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It all began 1800 years ago. The events that lead up to the me being this order. We Shall begin with a Small Introduction of myself. OF the Present time, and will move from start from the past to Present.

Introduction:

I am Noshi, The Dark Councilor of Council Member of this Order. I am Powerful, and I get to sit on my on Flashy Chair, as a Dark Council Member of the Order. It brings the Joy for me, I Have a Vesta amount of Techniques, I am a Powerful Lightsaber Combat user, And I have a lot of Knowledge.

Beginning Age 100 and the past:

My story begins in a Little Village, Invested with small huts,a combat zone, and a Studying Hall. And a transport ship. When I was born, I was simply a Young baby Neti, Already capable of simply studying on my feet and walking, but not speaking yet, I believe, My monetarily must be clouding not sure, anyway. As I begun to age like humans do, Normal, And Grow, I begun to study and learn how to read and write, in many languages, and I have been practicing ever since. Once, I have been studying till the age of 56, I got kind of bored, and then wondered of into the forest. I saw, something something great. Like a similar form of a flash of light, it seemed great and wonderful as if the sun was near my face but was not, then a gust of wind, and it seemed as if a figured simply blurred past me, and caused me to be sent flying a few fer back. It seemed unreal, but this have me the chance to go into studying more and more, As I grew and aged normally I questioned the Human's Life span, How come they aged the same way we did, but they died so early, roughly if very healthy, one hundred and twenty years, while be may live to five thousand to nine thorough before we have hit Decline, and start dieing of old age. I decided, I would research this more. Year One Hundred came slow and boring for me, I decided to move, to a deficient island on my planet, for more research and study, and learning center.

Year 200 And below:

I have been transported at age one Hundred and to a bigger and stronger village that held more stuff. Through this, I have developed more knowledge of the Native languages, Cultures, And Knowledge around the world, and it's species so much to do, in so much time to expend my knowledge to everyone. We rarely had any form or type of Attacks on other village, but there was rumors of rogue force users that were traveling accepting students for training, in return a bit or a few weeks of rest,food,water, and bed. I for one disliked the idea, so it was a bit boring, at first seeing all of them do this tricks, and seeing us all being force users, it was like a nest of force users in one planet. Fifty years Pasted, and I had reviewed and studied new things and taken professions. Boring thing. Not much to say, come year two hundred of my age something happened.

600 and Below:

At age hundred I was forced to go with a Rogue force user for training, and we had went towards the Woods, I seemed outraged but I showed no sigh of emotion, or farcical expression. But his the Force User knew, somehow or another that something troubled me even if I had not showed it, As we went deeper into the words, there was a large house. Unlike the rest we had this one actually was large. He sat down and questioned me, about if I wish to learn and how it will help me if I was taught how to use the force. I agreed and disagreed at the same time. It was on different Terms of course, In other cases I decided to give it a Chance. As Time Passed, 50 years or so, I have done nothing but simple knowledge studying, and another 50 years past proscription work, and 100 other years pasted, language studying, that was a total of 200 good years. Of bloody knowledge and Language learning as well as Profession studying. I questioned about why he had not died yet, he told me simply he lived a long time. It was at least one up side, he was long lived also. Noshi sighed, then he was given another task, his last one before he would begin his real training or so, To work his body out with water, or food. Food would be easy because the Neti's don't really need food at all, to live on, a simple drip of water will last us 2 or three months without the need of water. A Bottle will let us have no water or food for yer or three, before we wish to drink again. So, it wouldn't be a problem, the Force User gave him a half of glass of of a large bottled water, enough to contain three bottles of water. It was simple drink this in order to pass the first part which I did. And was radical powered up, meaning I was no longer bored or tired. Similar to human Energy Drinks but Water in Neti language. I consumed the whole water, which will allow me to Not die of oxygen, next he gave me simple retina and excitements, I did well. Then came the hard part. I had to work my body out for a radical amount of time, now stop. This took 200 years. To do, before he pasted me for the real training I was beat and exulted, And Tired. He gave me water so I can get powered up, meaning my energy to go up, and tireless to get away.

1000 And Below the Hard Training of Lightsaber Forms and Combat:

For Four Hundred Years, I turned in three Lightsaber forms I was Taught, And One Style. This was my hardest thing I did so far, In that time. Doing all the studying with big Text Books, With 100 thundery Pages. In little time before practicing the form, was brain washing but It was great that I was able to do this well. I am not going to go in depth of how this went out, because it might be long and gruesome or short and sweet, but it was painful and hard, at the Age I only master One Form, The First one, out of the Four Hundred Years of training. Which Disappointment me because I expected more from myself.

1500 And Below The Gruesome Force Training, Years of Pain, Sweat, Agony, And tireless:

As my Lightsaber Comabt had been gone and pushed aside for now, I had now been trained in the ways of the force, And Taught both Light and Dark Side Force Techniques, Both Deadly, And Helpful, dangerous, And Aid full, Radical Deadly, And Healing fully. As Years Passed, Four Hundred Years. I had mastered only a Few Very Dark and Powerful yet angoras Techniques of the Dark Side, and Had Mastered a Lot of the Light Side. And Aside from that my Master was getting tired and weak, there was a few things he showed me in past 40 years that I did not master, and in the Last 60 Year I have been Taught How to Use Telekinetic Lightsaber Combat. Which I mastered Quick. After he Had passed away.

1509 And Below, The Old Master Passes Away:

The Death was sad and painful to watch when someone so close to you, and taught you lot dies in front of your eyes of a painful heart attack. Maybe it was just how life is unsuppressed and lonely, I had buried in body, instead of burning it, and Had placed and tomb on it, saying my peers.

1690 And Below Continuous of Lightsaber Combat: In the mean time I had been studying and training In Lightsaber Combat having Mastered Both Form one and Two, and the Telekinetic Lightsaber Combat Style. I decided to Focus on training my Third Form, Which I did well but grew tired of, So I begun to Pick up Learning two handed Combat, It was harder then Expected, I was able to Only use the Form At Padawan mastery at the time. Later raised it to, Knight Level. And Gave on that also.

1750 and Below Final Training of my Force Usage: After 2 years passed I decided to Train my Force techniques I have not mastered hoping to master them, and proved Pointless, Although I manged to work some of it up, It was point without a Master no Matter how Great I was.

1800 and Below the Council Hood:

Upon leaving the Planet Later, I was Recited by an Unnamed Force, And Taken, I passed the trails Outstanding Fast, In half of year and so, Should great know and technique. Promoted into a Shadow, and Did mission and taken students of my Own, Before I was Promoted to Master 20 years later after being promoted To Shadow, Learning more and More, and continuing my Continue, I had a Unshapely In counter, But didn't take it To strange. After Words, In 10 years Promoted into a prophet, Then Choose to be a Dark Councilor. And I accepted it, At the Year of 1770, I have been working my ass off training, Lightsaber Combat, the Force, Knowledge, Etc. Till the Year 1800 I still left a few things in my story line, not worth maintaining Hope you enjoyed readers.



Name: Noshi
Species: Neti
Age: 1800
Affiliation: The Second Order of Lettow
Main Rank: Dark Council Member
Gear: Wears, a Robe, given to by the Order, and , His stranded stuff, He has a Ship, It's medium to large, Contains, fast Hyper solace, Weapon storage, Room, Everything you basically need. Carries, 4 Lightsabers, Around his waist, and some in hidden places, Crystals are all red.

Forms:
Form I: Shii-Cho****
Form II: Makashi****
Form III: Soresu **
Telekinetic Lightsaber combat***

Hopeful*
Padawan**
Knight***
Master****
Council*****
Grandmaster******


Force Powers:
Force Sense****
Force Push***
Force Pull***
Force Defend***
Force Jump***
Force Leap***
Force Speed****
Force Sight ****
Force Absorption****
Force Deflection***
Force Concealment***
Force Cloak****
Force Whirlwind***
Force Heal*****
Force Choke***
Force Lightning(Brown Rare Color)**
Plant Surge****
Force Storm***
Force Destruction***
Protection Bubble***
Tapas***
Telekinesis****
Telepathy***
Hibernation Trance*****
Deadly Sight****
Psychometry***
Mind Trick**
Battle Precognition***

Hopeful*
Padawan**
Knight***
Master****
Council*****
Grandmaster******



Threads:
I used to know who I was...


Second Order of Lettow Threads:
Treaty of Kalakar VI
Convening the Dark Council
Vampire's Sin

Training Threads:
Full Moon (Luna White's training)
 
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I would really recommend cutting out quite a few of those powers. That is a mighty list you have there.
 

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I would really recommend cutting out quite a few of those powers. That is a mighty list you have there.

I will, once Ten's Get's on and tells me what to fix, If He does not, I will condire it myself.
 

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You've NEVER HAD A COUNCIL LEVEL CHARACTER BEFORE.

This means you can't make a character of that level of power.

Unless, of course, you have admin approval. And, if you did, I'd still cut out quite a few of the powers, or, at least reduce your skill in them.
 

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You've NEVER HAD A COUNCIL LEVEL CHARACTER BEFORE.

This means you can't make a character of that level of power.

Unless, of course, you have admin approval. And, if you did, I'd still cut out quite a few of the powers, or, at least reduce your skill in them.

Relax, Will. I was given Permission by the Faction Leader.
 

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You've NEVER HAD A COUNCIL LEVEL CHARACTER BEFORE.

This means you can't make a character of that level of power.

Unless, of course, you have admin approval. And, if you did, I'd still cut out quite a few of the powers, or, at least reduce your skill in them.

I bet yoda knew twice as many, and he's double how old yoda was before he died.
 

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This char is utterly rediculous. Wayyy too many force powers
 

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This character is ludicrously overpowered, Zen. As you've never had a council level character before, I'm going to have to ask you to tone everything down. You may only have 2 forms, INCLUDING Telekinetic Lightsaber Combat; that means TK Saber Combat + 1 other form, and that's it. [I'm counting TK Saber Combat as a form for balance reasons]

The highest power you may have is 'Master' level, and you should have one or two master level powers at absolute most. I'm also going to have to ask you to remove both forms of Precognition as well as Doppleganger.
 

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What about the 20 lightsabers?
 

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Fff, didn't even notice that. Sorry Zen, but I'm also going to have to ask that you only start with two or three lightsabers.
 

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Fff, didn't even notice that. Sorry Zen, but I'm also going to have to ask that you only start with two or three lightsabers.

The two Force Powers taken out as told.

I toned down the Powers a Bit, As requestioned.

I took out Dual Combat, Away Telekinetic lightsaber Reduced to Knight Level, And Lightsabers reduced from 20 to 4? IS that good? Anything else needs changed?
 

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Relax, Will. I was given Permission by the Faction Leader.

Was this an indie faction leader? I don't think they can give permission for people to make council level characters...

If they can and I'm wrong, I'm joining every indie faction and making all my characters councillor level.


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He's still got way too many Master level powers, Zen, one grandmaster level power that I saw, and one councilor level power. If you can keep toning it down, that'd be lovely. You need to have -mostly- Knight level powers, and like I said, one or two master level powers are OK. There should be no Councilor or Grandmaster level powers without permission from the faction leader of one of the main force sensitive factions, and if your char is indie [which he is] then you need staff permission. That said, I'm perfectly fine letting you keep Telekinesis or Healing at Councilor level, but not both! :3

So, again, almost all of his powers should be Knight level, with a few Master level powers, and -one- Council level power. Less than a third of his list of powers should be Master level.

Thanks for cooperating Zen, and remember, you can always train up to gain mastery over your powers later. =D
 

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Hibernation Trance Is Council, Due because it's a Race learned Skill. If you want me change then very well. And Heal is another Council Move. Others Are either Padawan, Knights, And 4 or five master techniques. IS that better? If not I can tone them done more if you like?If not I am all set?
 

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Much better, thanks. The Hibernation and Healing powers are fine right where they are. I think you're good to go - just note that Choke and Deadly Sight cannot be used against non-Force Sensitives, and Deadly Sight may or may not have to be removed. I've yet to discuss the power with the other admins, so depending on our ruling we might have to ask you to take it out.
 

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Much better, thanks. The Hibernation and Healing powers are fine right where they are. I think you're good to go - just note that Choke and Deadly Sight cannot be used against non-Force Sensitives, and Deadly Sight may or may not have to be removed. I've yet to discuss the power with the other admins, so depending on our ruling we might have to ask you to take it out.


I know, And very well.
 
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