The character game

[Nor'baal]

Like: The thought and detail that has gone into this is certainly impressive.

Dislike: Its a good profile - and I know I am not one to talk - but I spy a few spelling errors. As for the character you need to get 'more done' with it, get them out and about in the galaxy, maybe add in a PC's met section. Also, coding, coding instead of spoilers!

Character: Nor'baal

 

[Minuteman75]

Like: This is one of the most impressive profiles of a gangster character I have read on this forum. It is especially good in how you gave a balanced attention to his achievements and setbacks and how these events affected him. The list of his contacts and associates is awesome as well along with his bank account.

Dislike: The only thing I see is missing in my opinion is a list of role-play threads he has been part of. Then again you must've not done that for a good reason.

Character: Forim Viridux

 

[Niklas]

I like Duros characters.

Any of my characters

 

[Loco]

As much as I hate playing these games, I really do want constructive criticism/good natured hatred of the way I'm working my newer profiles, layout wise.


As for above: I reviewed Wraith.

I like- Colin Farrel. And for some reason I always have a fondness for CorSec officers, probably because Coran Horn.

I dislike- Empty fields. This may just be personal preference, but when someone doesn't have a ship, or droids, etc, I'd rather them just omit the field than say "none" or leaving the copy/paste description from the template. Also, if you've used the character since you posted it in 2012, I'd like to see links to what he's done and where he's been, RP wise.



I'd like reviews on my only current surviving character- Arya. Link in sig. I acknowledge in advance that it still says "rewrite in progress", but I want to know if I'm on the right track before I continue.

 

[Rom]

Arya

Like -- the name, the image, the way the reports from other people perfectly explains her roles and abilities as a character.

Dislike -- I'd like a few more details from her POV. It's one thing to have other people describe and attest to a personality but having a blurb from her own point of view, a journal entry or something, to me would go a long way towards making the character more relatable.

Vereor.

The character, not the profile if possible. The profile is messy and in need of edits :X

 

[Niklas]

I've got nothing bad to say about Darth. I wouldn't fight him. Never.

As for my dudes, Rowan Corliss

 

[Fang.]

Like: He is a sneaky Bastard, Dislike: how short the personality and bio is.


My character: Vandheer Tarwae

 

[Loco]

Like: He is a sneaky Bastard, Dislike: how short the personality and bio is.


My character: Vandheer Tarwae

Like: Looks like a badass, and has a neatly laid out profile.

Dislike: You should be careful of falling into the "I murdered my parents" trap in a sith- it can work, but it needs some special consideration. Boli has a bit on character backgrounds regarding such down in the help forum that I like to re-read occasionally. Also, I couldn't help but notice you have a section for lightsaber form, but all it currently contains is the copy/paste wording for the section. That's a personal pet peeve of mine more than anything else- a lot of people do it.


Arya, siggy, for me. I've made some changes since Rom reviewed the profile.

 

[Niklas]

Like: She's an awesome Mando.

Dislike: None really.

Y'all should check my new character Kyle Crosby.

 

[Miz]

Like: parkour

Dislike: Intelligence but sees now flaws within himself

Next: Mitsuki Al mystereo

 

[The Derp of Hooves]

Like: Young, innocent and ignorant. I like these sort of characters ^-^ she should meet Yuunda some day lol...

Dislike: Sith... Why corrupt her so young lol... also minor things about the profile... if her intelligence is her weakest aspect, how can she have advance knowledge of engineering?

Yuunda

 

[Tunnel Rat]

Like: I like the badassery hidden behind a seemingly generic man. I've always enjoyed characters (not just in roleplay) that seem very normal and yet can do so much.

Cons: I think if you really worked at the profile (I understand it's formatted for quick and easy "get to the RP"), I think it would be a lot better and easier to read. The character has a lot of potential and some of it is drawn down by the profile itself. That's really my only con. Great work!


Kito

 

[Bee]

This thread is a really good way to pass the time.

Kito: I really enjoy the level of effort and detail that went into this profile. It looks nice, and the backstory flows pretty well and is easy to read.

I don't really have any criticism. I'm one of those jerks who doesn't really go in for the ultra-Asian influenced characters and I have a pet peeve re: katanas in Star Wars (though I'm trying to get over that!) so while they bug me, they aren't necessarily bad things about the character or the profile, if that makes sense at all. Maybe make a list of Force techniques he's aware of? Hell if I know.

Don't feel obligated to review my character. I've only got the one, and I threw her in for critique a couple pages ago.

 

[Marf]

Like: A well thought out character that is always enjoyable to read in RPs.

Dislike: I dislike how in her profile, you've relied on tropes and archetypes to describe her personality. The full extent of her complexity and originality would be done more justice if you described her personality from scratch, in your own words. Her biography could also be much more detailed, so the reader can get an idea of how her past experiences have shaped her into the person she is.

Satoryu.

 

[Srota]

Likes: Incredibly detailed, I enjoyed the clear amount of effort you put into her, and how you used some external resources to explain more about who she is.

Dislikes: I would prefer a brighter color for the dialogue portions, the maroon/red can be hard to see at times.

Halisstrad

 

[Nirvana]

I like that he is well written, from what I have read so far. But I can't give a to good opinion since he is such a new character and I've yet to seen him being RP'd.

What I disslike about him is.....Well same as above, I don't really know because I've yet to see him in action.



Gabriel.

 

[Loco]

I like that he is well written, from what I have read so far. But I can't give a to good opinion since he is such a new character and I've yet to seen him being RP'd.

What I disslike about him is.....Well same as above, I don't really know because I've yet to see him in action.



Gabriel.

Like: ****ing everything. Great layout, great use of pics, descriptive without being overkill. Nice use of an Epicanthix hybrid. Good shit. 10/10 would bang, no homo.

Dislike: Not so much a dislike, but a heads up. You may need to resubmit his armor profile on the tech board since it got archived. Also, maybe you could link his old RPs?


Arya wouldn't mind running into him in a dark alley. As pretty as these layouts are, I'm tempted to use a variation of it myself. It wouldn't make much sense, since she would hardly be on imperial radar yet, but even still...

 

[Srota]

Likes: all excellent material as one would expect

Dislikes: i could do without all the info being in spoiler tags.

The compere

 

[Stormthroe]

Likes: First off, love the Exchange. I really wish that in KoTOR 2 you could fully align with their faction. In addition, excellent bio!

Dislikes: To me, the Compere says "thug" more than "crime lord", as the Exchange is known. Be that as it may, I can understand where he can be muscled and smart enough to run the Exchange, but that organization is filled with intrigue, backlot deals, hidden agendas, and the like, and to lead it I feel like a character would require more intelligence and planning/plotting than what I get the vibe from the Compere.

And my character, Kei Arele

 

[Niklas]

I like that he's a Kiffu of noble birth.

Kyle Crosby