrrak has gone through, he still maintains a light-hearted magnanimous personality. Despite his outward personality, Terrrak is quite an intelligent and wise man. Not to mention he is deftly cunning. His bravery allows him to perform death defying stunts with little fear. He does however know most of the scout skills.
Based on characters played by Nolan North

BIOGRAPHY:
Tenhuff "Ten" Terrrak was born on the planet Taris to a middle-class family in the middle city of Taris. He was raised to believe in good and that humor was the greatest medicine. He took to exploration of the undercity in his youth and had many adventures in which he found many things. Soon he became semi-famous and was called, "The Undercity Scout". At age sixteen, eighteen in Tarisian years, he was approached by a Tarisian Noble while Terrrak was traversing the upper city. The noble asked him to take a ship, 1000 credits, and a scout's outfit to explore one of the four moons of Taris. Seeing this as a chance to find adventure, Terrrak went against the wishes of his parents to the moon. It was a relatively exciting experience, for Ten has only received basic training with a ship at the time. However he eventually pulled through it and reported back to the noble. Terrrak then explained to his mother and father his new career choice and they realized they couldn't stop him. With his parent's blessing he set out on his job. For four standard years after that, Tenhuff "Ten" Terrrak was living his dream of being a successful scout.

KILLS:
N/A

DUELING RING MATCHES:
N/A

GRAND TOURNAMENT MATCHES:
N/A

ROLE-PLAYS:
N/A
 
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So he's not bad at anything? That seems a bit over powered to me.
 

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You say he's a scout but you go on to describe a super soldier capable of hacking computers, working with explosives, piloting ships, repairing anything, healing anyone, and on top of all that he's an expert marksman. Scout's need nothing but speed and a bit of stealth. They aren't supposed to be setting explosives and hacking mainframes they're supposed to get in, scout an area, and get out. Hence, the name. So yes, I say he is over powered because he's good at basically everything and he lacks weaknesses.

He isn't balanced as you say. He is stacked to be good at everything. Since he is a scout and not an explosives specialist or a computer specialist you could easily say that his weaknesses lie in his lack of explosives training or computer hacking or healing people or any number of the other abilities you've needlessly given him.
 

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You say he's a scout but you go on to describe a super soldier capable of hacking computers, working with explosives, piloting ships, repairing anything, healing anyone, and on top of all that he's an expert marksman. Scout's need nothing but speed and a bit of stealth. They aren't supposed to be setting explosives and hacking mainframes they're supposed to get in, scout an area, and get out. Hence, the name. So yes, I say he is over powered because he's good at basically everything and he lacks weaknesses.

He isn't balanced as you say. He is stacked to be good at everything. Since he is a scout and not an explosives specialist or a computer specialist you could easily say that his weaknesses lie in his lack of explosives training or computer hacking or healing people or any number of the other abilities you've needlessly given him.


Per Nameless.
Also, a scout vessel of that size is incapable of carrying a Hyperdrive.
 

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Super soldier? If he was a super soldier he would have much more strength, constitution, charisma, and the ability to wear heavy armors. I never said he could repair anything, I'm thinking more of a computer, a droid, or his ship. Not heal anyone either, he is more effective with a single medpac than many of them. He needs to be able to pilot a ship because scouts go to uncharted hyperspace coordinates, and explore planets. He isn't the kind of scout you are thinking of. He's the explorer, adventurer, charter type you read on Wookieepedia. Explosives are for more mining and removal of things in the way. He doesn't actually have any explosives on him at the moment, nor the tools to hack into a mainframe. You don't just pull the resources you need out of your ass! Also he is not good at everything, he would need maximum in all attributes, security skills, persuasive skills, stealth skills, and more resources.

Scouts have high dexterity because they need to traverse dangerous terrain. Scouts also do not just get in, gtfo, and report what they saw. They go on adventures in the places they go.

Edit: No actually it's not as big as the picture I just don't really have exact lengths. Scout vessels do however hold three people sometimes, a cargo area, and the cockpit.
 

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Rawr my guy is awesome. Ima rant your ass off and hope you don't argue back.

Yes, overpowered means lacking weakness. You described the weaknesses of his skills in your last post, so what's stopping you from expanding them in the profile? Lack of motivation to care about having a good character? As for the whole 'scout' concept, this isn't copy-paste out of a D&D book, or whatever, so 'classes' aren't absolute. You can be a scout, but quoting skills and stats from wookieepedia doesn't allow you to have a character with no weaknesses.

Being good in something does not necessarily mean being the best at everything. Anything above average is considered good. The average itself isn't a weakness either. In your strengths and weaknesses section you mention that he is wiser than a soldier and a scoundrel, yet overall that gives us little to no information about his weaknesses. What does he excel at? In which fields does he shake his head and go, "naw man"?

Why do you refer to him as "Nate" in the personality?

Pokakka said:
As a young boy, Tenhuff Terrrak had a rather adventurous and brave streak. That evolved to a rather wise explorer of a scout. Terrrak has the "every-man" persona. He has a dry sense of humor, quick to help others, but can also be temperamental. He is also very dedicated to his work, but is often more interested in money. Terrrak is very protective of friends or others he cares about, and quick to help those who cannot help themselves. Nate is also very quick-witted, finds humor in many of the dangerous situations he finds himself in, and makes mistakes and fumbles his way through situations. Terrrak is visually unscathed emotionally by the amount of danger endured throughout his adventures. Despite what Terrrak has gone through, he still maintains a light-hearted magnanimous personality. Despite his outward personality, Terrrak is quite an intelligent and wise man. Not to mention he is deftly cunning. His bravery allows him to perform death defying stunts with little fear.

Personally, I'd get rid of the IQ rating before someone gets on you about that. Is it really necessary? Not at all. The need to attach statistics to your character's D&D based stats doesn't really help you in the long run. Though I do have to admit that saying his brain is big makes me picture that he has a big head. Should make a lovely popping sound when a bullet hits it. B:
 

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He has weaknesses... Like if he doesn't particularly have explosives, a computer spike, spare parts, a blaster rifle, a sword, or even a pazaak deck, he won't be able to use his demolition, computer usage, repair skills, ect. respectively. So really right now he only has language, piloting, awareness, treating injury(he has one medpac), and good with a blaster pistol. The weakness right now is lack of resources. Also I just used wookieepedia because nameless did not know what kind of scout he particularly was.

I really don't like the last sentence of your second paragraph specifically for the naw man. However you want know where he says no? Stealth, Force Powers, Security, close range fighting, persuasive skills, and once again all other skills if he doesn't have the proper tools.

His original name used to be Nate Arbiter however I realized if I was going to base him off of Nolan North's characters than probably shouldn't keep the Nate.

His head isn't large, I just have no picture right now. Frankly I am keeping all things that describe out the stats more. Description is why I put those in.

Also do not mock me in false quoting me... How about you go into my other character Okarr Kerr and mock me there?
 
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He has weaknesses... Like if he doesn't particularly have explosives, a computer spike, spare parts, a blaster rifle, a sword, or even a pazaak deck, he won't be able to use his demolition, computer usage, repair skills, ect. respectively. So really right now he only has language, piloting, awareness, treating injury(he has one medpac), and good with a blaster pistol. The weakness right now is lack of resources. Also I just used wookieepedia because nameless did not know what kind of scout he particularly was.

Those are materialistic weaknesses. If you give a cripple a machine gun he can kill a city. If you give the average joe a computer spike and a 'how to use' manual, well he'll be able to hack 'em like a pro. Lack of resources in and of itself is not a weakness. Now, if your character solely relies on specific items to be good at anything, then that is a weakness.

I really don't like the last sentence of your second paragraph specifically for the naw man. However you want know where he says no? Stealth, Force Powers, Security, close range fighting, persuasive skills, and once again all other skills if he doesn't have the proper tools.

His original name used to be Nate Arbiter however I realized if I was going to base him off of Nolan North's characters than probably shouldn't keep the Nate.

Those are all trained skills, thus it would make sense if your character doesn't know how to do them.

So, you just recreated a former char of yours?

His head isn't large, I just have no picture right now. Frankly I am keeping all things that describe out the stats more. Description is why I put those in.

T'was a joke boss.

Also do not mock me in false quoting me... How about you go into my other character Okarr Kerr and mock me there?

Lawl.

I'm not doing this to mock you. That would be a waste of time and effort. Instead, I'm trying to help you out with your character so that you have a solid base. The name of the game is improvement, and everyone plays. So before you get pissed off and rant at me about bashing you, take a deep breath and think about why I'm writing any of this. Then, once you are sure you won't flip a shit, take a look at this post again and consider how you can improve your char.

Btw, I'm suggesting that you expand the strengths and weaknesses section. Add the things that you've been telling me here to that section. Even write a note that says that he epically fails without the right materials. I'd also suggest expanding the history a bit, mostly by adding information that ties in how he developed to his current goals.
 
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Also do not mock me in false quoting me... How about you go into my other character Okarr Kerr and mock me there?

It wasn't mocking you, it was so that other people would not be inconvenienced by a long post that contained largely what they had already read.

Also, just because you wrote one character who has no issues, it does not absolve you from criticism on your other characters. That's like me writing a serious attempt at a galactic God, then defending it by saying that Jairo Light is a good profile.
 

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It wasn't mocking you, it was so that other people would not be inconvenienced by a long post that contained largely what they had already read.

Also, just because you wrote one character who has no issues, it does not absolve you from criticism on your other characters. That's like me writing a serious attempt at a galactic God, then defending it by saying that Jairo Light is a good profile.

I didn't particularly get what you meant by the whole "just because you wrote one character..." because that is not what I was suggesting lol.
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I know, but to say he is good at everything is to simplify it a little to much is what I was trying to say. There are many things he still doesn't know.

He's been in the scout's profession for five standard years, he would have had to learn those to get along.

No he is not a former character of mine I just renamed this one.

I know it was a joke. It was just the perfect time to insert the fact I don't have a picture just yet.

I know you are trying to help me with my character, but the quote at the top was just unnecessary. I am actually not pissed yet I have stages to go before my true rage comes out and stabs people I know. By the way I am quite psychopathic.
 
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How about you go into my other character Okarr Kerr and mock me there?

Then what was this suggesting? That he actually go and use your other thread as a place to mock you?
 

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You might as well put "do not critique" at the front of the profile, because every time someone offers constructive criticism you go off on them.

> reiterates everyone else's complaints

P.S: Only make your character a genius if you are too. Are you a genius?
 

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A 'yes' or 'no' one.
 

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My question was a rhetorical one. At the risk of sounding like an ass:

Yes.

edit: well at least smarter than the average bear.
 
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Risk acknowledged. At least you knew it would end up like that before you said it.

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