The character game

[Chairdor]

Like: Indie force sensitive with a bit of a bad girl streak

Dislike: While you use the narrative format, the story feels so rigid it's almost as if I'm reading the standard template

 

[Defiance]

You forgot to put a character.

 

[Chairdor]

Sorry bout that

Hiro

 

[Saul Perth]

Like: ROBOT COWBOY

Dislike: I'm not a fan of the literary profile setup.

Viktor Thule

 

[Tribunal Power]

Viktor Thule

LIKE: A good start to a decent character, looks like a fun merc.
DISLIKE: Not a lot of information presented, though I'm sure he'll build more through RPing. The profile looks kinda bland, could use some color and fonts. Also I'm not a fan of using overtly recognizable characters as pics, but that's just my preference.

Lorelei Melrava

 

[Sophia McLaren-Cobb]

Like: Everything :CHappy
Dislike: Nothing

Venelin Krayt (link is in Other Characters Spoiler)

 

[©razy Man]

Like: The last name Krayt :D
Dislike: The picture looks like a chick xD

Aniad 'The Vengeful'

 

[Chairdor]

Like: Your personality and Bio sync so very very well, a former slave would find trust hard and would certainly be a hard worker

Dislike: He wears his faction loyalty on his sleeve, literally, I'd think after living life as a slave the person would desire less affiliation and more freedom, but that's your call


The Voice

 

[Lucid]

Like: His eyebrows.

Dislike: He's really ****ing long winded.

Andreas.

 

[Sophia McLaren-Cobb]

Like: Overall history
Dislike: Nothing

Venelin Krayt

 

[Saul Perth]

Like: Umbaran, cool race
Dislike: His stats seem a bit off, but everyone views them differently.

Saul Perth (new and improved for post-timeskip spy action!)

 

[Sophia McLaren-Cobb]

Like: Overall amazing character
Dislike: Would look better with narrative format (See Venelin Krayt for example)

Zextripon

 

[Endling vas Precious]

Like: Nothing, to be honest. It's a fairly average "Ragh I'm Angry" profile.
Dislike: Nothing is particularly fleshed out. It's boring.

Otja Blume.

 

[Tank]

Like: The picture, but I like all of your work so that's a given. Also the idea behind that character, several different bodies, ect. Solid unique concept.

Dislike: Text size/color. Something about it makes it hard to read. The size and color complement the theme of the profile but it's a little hard to read.

Landon Fox.

 

[Sophia McLaren-Cobb]

Like: Overall profile
Dislike: Some history on Landon Fox would be nice

Stella Servana

 

[Wit]

Like: The entire concept of uploading your conscience into a new body. Oh and that line, "On bodies?" Got me giggling.
Dislike: I donno, I really liked the profile. OK, here's one, the fact that she doesn't dress like Guinevere. :P

Lucian Fel, need some feedback on improving him.

EDIT: This was for Ling. Will fix it for Servana in a bit.

 

[Chairdor]

Like: I was really gripped by your characters monologue on his family, it felt so simple and thus so real, even though this guy is in a galaxy far far away he has family issues just like all of us

Dislike: Dang...I hate doing this cause I know you want to improve, but AHA I found something, third to last paragraph, "On her command I was put on a regime to help me get myself back on track"

It is regimen not regime!

Sorry I'm just glad I found something to nit pick in that pile of amazing


Lucky Kess Tel'May please

 

[Sophia McLaren-Cobb]

Like: Twi'lek mercenary
Dislike: Nothing

Wisp Lee

 

[Bubák]

What should I say to that? It's a WIP in a very early stage of development. I don't know what more would you like to hear, as there is not enough info to make a good picture about him. Why did the Sith kill his parents though? The Sith are known to be merciless killers, but they don't just kill completely random people to show their super dark evil evilness. Yet, when characters of another side than the Empire want to have a super sad and dramatic event in their life, they write how a random Sith killed their parents/brother/sister/son/daughter/wife/husband/friend/pet for no reason. I hate those walking stereotypes.

Avreet Zatarus

 

[Kalrim]

Like: his lightsabers
Dislikes: his personality, not evil enough for my taste.

Mal Hagui