How about Malz is sent to a planet suffering from a recent outbreak, and since he's not the best at lightsaber combat, Seamus is made to tag along to protect him, and Malz can teach him compassion.
Hey, just so you know, I didn't mean to undercut anyone with that mission thread. I asked Rev for permission to do that mission and he agreed Jedi Mission thread peage 2, and I wasn't aware that anyone had already started that mission...
I actually have some plans with that RP, thanks for checking it out though, much appreciated, could use you in the future for it I'm sure. Kind of have a long string of events to tie together Caed/Rev/Val I hope. Though if you have an idea for it, PM it my way and I may use it :)
IT seems a bit more to me. But I was trying to use the way she spoke and the tone of it to sort of relay that masculinity that she has; she was raised by some dude, no mother, and I was trying to emphasize that...
As for grammar, I need a bit of help finding the errors, if you could help me out. I know you were trying to be kind, but If I am making errors like this I would prefer that you foregoe kindness.