The character game

[Bantha]

Like: His age, I like seeing people playing "older" characters, I.e. not in their twenties or thirties. The second picture is nice as well, and a solid character overall.

Dislike: The squares that signify stats like strength look odd with the two colors chosen. Its just not that aesthetically pleasing. Also is the little things like 'optional description goes here' under his ship. The personality section is sparse. I really don't know him as a character.

Atlas

 

[Mr. Mischief]

Like: Everything... In all honesty, this is one of my favorite characters that I've come across on the forum. You tell her story well and it meshes well with everything else regarding her... very nice.

Dislike: The formatting forces me to scroll while viewing on my phone, which is a minor thing. Besides that... I haven't RPed with her.

Gideon Lewis

 

[Latte]

I really love all the different pictures supplied, as well as the fun fact section at the end. I really love Gideon's concept. :)

Dislike: The font, I guess... nothing I dislike, really.

Sasha

 

[The Derp of Hooves]

@Gideon: Like: Cool character concept and nice Saul format you got there :3 also like the picture ^-^

Dislike: not much tbh....


edit: Gaah nija'd lol

anywho sasha: seems like a good guy ^-^

Dislike: idk why but i'm not too big of a fan of 'noble' characters....

Mire

 

[Niklas]

Ninja'd!

Well, she's pretty badass, and that's all I have to say.

Kyle Crosby, please.

 

[Latte]

Like: The personal entry for him, and the picture. :D

Dislike: No pretty colors in the text

Fenn

 

[Chairdor]

Like: Shes a Waste Ranger! That and the general information gather in the profile. Accessible, but with depth

Dislike: That pic in the middle is WAAAAY too big

Sarita Fay

 

[Gamov]

Like: The whole damn character!

Dislike: I got nothin'.

Eh, take your pick.

 

[Paradox]

Like: Borderlands character! Kinda lol a good character all the way around. (In case no one got I chose Lexi Frost, I chose Lexi Frost)

Dislike: Nothing except you have too many characters with cold last names :isee:

Vaeyor Ysolda - In Sig

 

[Kaane]

Like: Everything you were going for with this character you nailed. Makes me feel the need to give some of my characters a literary component to their profile...what you put down for your charrie was short but beautiful in the classic, bittersweet, tragic way. Also I always enjoy characters with indomitable wills, especially after going through what yours did.

Dislike: Two things: One: I have no idea where this guy's story will lead, so I can't RP with him until I do T_T.
Two: NEEDS MOAR JUSTICE!

Take your pick. Whichever one needs the most work in your opinion, gimme sumadat feedback.

 

[Paradox]

Likes: The freaking happy mask salesman from Majora's Mask!!!

Dislikes: You haven't used him enough or the fact that one of his alias's isn't Citizen Kaane.

Oden Rahl - In Sig

 

[Naruto667]

likes: o hai there Snow lookalike =P lol it's very descriptive I likey

dislikes:...we haven't had jaz and your guy meet up yet..shame on us

Jaz corban (it's in mah sig..and don't judge me too harshly =( )

 

[Latte]

Judging you so harshly right now. :unamused:

No, no, I kid.

Like: Super in depth, and the quotes to split up sections in his biography
Dislike: No pictures :(

My asshole Count of Serenno, please.

 

[Befallen]

Like: He's an asshole. The galaxy needs more than them. He's also pretty likeable in that kind of way. His profile is also in-depth, but concise. It tells everything that needs to be told without give too much away. Plus, with the expanded sections you get a better understanding of him. And since, he's influenced by Professor X, what's not to like?

Dislike: He's broke. And his mansion is hilariously weird.



My Neepo! Mack!

 

[Chairdor]

Like: He has delusions of grandeur just like me except ill totally get my grandeur

Dislike: Hes a Neepo, neepos are crap. Also you're metric conversion thing for your height isn't set up

Cross, my Neepo!

 

[The Derp of Hooves]

like: personality wise = awesome everything else = awesome

dislike: he's not a ranger :/

ima go with yuunda since i redid his profile and stuffs... its still kinda in the works but its all good

 

[Maxx]

Like: His story towards the end, I'm a little shocked by it.

Dislike: He is no longer a Jedi.

My Character: Death

 

[Defiance]

Bringin' the thread back to criticism.

Death:
Likes— He's a simple character. As a writer, you know how to visualize a scene, and you know how to convey it in a simplistic way. Those skills are key, and I can see that Death does have a persona. You also have a unique concept, something a little different. Not many people have vigilantes that came from rags. Further development could turn him into a solid character.

Dislikes— You have an issue with tense, where you can switch between past and present a lot. It's a common problem. But in the bio, it distracts from the reader. If you worked on that, you're bio would turn out to be a lot more powerful. Some parts of his story are a little lacking. You put so much detail into the discovery of the knife, but you sort of rush through the scene with the homeless guy getting beaten up. I personally think the experience would be just as powerful as the knife and would like to see the same kind of detail put into that.


Azazel.

 

[Gamov]

Like: The writing is simply superb! You convey very dramatic and powerful scenes so smoothly and with little effort. Normally I am not the biggest fan of 1st​ person perspectives in writing, but this was just so well done that to have it written as a third person narration would be doing the character a disservice.

Dislike: For me personally, the first section reads like something straight out of one of those god-awful Saw movies. Granted, you described nowhere near the levels of gore apparent in one of those movies, but it was most certainly implied and didn't necessarily appeal to me.

Molok

 

[Bee]

Like: He's big and scary but not a typical beer-and-broads brute, which is a trope that seems to pop up a lot. And of course, the backstory you have for him is really well-written! "There is no such thing as innocence, only degrees of guilt" was pretty great, too. Dat Warhammer doe.

Dislike: "Lamprey-like mouth."

Oh right: Aixa. I guess. She's still really new!