AGE: Unknown(Due to Anti-Aging gene, Presumed to be 23 Physical.)
CREDITS: 1,000 maybe? maybe more.
FORCE SENSITIVE: Radically Yes
DEXTERITY: 14/10
SKILLS:
Hand to hand
Knife fighting
Piloting
Battle field medicine
Trained in both Armed and unarmed tactics
Light and Heavy Weapons
Outstanding Free Runner
Expert Martial Artiest
Great Stagiest
Expert Hacking Skills
Program Splicing and Cutting
Remaking Illegal Programs
You guys need to realize Zen has an obsession with long-lived species, to the point where many of his characters in the last timeline were ridiculous hybrids of several long-lived species purely to allow his the reason to have a player aged eleventy thousand or something like that.
Fixed I believe. However I am keeping the Anti-Aging Gene, For two reasons. It's part of his story. And Two, He will eventuality die. And there are many species that live long. I seen a Immortal Species, which is still allowed, but there in extinction I believe, it's What's his name. Forgot his name that had the character looked like a bird.
As receptive to helpful suggestions/criticism as ever, I see.
Fixed I believe. However I am keeping the Anti-Aging Gene, For two reasons. It's part of his story. And Two, He will eventuality die. And there are many species that live long. I seen a Immortal Species, which is still allowed, but there in extinction I believe, it's What's his name. Forgot his name that had the character looked like a bird.
Yes, I had a bird character.
Kay guys, about the anti-aging/immortal thing. Just drop it, it's not worth arguing with him over it. He has an obsession with creating characters that will live for ever.
Zen, we're only trying to help. When we make comments about your char's profile, we do because we think something is a little.. off with it. It's up to you whether you take their advice. However, I'll let you know plainly, it's going to make it difficult to join factions or participate in some threads. When people read your profile to see if they want to RP with it, they're more likely to pass you by.
You actually only took one piece of advice from me in regards to your edits. You changed the Dexterity level, but did not change the Credits description, merge the Hand to Hand Combat skills, remove the Radically Force Sensitive trait, or remove the anti-aging gene. If you're going to insist on having an immortal character that can still die, just make an Anzati character.
The whole "living forever" trait is just stupid in my opinion. I heavily recommend removing it. I would also recommend detailing Leon's history as a mercenary and bounty hunter. If you wish, you may reference his experience in those careers in assisting the Chiss Ascendancy, by either targeting Chiss traitors and criminals, defectors of the military, or providing support on a contracted mission. After that, I would recommend detailing Leon's service in the Chiss Army.
Haven't had time to read the profile in depth, but as pretty much every single comment on this character calls for the removal of the anti-aging gene, I'm going to strongly suggest that you do so. In addition to that, I'm going to ask you to remove the 'radically' Force sensitive, bit. You can just say "yeah, he's force sensitive." I'd rather not have Galen Malek 2.0 romping about on the site.
More to come once I have time to read it through.